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Seeking fantasia's utopia
Fine shards of glasses
tattooed on cut arms
shrapnel from life battles
tears scarred heart
dewy eyes looked towards the sky
seeking flight in the mind
towards crescent moon beyond the sun
a little utopia in fantasia
there was no resounding echo
no one whispered back
words stuck on cracks
of stunted memories
they refused to let go
thorns and barbs
clutching hard the thoughts
making it go in circles
there was no surcease
nothing mattered
except to feel comfortable
enough to lie on a hard bed
tattooed on cut arms
shrapnel from life battles
tears scarred heart
dewy eyes looked towards the sky
seeking flight in the mind
towards crescent moon beyond the sun
a little utopia in fantasia
there was no resounding echo
no one whispered back
words stuck on cracks
of stunted memories
they refused to let go
thorns and barbs
clutching hard the thoughts
making it go in circles
there was no surcease
nothing mattered
except to feel comfortable
enough to lie on a hard bed
Published 25th May 2019
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25th May 2019 11:58am
Strong and evocatively worded poem, with the last two lines
"except to feel comfortable
enough to lie on a hard bed"
... seeming to hammer a cognitive dissonance between a homely desire and an ugly reality.
"except to feel comfortable
enough to lie on a hard bed"
... seeming to hammer a cognitive dissonance between a homely desire and an ugly reality.
25th May 2019 2:04pm
Thank you for reading me Josh, and for the kind comments. Sometimes letting go of some stupid notions can take time and acceptance thereafter difficult.
25th May 2019 10:34pm
Love what Josh had to say. He is an insightful man. Those are the exact words I was going to use when I scrolled down, strong and evocative. Love the melancholy of the third stanza. Surcease is a great word.
Though I hope you'll feel better, it is wonderful to see you here and writing.
D
Though I hope you'll feel better, it is wonderful to see you here and writing.
D
26th May 2019 2:44pm
Dear Daniel. Thank you so much for reading. And giving encouraging comments. I have bouts of melancholy but otherwise coping. 😀
