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MINING AWKWARDNESS
we approached as strangers
not knowing which way
each would go—
we did that little skip
and then we laughed
in unison
not knowing which way
each would go—
we did that little skip
and then we laughed
in unison
Published 7th May 2019
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7th May 2019 7:53pm
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7th May 2019 8:31pm
7th May 2019 8:13pm
7th May 2019 8:31pm
Thanks Josh. I felt giddy walking back to my desk, knowing I was about to write this poem.
7th May 2019 8:26pm
This reminds me of that song 'Same Old Lang Syne' by Fogelberg. It has that same hesitant awkwardness turned magic once they laugh.
7th May 2019 8:32pm
7th May 2019 8:33pm
7th May 2019 8:38pm
"She didn't recognize the face at first
But then her eyes flew open wide
She went to hug me and she spilled her purse
And we laughed until we cried."
My kind of poetry right there
But then her eyes flew open wide
She went to hug me and she spilled her purse
And we laughed until we cried."
My kind of poetry right there
7th May 2019 8:39pm
7th May 2019 9:22pm
For me,
this reads as a playful skip into new fellowships.
Love this Brevity spill
this reads as a playful skip into new fellowships.
Love this Brevity spill
7th May 2019 9:30pm
Thank you. I like that it can have that meaning, and when I was writing it that became one of my intents.
8th May 2019 00:30am
Everyone has said it already..... I'll just say I love the simultaneous simplicity and depth. Stellar little write!
8th May 2019 00:43am
