Madness In Bloom

Great flow to this piece. Loved the last line. Leaves me with a lot to think about. Keep up the great writing.

Thank you Lucky13, much appreciation and welcome to this site.

Thank you Melia, it's been a challenging period and I'm trying to find some balance and therapy through writing.  I'm glad you appreciated this :)

blooming madness...

expression.

absolutely fantastic the buildup.
imagery, engaging, holding.  
then you deliver this

""the ones who dance with death
never tell."'

stunning with a tinnitus effect.

I guess little boys who cry wolf grow up and continue to cry wolf  from being in terror to becoming the terrorists themselves. ..but alas no one is in the forest anymore to hear it.
Thank you Cold for your insightful comment and add.

The self absorbed will say anything. They thrive on attention and control. Keep that wheel moving and don't look back.. excellent verse

Yes, absolutely.  I'm just trucking away my focus ahead.  thanks Tim.

I really dig this!
"What are you afraid of darling?
Eternal sleep ceases all dreams
there is no kingdom
no afterlife
dwelling in shadows
refusing to be saved. "
Love This! Awesome message and great flow to this piece
Well done!

Thank you!  There is not much one can do if they don't want to be helped.

BOOM!

(v)
Stop  
saying  
you’ll kill yourself
the ones who dance with death
never tell.

I could not have said that better myself.  

Powerful write, Layla.

Thank you Ahavati, you get me, you get this poem!
I'm in a period of very trying, tiring times and this is where writing comes in as therapy.

I hear you Layla. This time of darkness is going to give way, leaving you wiser.

In section i, you give us this ethereal metaphor that bespeaks, to me, the coming to terms, the way we gather ourselves, crystallize our thoughts in reflection, is a lot like gathering fabric from clouds. It has a lyrical harmony that I enjoy as well.

In section ii, you continue a kind of natural reverie, the cycles of feeling, of knowing and of self. Realization. Acceptance in the well of emotions that have gathered.

You continue in the follow sections, giving us, with a sense of your disillusionment, disappointment, betrayal and horror, the sad and maladjusted relationship to this person that has fallen to tatters and hyperbolic displays of emotional imbalance they have brought to you.

Overall, you continue with your unique ability to elucidate your experience with such clarity. I read Stargazer to my therapist and told him being a poet is the joy of turning the chaotic mess of life into a keen linear razor.

Ups and downs, joys and sorrows, I'm with you my friend and always appreciate your writes.

Daniel

Thank you Daniel.
The road has been rough but I never thought the curve around the bend will be a nightmare and as the famous saying goes by winston churchill 'if you are going through hell, keep going'  and i am.

Layla, I see feel this ever in ur scribes..shrill piercing metaphors ..of whatever theme...here the intense darkness, the such revealing light over such darkness & its lingering shadows that we cohabit we bond ...only to see how they retract in cowardice & dramatics they thrive in...I feel pained & ur words have intense effect on me ..in whatever conveyed.
you.are.a. poet. and a soul. adored & felt intimate to this one ev . write on u brave one . light n love  xx

ah Uma your comment and ever calm and collective presence always warms my heart.  This poem wasn't easy to articulate but I'm hoping the fragmented imagery pulled together to showcase the dysfunctional state I am in, I was in and trying to keep my sanity, logic and normalcy through dealing with someone who has mental illness.
Thank you for being in my corner with my humble gratitude.