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My Retail Lover
( a Quatern )
You never know till once you fall in love,
The man who works in retail as a job.
And not just any clerk you might think of,
He manages a chain, he’s my heartthrob.
The day we met I couldn’t close my eyes,
You never know till once you fall in love.
Was shopping for a lover just my size,
The kind you hope will fit you like a glove.
So on Black Friday dealt with push & shove
By ladies after deals for lingerie.
You never know till once you fall in love,
I fought for every inch amid the fray.
Since then he works more hours than before
To keep the shoppers cooing like a dove.
Until he makes more time while off the floor,
You never know till once you fall in love.
Photo by ‘wheel & cross’
You never know till once you fall in love,
The man who works in retail as a job.
And not just any clerk you might think of,
He manages a chain, he’s my heartthrob.
The day we met I couldn’t close my eyes,
You never know till once you fall in love.
Was shopping for a lover just my size,
The kind you hope will fit you like a glove.
So on Black Friday dealt with push & shove
By ladies after deals for lingerie.
You never know till once you fall in love,
I fought for every inch amid the fray.
Since then he works more hours than before
To keep the shoppers cooing like a dove.
Until he makes more time while off the floor,
You never know till once you fall in love.
Photo by ‘wheel & cross’
Author's Note
Hepcat61: for Geoff’s 3-year anniversary on DUP in 10 more days. I couldn’t wait, tommycat! <3
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Re. My Retail Lover
Anonymous
17th Nov 2018 12:29pm
Such a clever write Jade. The romantic story which lies behind is beautiful.
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17th Nov 2018 1:11pm
Re. My Retail Lover
17th Nov 2018 2:38pm
I always marvel at these kinds of writes..to stay in context
in flow and still resonate depth of poetry is amazing
this doesn't feel forced at all..
straight diggin this...
in flow and still resonate depth of poetry is amazing
this doesn't feel forced at all..
straight diggin this...
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Re: Re. My Retail Lover
Thank you, Naajir, for your wonderful comment and the honor of place on your Reading List - both such delightful surprises.
Your response to my ‘tern’ has me jiggle in my seat because I never need to force ink - it’s almost completely second-nature. Especially when I’m entirely into it.
With tiger regards!🐅
Your response to my ‘tern’ has me jiggle in my seat because I never need to force ink - it’s almost completely second-nature. Especially when I’m entirely into it.
With tiger regards!🐅
Re. My Retail Lover
17th Nov 2018 4:29pm
Excellently done; great flow; with a complete love-story too (well almost complete - did he give you a discount on the tiger-head?) :))
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Oh dear Josh, I’m so glad you enjoyed my little ‘tern’, because I had such fun writing it. And by the way, the tiger head as you call it, that was a gorgeous ladies’ clutch handbag; aptly named as it’s held in the clutch of a woman’s hand while out for an evening date. I adore an evening ‘clutch’.😍
Re. My Retail Lover
17th Nov 2018 11:22pm
No one writes a quatern like you do Jade. The Black Friday context is inspired. Finding love in the push and shove is a true test. Wonderful!
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17th Nov 2018 11:31pm
Yaaaay! Love triumphs in the bargain bins, lol! Thank you, my dear crowfly friend!
Oh I love your comment, and how I practically jumped off my chair when I saw the Reading List honor from you - thank you again!
Oh I love your comment, and how I practically jumped off my chair when I saw the Reading List honor from you - thank you again!
Re. My Retail Lover
18th Nov 2018 1:04pm
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19th Nov 2018 7:22am
lol
you are soooooo young
I standing on the edge of the cliff c
ummm still I will
great invite makes me BLUISH
AH BLUSH
you are soooooo young
I standing on the edge of the cliff c
ummm still I will
great invite makes me BLUISH
AH BLUSH
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Re: Re. My Retail Lover
20th Nov 2018 5:13am
Why thank you, Andy, so good of you, and for the RL honor. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Hope everything is well with you.
Hope everything is well with you.
Re. My Retail Lover
21st Nov 2018 3:24pm
Oh the things we could find to do off the floor ... and on the floor for that matter. How do you feel about fitting rooms? I love this nod to the retail life - and other lifestyles ;-)
Pardon me, Miss, do you need some help with that zipper?
tommy
Pardon me, Miss, do you need some help with that zipper?
tommy
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😆 lol
Omg thank you tommy... I
LOVE actually being with you when you leave your comments while having your morning coffee at Starbucks... we keep giggling nonstop!
Hey, are you gonna finish that muffin?
mumphff🤭
Omg thank you tommy... I
LOVE actually being with you when you leave your comments while having your morning coffee at Starbucks... we keep giggling nonstop!
Hey, are you gonna finish that muffin?
mumphff🤭
Re. My Retail Lover
22nd Nov 2018 4:24am
I can relate to this, except in reverse, I met a guy who became a boyfriend when I worked in retail, and I gave him a big discount in the office after hours, the cleaning lady never caught us..
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22nd Nov 2018 7:46am
lol oooohhh, omg I love that! Reminds me when I did something like that years ago in the office of a live theater down on Wilshire Blvd after the show and the whole building had cleared out ‘cept the manager & me.
I’m so glad you stopped by.☺️
I’m so glad you stopped by.☺️
Anonymous
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Re. My Retail Lover
6th Jun 2019 10:49am
Thank you.
And with imagination, the opportunities are around every men’s rack & ladies’ lingerie counter.😇
And with imagination, the opportunities are around every men’s rack & ladies’ lingerie counter.😇
Re. My Retail Lover
10th Jun 2019 9:19am
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10th Jun 2019 9:32am
Oh you read both, how wonderful, and I love writing poetry that’s beautiful, playful & fun.😇
Re: Re. My Retail Lover
10th Jun 2019 9:37am
I can only write sad things. So, I really like it when someone writes something playful & simple.
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10th Jun 2019 9:53am