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A Perfect Memory
It is said, by other cultures,
that all water has a memory,
always seeking the way home.
As you know since I first found you,
I no longer tend a garden,
not tradition as we knew it:
my knees ground bare & sodden’d,
two hands in terra cotta
with my breezy straw hat on
in a bright tenacious sun.
And instead of gather’d water
from a chatty spring nearby,
I'm reduced to jelly glasses
in the sink in which I wash,
rinsing moss from where it lays
as I listen with my eyes.
And the water where it’s flowing
still can find me where I’m seen
in my own lone convalescence,
giving me and carrot greens
a sense, at last, of growing.
Even here as I find respite,
I take comfort from the view
giving flight outside the window,
in the feathers of my pen
and the way I always do
as I listen to your birdsong;
You’re a story never-end.
Even though my body's bow’d
and can't join to run along,
spoken word & long-hand friend.
Yet and still I know I'm bless'd,
not afraid to be alone,
doing anything I want to
in my writing down in verse,
where the water always finds me
while I quench you of your thirst.
that all water has a memory,
always seeking the way home.
As you know since I first found you,
I no longer tend a garden,
not tradition as we knew it:
my knees ground bare & sodden’d,
two hands in terra cotta
with my breezy straw hat on
in a bright tenacious sun.
And instead of gather’d water
from a chatty spring nearby,
I'm reduced to jelly glasses
in the sink in which I wash,
rinsing moss from where it lays
as I listen with my eyes.
And the water where it’s flowing
still can find me where I’m seen
in my own lone convalescence,
giving me and carrot greens
a sense, at last, of growing.
Even here as I find respite,
I take comfort from the view
giving flight outside the window,
in the feathers of my pen
and the way I always do
as I listen to your birdsong;
You’re a story never-end.
Even though my body's bow’d
and can't join to run along,
spoken word & long-hand friend.
Yet and still I know I'm bless'd,
not afraid to be alone,
doing anything I want to
in my writing down in verse,
where the water always finds me
while I quench you of your thirst.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 24th Aug 2018
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Re. A Perfect Memory
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24th Aug 2018 2:21pm
Thank you so sweetly, dear poetess...
and for a place of honor in your reader’s mind, and on your List. True humbled...
Jadey✍🏻
and for a place of honor in your reader’s mind, and on your List. True humbled...
Jadey✍🏻
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Anonymous
24th Aug 2018 2:06pm
Beautiful.
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24th Aug 2018 2:13pm
Re. A Perfect Memory
Anonymous
24th Aug 2018 3:29pm
Oh Jade, this filled me with renewed admiration and respect for your beautiful words! Truly blessed to read all your words. 🤗🌷🤗
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24th Aug 2018 3:40pm
Dearest Ally, thank you so much for your embracing of my poet’s very soul!
Jadey✍🏻
Jadey✍🏻
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24th Aug 2018 3:55pm
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I humbly thank you, dear Jarlath, for the spirit of your words you’ve gifted to me.
Jadey✍🏻
Jadey✍🏻
Re. A Perfect Memory
24th Aug 2018 8:25pm
I'm not confident I understand but it's reminding me of how my life with my husband has changed. We once were more agrarian. The waters of home life as loving shared, familiarity.
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26th Aug 2018 7:34am
I’m intrigued & fascinated by your comment! When you say “We once were more agrarian.” Do you mean part of an agrarian society way of life? Based on living where you & your husband raised crops & livestock on a ranch/ farm to help facilitate raising your growing family? I can understand your response to my poem with its expressions in parts. I hope you don’t mind my asking, but your reaction(s) are not totally unfounded, and I wanted to pass this on to you. Perhaps too comes a less confused “take” on my entry which you said “very deep”. Perhaps not so very deep from what you’ve opened up about.
Jadey x
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Re. A Perfect Memory
24th Aug 2018 9:45pm
What a great poem on so many levels. Not sure where to begin except I'll add it to my reading list :)
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Re. A Perfect Memory
25th Aug 2018 00:43am
Loved this Jade. You convey the writing process as an act of generosity. Beautiful!
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26th Aug 2018 1:42pm
*looks down at her hands as she laces her fingers tightly*
My dear crowfly friend...
More than honored, I feel grateful for the wonderfully insightful way you hit this poem’s premise/ conclusion on the mark. Thus, amazing me more than usual.
Thank you!
~Jadey✍🏻
My dear crowfly friend...
More than honored, I feel grateful for the wonderfully insightful way you hit this poem’s premise/ conclusion on the mark. Thus, amazing me more than usual.
Thank you!
~Jadey✍🏻
Re. A Perfect Memory
26th Aug 2018 1:09pm
For better or worse my general tendency is to draw analogies to other compositions, usually songs. The voice here however is so unique that no comparison is justified.
Awesome write!
Awesome write!
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Re. A Perfect Memory
Oh my goodness - I’m humbled by the honor of your words, because I’ve gotten to know how you express (for almost three years now), and you don’t say something like this lightly.
Gracious thank you.
~Jade✍🏻
Gracious thank you.
~Jade✍🏻
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26th Aug 2018 2:30pm
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Ah, hello again, and thank you for such thoughtful words regarding my piece. I felt completely connected throughout while immersed in composing it. So to have a reader let me know they are in the process of learning the word craft, and find satisfaction in my work, is a nice thing to know. Simple as that. To me, simple is sweeter than grandiose.
~Jade✍🏻
~Jade✍🏻
Re. A Perfect Memory
Check out my latest poem written just for you. But as to my man.
K, now.
It was a draft for a few minutes. Sorry!
K, now.
It was a draft for a few minutes. Sorry!
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31st Aug 2018 3:36am
Re. A Perfect Memory
3rd Sep 2018 5:21pm
This is beautiful and serene, and extremely cinematic in its lush visuals. It feels like it could be at any point in the last century, somewhere in the green places of the world...
This piece put me at peace
so dreamily
so easily
You’re a rare talent, Jade; I’ll enjoy further exploration :)
This piece put me at peace
so dreamily
so easily
You’re a rare talent, Jade; I’ll enjoy further exploration :)
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9th Sep 2018 5:06pm
Apology for the lag:
Thank you for your generosity in expressing where this piece takes you... like you were there. As for time & place, that indeed is open to interpretation.
Thank you for your generosity in expressing where this piece takes you... like you were there. As for time & place, that indeed is open to interpretation.
Re. A Perfect Memory
12th Sep 2018 7:01pm
Ahhh, Free Verse!
Genuine Free Verse, with imaginative metaphor, strong (but gentle) poetic voice that virtually enters into the heart and soul of your reader, captivating in such a way the world disappears into the moment's imagery with you, and spot-on line-breaks, and syntax that flows like silk in a soft summer breeze.
How beautiful it is to grow and mature in one's own garden, along with the plants 'n flowers, 'n shrubs, and squirrels 'n butterflies 'n all of nature's wondrous things.
One to get lost in Jade … than you for such a joyous place to … your poems and garden! ⁓ Richard : )
Genuine Free Verse, with imaginative metaphor, strong (but gentle) poetic voice that virtually enters into the heart and soul of your reader, captivating in such a way the world disappears into the moment's imagery with you, and spot-on line-breaks, and syntax that flows like silk in a soft summer breeze.
How beautiful it is to grow and mature in one's own garden, along with the plants 'n flowers, 'n shrubs, and squirrels 'n butterflies 'n all of nature's wondrous things.
One to get lost in Jade … than you for such a joyous place to … your poems and garden! ⁓ Richard : )
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Re. A Perfect Memory
12th Sep 2018 8:24pm
Thank you Richard, I’ve always written free verse which I love whenever the mood comes to me, which is often.
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13th Sep 2018 7:00pm