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How to Handle a Hot Horseshoe
Once I had a boyfriend
who was working at the City Dump...
He drove a big machine and pushed
tons of trash from one place to another...
One day he brought me a little tin that he had turned up
amongst the dross..."Harrowgate" was stamped prophetically upon it's bottom.
Life with this fella got dicey... like snatching hot horseshoes from a forge...
I could feel it in my gut when he pointed his truck towards home.
Now it don't take too long to look at a HOT horseshoe...'bout as long as to snatch it up and drop it. Took me just a little longer...to cop to the situation and bail from an abusive relationship...
who was working at the City Dump...
He drove a big machine and pushed
tons of trash from one place to another...
One day he brought me a little tin that he had turned up
amongst the dross..."Harrowgate" was stamped prophetically upon it's bottom.
Life with this fella got dicey... like snatching hot horseshoes from a forge...
I could feel it in my gut when he pointed his truck towards home.
Now it don't take too long to look at a HOT horseshoe...'bout as long as to snatch it up and drop it. Took me just a little longer...to cop to the situation and bail from an abusive relationship...
Published 31st Jul 2018
| Edited 30th Jan 2020
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31st Jul 2018 4:04am
It starts out good with the first three verses but there is something in the last one I don't get. Maybe it's me but is there something missing in " it didn't take me long to look at him at all"?
The hot horseshoe is probably a cultural thing...cowboy lingo....
The hot horseshoe is probably a cultural thing...cowboy lingo....
You're right... a hot shoe is over 2000º f.
The saying goes: Don't take ME long to look at a HOT horseshoe!
ie... I'm not gonna get burned. ely
The saying goes: Don't take ME long to look at a HOT horseshoe!
ie... I'm not gonna get burned. ely
I'm with A on this one, it starts with a flow that gets lost in the end... I studied it and found my eye was bumping at the acronym (BF) then when it continues the read slows... I suggest it's probably a syntax thing...
I played with it a little, use it / don't use it.. It might help / might not 😂
So
Life with [BF] was [pretty] Harrowing [at times... in fact... when] he turned out to be [just
another bloody HOT] horseshoe... (It didn't take me long to look at him at all...)
Try something like...
Life with this guy was harrowing
just another bloody HOT one
waiting to burn through...
"It don't take ME long, to look at a HOT horseshoe!"
I played with it a little, use it / don't use it.. It might help / might not 😂
So
Life with [BF] was [pretty] Harrowing [at times... in fact... when] he turned out to be [just
another bloody HOT] horseshoe... (It didn't take me long to look at him at all...)
Try something like...
Life with this guy was harrowing
just another bloody HOT one
waiting to burn through...
"It don't take ME long, to look at a HOT horseshoe!"
31st Jul 2018 3:49pm
I see what you mean... you're right about the syntax... and the acronym.
I'll play around and see how I can tweak it. ely
I'll play around and see how I can tweak it. ely
31st Jul 2018 6:00pm
Yes!
You've tweked her perfectly.
So thank you for teaching me the horse shoe quote and of course not to pick em up with my hands 😂
Nice poem this clever and sharing at the same time. I like it alot!
Al
You've tweked her perfectly.
So thank you for teaching me the horse shoe quote and of course not to pick em up with my hands 😂
Nice poem this clever and sharing at the same time. I like it alot!
Al
1st Aug 2018 3:45pm
Thanks, Al... I do appreciate your poetic opinions... It's nice to have another pair of eyes to take a gander... you see things, I don't.Ta, Ely
