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Cigarettes
Our lives are like cigarettes,
The harder you pull
The brighter you burn
the faster you finish
We're put into boxes with the rest
We're labeled from the start
We don't know who'll use us
or if they'll finish to the stem
All we leave behind
is smoke on the wind
and ash on the floor
Someone elses mess to clean up
Will we be enjoyed
Or will we kill our users
The harder you pull
The brighter you burn
the faster you finish
We're put into boxes with the rest
We're labeled from the start
We don't know who'll use us
or if they'll finish to the stem
All we leave behind
is smoke on the wind
and ash on the floor
Someone elses mess to clean up
Will we be enjoyed
Or will we kill our users
Published 26th Oct 2011
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27th Oct 2011 2:37am
27th Oct 2011 9:21pm
Anonymous
28th Oct 2011 9:24am
This is clever indeed...in the first I thought here comes a profound Forrest Gump...and then it moved into a revolutional view of society.
smart stuff dude...
smart stuff dude...
28th Oct 2011 9:21pm
17th Nov 2011 12:19pm
I shall read this everytime smoke a ciggarette..always nice to have something deep and profound to read when smoking
17th Nov 2011 2:08pm
"always nice to have something deep and profound to read when smoking"
You said it
You said it
17th Nov 2011 4:04pm
@ the title was a bit blankstare - thats what one is left to do look & stare; nothing else can be done.
In a family full of smokers the users hardly give a shit about the person left to clean up their mess selfish but true.
Commend you for being so blunt and to the point; great piece.
In a family full of smokers the users hardly give a shit about the person left to clean up their mess selfish but true.
Commend you for being so blunt and to the point; great piece.
8th Dec 2011 8:12am
Thanks for the comment
"In a family full of smokers the users hardly give a shit about the person left to clean up their mess selfish but true"
People often don't realize what they're doing.
"In a family full of smokers the users hardly give a shit about the person left to clean up their mess selfish but true"
People often don't realize what they're doing.
13th Dec 2011 6:17am
There is nothing better than a great metaphor. I put many metaphors in my poems to make a point and I am happy to see others are too. This is truly a great piece in my opinion.
6th Feb 2012 6:36pm
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