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The Scent Of The Night She Was Born
It’s still not too late
as she rises by a hearth
to a knock at the door
this early evening,
carefully wrapping
herself in a long robe
from the night air,
and whoever is there,
so they will think her
a respectable whore.
Yet she sees no one
from a soft light
at the threshold
in the thin clean air
of the Chilean Andes,
with a scent of
cordwood for a fire.
Steps onto the porch,
cane chairs are stacked,
brought to her by men
who buy them from
her as payment.
She is handsome,
still a young woman
but not too much.
She remembers it
like this and no other.
She sits to wait for the
first moon’s light, and
forgets the cigarette
that she lit indoors as
it dwindles & goes out.
And a new memory
tries to surface, for
she has no memory
of being born, or the
one who bore her.
She feels she’s died,
but loses no sleep.
She’ll never weep
for burnt wood
long turned to ash
& knows not why,
but she likes to try
imagining the scent
of the night
she was
born.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 1st Feb 2019
| Edited 22nd Mar 2020
Author's Note
Inspired from two of Neruda’s poems: “A Smell Of Cordwood” & “Births”,
Entered in the Deep competition “The Saddest Lines Written”, hosted by JohnnyBlaze & Ahavati.
Entered in the Deep competition “The Saddest Lines Written”, hosted by JohnnyBlaze & Ahavati.
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Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
Anonymous
1st Feb 2019 7:40am
Jadey,
That's gorgeous, my friend. Fantastic lines, and such a sad, lonely feel to it.
Lovely.
Matthew.
That's gorgeous, my friend. Fantastic lines, and such a sad, lonely feel to it.
Lovely.
Matthew.
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Re: Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
1st Feb 2019 9:54am
I was surprised to see your comment when I came back a few minutes ago; I didn’t think you’d care for something like this. So thanks, Matthew, that’s kind of you.
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Anonymous
1st Feb 2019 4:07pm
No, it's tremendous. You're a great writer. I think half of my RL is you.
Thanks,
Pup.
Thanks,
Pup.
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Re: Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
1st Feb 2019 1:08pm
Thank you so much, Jarlath, for sharing that. A writer learns from a reader when there’s a connection between the two parties. I’m ‘over the moon’ when someone says how something of mine drew them in.
Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
1st Feb 2019 1:31pm
This is very lovely and soft, Jade. Very reminiscent of Neruda.
Thank you for your entry, and best of luck in the comp!
Thank you for your entry, and best of luck in the comp!
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Re: Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
Thank you, Sage, that’s very appreciated.
Neruda was the first poet I studied from books I’d get at a used book shop when I was a year into being a poet myself. I was so young, and could not understand how anyone would part with anything by him. But later I realized it helped enable upstarts like me to afford a library on an allowance (I was in school, years from getting my first full time job).
Neruda was the first poet I studied from books I’d get at a used book shop when I was a year into being a poet myself. I was so young, and could not understand how anyone would part with anything by him. But later I realized it helped enable upstarts like me to afford a library on an allowance (I was in school, years from getting my first full time job).
Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
1st Feb 2019 6:03pm
This is stunning, I felt the earth and the fierce spirit and the calmness of the night. A beautiful write. Thank you.
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Re: Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
3rd Feb 2019 2:40am
Why thank you as well, Poppy. I’m so moved by your reaction to my piece. We go way back, Neruda & I.
Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
3rd Feb 2019 2:19am
This is really pretty and sublime, I can picture the smell of the wood and the taste of the cigarette, nice poem..
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Re: Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
3rd Feb 2019 3:04am
Thank you, dear Poetess, I’m pleased that you relate to my simple piece through the senses. Looking forward to yours, also.
Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
4th Feb 2019 00:36am
I'm not familiar with Neruda but I love this, Jade. The title got my attention, and the rest swept me away...
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Re: Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
Ooh, thank you, my dear friend. Your thoughts on this is meaningful to me. And once I got to know Neruda years ago, I too was swept away.
Love to you & Ninja x
~Jadey
Love to you & Ninja x
~Jadey
Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
6th Feb 2019 6:15am
Neruda for me always possesses an aspect of longing, his style is very experiential and this, my dear Jade, is all of this and more. Haunting and memorable. I am compelled to say only this: you are a remarkable poet, and all of us at DUP know it.
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Re: Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
7th Feb 2019 4:07am
Hi Ultra, thank you for the read and your supportive words about my work. We’ve never met here so it’s a pleasure after all these years.
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Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
I totally missed this somehow. I'm so glad I caught it. So simple but so clear and profound. As if I were there. As if I were vanilla sky. As if I were her. I feel a cry coming on. It's been that sort of day.
I don't know Neruda well- looks like I need to introduce myself.
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I don't know Neruda well- looks like I need to introduce myself.
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Re: Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
Thank you, my sister of the Pen.
I fell under the spell of Neruda a year after I was writing as a serious poet. Between him and being mentored as a new haijin of Japanese short form poetry, by the following year, I was transformed, and understood my calling.
I fell under the spell of Neruda a year after I was writing as a serious poet. Between him and being mentored as a new haijin of Japanese short form poetry, by the following year, I was transformed, and understood my calling.
Re: Re. The Scent Of The Night I Was Born
10th Feb 2019 7:38pm
i'm really curious about this period of your life, we'll have to have a messaging chat.
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