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Do You Think I'm Beautiful
am I light or am I dark
am I near or far apart
have imperfections imploded
upon my mental mean
is there beauty left inside of me
my eyes have welled and I can't see
sleepless nights encountering
the world wraps round
no answers found
would life make sense
six feet underground
words that linger in a wounded soul
a warrior imprisoned
the bells have tolled
daylight harkens but I'm afraid
thoughts have quickened
and the darkness stayed
if no answers then of what
eyes wide open, the world has shut
*keep me company until there's light*
am I near or far apart
have imperfections imploded
upon my mental mean
is there beauty left inside of me
my eyes have welled and I can't see
sleepless nights encountering
the world wraps round
no answers found
would life make sense
six feet underground
words that linger in a wounded soul
a warrior imprisoned
the bells have tolled
daylight harkens but I'm afraid
thoughts have quickened
and the darkness stayed
if no answers then of what
eyes wide open, the world has shut
*keep me company until there's light*
Author's Note
Got the title and inspiration after reading Tallen
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Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
11th Mar 2019 10:45am
Re: Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
11th Mar 2019 11:12am
Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
11th Mar 2019 10:52am
"daylight harkens but I'm afraid
thoughts have quickened
and the darkness stayed"
dearest Tim I have been there
just recently in fact with my mind racing
with darkness...
I will stay by your side until there is light...
love Brenda
thoughts have quickened
and the darkness stayed"
dearest Tim I have been there
just recently in fact with my mind racing
with darkness...
I will stay by your side until there is light...
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
11th Mar 2019 11:13am
Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
11th Mar 2019 12:12pm
Beauty is not just of the flesh but more so of the soul. I truly believe that.
Fantastic ink.
Fantastic ink.
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Re: Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
11th Mar 2019 12:16pm
Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
Anonymous
- Edited 11th Mar 2019 2:38pm
11th Mar 2019 2:37pm
Your opening lines are perfect they make the whole poem read as if it's a complex riddle... the Riddle of Tim..Clever work:)
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Re: Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
11th Mar 2019 2:54pm
Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
Anonymous
11th Mar 2019 8:39pm
Somehow when I'm reading this I have the sense of trying to catch a breath...like thoughts come faster than inhalations.
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Re: Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
11th Mar 2019 8:41pm
Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
11th Mar 2019 9:03pm
Our times are growing weary Tim...and for some of us it keeps beating the back of our brains and inflicting pain. Powerful ink man...keep looking up!
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re: Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
11th Mar 2019 9:07pm
Thank you Harry, a work friend just passed and my mind has been racing looking for meaning.
Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
I'm not familiar with Tallen but I admire this. "Words linger in a wounded soul" but are finally captured here. Excellent.
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Re: Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
11th Mar 2019 10:33pm
Re: Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
14th Mar 2019 6:26pm
Re. Do You Think I'm Beautiful
14th Mar 2019 6:28pm
Wha?! What spill could cause this spill???
If my spit can cause Beautiful syllables like what I've just read then spit and spill I will !!
Fantastic spill, Brother
If my spit can cause Beautiful syllables like what I've just read then spit and spill I will !!
Fantastic spill, Brother
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14th Mar 2019 6:30pm