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Thesis of a Failure
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Throughout our life we knew nothing but failure.
Throughout our life we knew nothing but failure,...
but we are trying to make the influence we fail to exert in our life useful after our death.
Nobody will take our souls. It is enough to know that we have them.
One day success came and it was gone,...
but it neither passed through dawn when it came... nor through sunset when it left.
When success was asleep, it seemed to be dead. And when success finally died, it seemed to be asleep.
So nobody will find our lost things.
It might look like an exile... ... Keep calm and enjoy life.
Dissatisfaction with our life ?... Discontent with our life ?...
But for how long will our luck last,...
... and for how long can we go on saying that we are unhappy with our life?.
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Always be thankful. Life could be worse.
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Throughout our life we knew nothing but failure.
Throughout our life we knew nothing but failure,...
but we are trying to make the influence we fail to exert in our life useful after our death.
Nobody will take our souls. It is enough to know that we have them.
One day success came and it was gone,...
but it neither passed through dawn when it came... nor through sunset when it left.
When success was asleep, it seemed to be dead. And when success finally died, it seemed to be asleep.
So nobody will find our lost things.
It might look like an exile... ... Keep calm and enjoy life.
Dissatisfaction with our life ?... Discontent with our life ?...
But for how long will our luck last,...
... and for how long can we go on saying that we are unhappy with our life?.
... ...
Always be thankful. Life could be worse.
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Published 27th Oct 2018
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27th Oct 2018 3:48pm
beautiful wisdom dearest Marks
I'm really feeling this one today...
love Brenda ❤
I'm really feeling this one today...
love Brenda ❤
27th Oct 2018 6:11pm
27th Oct 2018 4:41pm
When success was asleep, it seemed to be dead. And when success finally died, it seemed to be asleep.
This highlights the thin veil between sleep and death perfectly.
I found this a very engaging write. There are a few spots which could be adjusted to improve the flow. For example,
One day success came and it was gone,...
but it neither [ pass ] through dawn when it came... nor through sunset when it left.
Pass is the wrong tense. It should be either passes or passed. Because you are using the past tense came vs present comes, I would suggest altering it to passed.
This highlights the thin veil between sleep and death perfectly.
I found this a very engaging write. There are a few spots which could be adjusted to improve the flow. For example,
One day success came and it was gone,...
but it neither [ pass ] through dawn when it came... nor through sunset when it left.
Pass is the wrong tense. It should be either passes or passed. Because you are using the past tense came vs present comes, I would suggest altering it to passed.
Thank you, Ahavati.
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*passed * - I edited it
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Every now and then I write quickly then I've gotta fix mistakes made.
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*passed * - I edited it
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Every now and then I write quickly then I've gotta fix mistakes made.
