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RAIN ON ME
Too sporadically
she fills my sky
heavy-laden with sensuality
torrent of reckless, dangerous thought
replenish erotic cisterns
to my skin am I soaked
with hedonistic desire
too quickly she leaves
breathe deep the heady scent
after the storm lingering.
she fills my sky
heavy-laden with sensuality
torrent of reckless, dangerous thought
replenish erotic cisterns
to my skin am I soaked
with hedonistic desire
too quickly she leaves
breathe deep the heady scent
after the storm lingering.
Published 4th Mar 2019
Author's Note
I am a muse dependent poet. Particular souls connect with mine to inspire and excite.
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4th Mar 2019 3:35am
You just said oh so much in few words. Torrents replenishing your cistern..damn. Plus she's basically sensual doused in laden. I love the concept & you know I love making it rain in writes. Im so glad to see you move past haiku stage. Yay!!
Thank you so much, Pandora. I thought of the awesome sight, sound and scent of a sudden, passing Summer storm. How invigorating. That's how I feel when inspired by a muse. Filled up, ready to overflow on the page. Believe me, you make it rain.
4th Mar 2019 3:52am
Well, heavens bless the muse to keep it raining...now that we've established words... more please.
4th Mar 2019 4:09am
Anonymous
4th Mar 2019 6:56am
To continue the comment conversation....
I for one, hope there is torrential downpour !!
I for one, hope there is torrential downpour !!
4th Mar 2019 7:25am
*sigh* it appears I've been banished to dwell in the desert for now, hopefully the sentence won't be long.
Anonymous
4th Mar 2019 11:39am
Even in the desert, the rains do come and when they do, your flood gates will be open.
6th Mar 2019 4:17pm
6th Mar 2019 4:18pm
4th Mar 2019 7:06am
Passing summer storms can be a good chance, privacy permitting, to get naked and shower in. This is what the poem reminded me of.
6th Mar 2019 4:21pm
4th Mar 2019 7:32am
Give her time, she'll come around when she done pissing in my garden.
Very nice, Bob. Much better than which I was able to muster above.
Very nice, Bob. Much better than which I was able to muster above.
4th Mar 2019 2:46pm
Fabulous write! As pandy said so much said in so few words👏👏 powerful lovely stuff!
6th Mar 2019 4:24pm
Thank you Hunter! My poems have become increasingly shorter. Im writing to my attention span 😁 I appreciate your words of encouragement.
Anonymous
30th Mar 2019 8:49pm
❤
what a gorgeous metaphor
what a gorgeous metaphor
30th Mar 2019 10:51pm
Thank you, Katja! We have a lot of passing thunderstorms in the Summer. Your poetry and presence have that same refreshing effect
30th Mar 2019 10:18pm
30th Mar 2019 10:53pm
I am so glad you like the piece, Tallen. I appreciate your words of encouragement
16th Jul 2020 9:40pm
Circling back around I am glad I found this one. I love the metaphor and this is beautifully written and erotic.
17th Jul 2020 1:17am
I am glad that you found this piece. I could go for some rain bout now. I love love love petrichor and it only happens here when the ground is cool. The poem describes very well my sensual side and I am glad you like that part of me.💞
