Anxiety (Evil)

Got the chills reading it lovely. Stay strong brother you are not alone !

Thank you so much for sharing your input. Your are kind :)

Oh, yes. I suffered this from time to time. Great write yo!

Thanks for your comment! I'm glad, but also disheartened that you can relate.

Anxiety well versed.

Thanks for your comment, SnuggleBuck!

Pleasant thoughts on New Year's Eve most welcome all three. Kexby

Thanks for taking the time to read my poem, Kexby. Happy New Year!

(We're certainly living in an era where tyranny is gaining the upper hand again - and being anxious is a natural human response).  Nice exercise of your creative poetic talent.

Thank you for the kind words, sir; it is greatly appreciated! I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem :)

This is really a well-written piece, NewBeginnings. The content is very apropos as well.

I would honor your request for honest critique by removing the extraneous words thusly:

It takes them one by one
whispers in their ears;
tells them they're not good enough  plays upon their fears.

It keeps them up at night,
creeps into their dreams;
finds their weakest points
breaks them at the seams.

It goes by many names
wears so many faces;
plays its wicked games
leads to darkest places.

When it has them where it wants
It creeps into their virgin minds -
corrupting every single thought
leaving their empty shells behind.

Basically I deleted extraneous and redundancy of words and punctuation, corrected the tenses ot it's to its, created consistency between the lowercase and caps, cojoined a few lines with a semicolon or dash, and smoothed out the syllabic sounds to improve the flow. I mean not much at all.

The stew is yours; I just removed some of the starchy vegetables.

Thank you so much for your taking your time to read and provide input! I actually considered doing exactly what you are recommending, but I liked the way it sounded with the repetition. I guess each to their own!  

Exactly! Some people like meat while others are vegetarian!

:P

This Is similar in flow with some of my writings. I love it and the eerie word choice. ! I'm a darker minded poet too , and I feel the darkness has a heavier impact than normal. ! followed you so we'll be exchanging work. thank you for the comment on mine :) write on.

Thank you for the encouragement. I agree with what you said about darkness, and I enjoyed your input. I will follow you as well :)

Hey New B.,
Beautiful poem, my friend.
Well written, and powerful, and sad.
Great job!
MZ.

Thank you again for the positive feedback, Matthew :)

A topic I write about often and sometimes post. You did such a great job of it with such relatable imagery. Loved the flow of it as well.

Thanks so much for your comment and compliments, Charlotte!

Beautifully written, as others have said love the imagery and flow.

Awww, thank you, Natalia, for your kindness, and for taking time out of your day to read this.

Reminds me of the night terrors I had as a child.  In the dream a quilt flew apart of all its pieces.  And I remember that the devil had taken both my parents.  And a newspaper flew off the printing press.

That's a weird dream. I don't know if that's necessarily a good thing that it reminded you of night terrors, but thanks for taking the time to read my poem!

This is very moving and very true. It helps me make sense of anxiety. Powerful.