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Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
Once upon a time
I had a heart to give,
but those days like youth and spring
are long gone
and, like my flowers, have wilted slightly
in ignorance and from indifference
as although the seasons still change
and the Sun still shines,
nothing is new anymore
since that day
you said you did not feel the same way.
The wind was ripped from my saccharine sails
with clouds constant onlookers
perpetually casting shade
while in my eyes and heart
a stellar spark went out never to twinkle again.
Not that it was ever your fault;
it was just the cruel hand of fate
left me playing solitaire
when I thought it was pairs
with a pack full of hearts
but it was never a game you wanted to play.
So now I continue to rattle around,
this hollow heart of iron empty of fire
making me a living proverb or idiom
but I would rather much be an idiot of this feeling,
as "'Tis better to have loved and lost
Than never to have loved at all"
is not all well and fine
as for the lover unrequited
tomorrow alone seems a very long time
and a lack of love never made much.
I had a heart to give,
but those days like youth and spring
are long gone
and, like my flowers, have wilted slightly
in ignorance and from indifference
as although the seasons still change
and the Sun still shines,
nothing is new anymore
since that day
you said you did not feel the same way.
The wind was ripped from my saccharine sails
with clouds constant onlookers
perpetually casting shade
while in my eyes and heart
a stellar spark went out never to twinkle again.
Not that it was ever your fault;
it was just the cruel hand of fate
left me playing solitaire
when I thought it was pairs
with a pack full of hearts
but it was never a game you wanted to play.
So now I continue to rattle around,
this hollow heart of iron empty of fire
making me a living proverb or idiom
but I would rather much be an idiot of this feeling,
as "'Tis better to have loved and lost
Than never to have loved at all"
is not all well and fine
as for the lover unrequited
tomorrow alone seems a very long time
and a lack of love never made much.
Written by
Viddax
(Lord Viddax)
Published 29th Jul 2018
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Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
31st Jul 2018 9:59pm
'The wind was ripped from my saccharine sails
with clouds constant onlookers ' This line hit me when my love was unrequited, a feeling which still cuts now despite time, despite the dulling of things. Yes, I can still call to it, that young, soft love crushed, perhaps unintentionally, under the weight of a clumsy hand. I hope the furnace warms again.
With love,
Poppy.
with clouds constant onlookers ' This line hit me when my love was unrequited, a feeling which still cuts now despite time, despite the dulling of things. Yes, I can still call to it, that young, soft love crushed, perhaps unintentionally, under the weight of a clumsy hand. I hope the furnace warms again.
With love,
Poppy.
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Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
1st Aug 2018 00:12am
Was hoping some line in there would tug at someone's soul enough for them to take note. It is the sudden abruptness of unrequited love that derails it all; and as you say makes the love seem clumsy.
They say pain is good as it reminds you are alive, that may be true but I always hope there will be enough good and joy to remove the pain and numbness.
When the furnace warms again it will be because it has been stoked and cared for, but for now it will merely smoulder quietly.
They say pain is good as it reminds you are alive, that may be true but I always hope there will be enough good and joy to remove the pain and numbness.
When the furnace warms again it will be because it has been stoked and cared for, but for now it will merely smoulder quietly.
Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
31st Jul 2018 10:17pm
dearest Lord Viddax this is a breathtaking write
that stole the wind from my own sails from the pain of it
damn there's a lump in my throat and pain in my stomach
with the truth here...
love Brenda
that stole the wind from my own sails from the pain of it
damn there's a lump in my throat and pain in my stomach
with the truth here...
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
1st Aug 2018 00:14am
Less of the 'lord' from you lady; your words alone show their overwhelming power and position. I suppose it is somewhat bittersweet that I reminded you of feelings and heart beyond the hard line you like to cling to.
Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
1st Aug 2018 00:23am
you made me feel which and as much as I run from feelings you encouraged me to embrace my grief who needs to be loved if they can't love back?
thank you for the wake-up...
love Brenda
thank you for the wake-up...
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
1st Aug 2018 00:38am
It is good to embrace grief, but better to embrace joy and acceptance. More love in the world is always a good thing; us poor romantic lovers would be out of a place otherwise. If someone is loved then its for a reason; none are incapable of love. Starting to sound like a soppy valentine card or fortune cookie.
Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
1st Aug 2018 00:41am
I love your take on things Viddax it's a beautiful reminder... hopefully things will begin to sink in my hard head...
did I say it already?
this is a gorgeous poem created with the most beautiful shade of gray which I find the most poignant to create with...
love Brenda
did I say it already?
this is a gorgeous poem created with the most beautiful shade of gray which I find the most poignant to create with...
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
1st Aug 2018 00:58am
I tend to not try to paint with gray/grey; preferring a watered down or decoloured colour: its the vibrancy that is lost that seems the most poignant. Though I prefer to paint with words.
You may have a hard head but it manages to find the heart with the deceptively lightest touch to then unleash force.
The bonus and upside of sometimes being at rock bottom is that you can look up and see the beautiful stars way up ahead and take heart in hope. Or you go so far down that in a mad way it ends up back up at the top. So if I am the 2nd option and mad, I suppose that is halfway to love right, or something along those lines.
You may have a hard head but it manages to find the heart with the deceptively lightest touch to then unleash force.
The bonus and upside of sometimes being at rock bottom is that you can look up and see the beautiful stars way up ahead and take heart in hope. Or you go so far down that in a mad way it ends up back up at the top. So if I am the 2nd option and mad, I suppose that is halfway to love right, or something along those lines.
Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
1st Aug 2018 1:01am
aw so you are an artist with paint too watercolors being the hardest medium but yes so beautifully poignant I hope you consider entering my artists comp. though these days I prefer creating with words too... I will think of you when I look up at those stars metaphorical and otherwise...
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
1st Aug 2018 1:12am
I thought I was an artist but found my art entirely lacking in art class: no vision to guide me and the actual art of other students put me off ever making art, besides bumbling with words. Have the visions in my eye's mind but do not dare try to put them to paper.
Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
1st Aug 2018 1:15am
you don't bumble with words my friend and i'm sure your paintings are captivating I would be utterly ecstatic if just one of my poems came out as great in the span of an entire years worth...
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
1st Aug 2018 1:28am
I know, but if I say I bumble it beats others to the punch! My 'paintings' are from a past me and hardly of notice, I have not painted since school; the modern me does not paint or dance: plenty of fuel for melancholy then.
I think you undervalue your poems and overvalue this one, but the false modesty and praising is always welcomed!
I think you undervalue your poems and overvalue this one, but the false modesty and praising is always welcomed!
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Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
1st Aug 2018 11:24pm
And if I find them I will be sure to pass on my regards. Though thanks very much for the praise, oddly enough did not think this piece was anything special but it seems the emotion and sense has won the points.
Best lesson from my writing if any is to read others; fair number of my good and commended poems have been inspired by other poets here.
Best lesson from my writing if any is to read others; fair number of my good and commended poems have been inspired by other poets here.
Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
25th Aug 2018 10:44pm
usually, I pass up writings that start with 'once upon a time' but this made me shed tears while chugging a soda in the back of my RV thinking about my old life.
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Re: Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
25th Aug 2018 10:51pm
Thought 'once upon a time' was more for fairy tales than poems; definitely no fairies only feelings featured in this poem.
Re. Tomorrow alone seems a very long time
18th Jan 2019 11:35pm
This was very poignant and written very well. Nicely done....Beautiful...xo
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