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I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
This is my final testimony, presented to the court.
We drove a car home
walked into a house
dressed in clothes
ate food, drank grouse
Both of their jokes
sucked bad, as they could
leaving audiences gasping
worse than crickets would
He stood at the door
with a Garfield's grin
she peered in the window
looking ridiculously thin
He pulled out a gun
aimed, squeezing the trigger
she threw knives at his
loud, anorexic figure
A bullet went past
fetching sweat from my face
a blade stole a hair as it
flew above head-space
He fell to the floor
in a pool of red blood
she crumbled in pain
landing in the flash flood
I froze in the ice
looking left, then right
wondering if I had
seen that slow-motion fight
Truth is your worship
try as I might
I can't tell who died first
that ice cold, night
-x-
Written by
RevolutionAL
(Alistair Plint)
Published 19th Jun 2018
Author's Note
All people have limits, sadly me included.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
19th Jun 2018 3:10pm
dearest AL i'm unsure why but I would love to hear you read this
I want to feel your emotions mixed with artistry of the words chosen here..
you are a gifted poet AL
you are a Master..
love me
I want to feel your emotions mixed with artistry of the words chosen here..
you are a gifted poet AL
you are a Master..
love me
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Re: Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
20th Jun 2018 8:26am
Oh Raven,
Thank you for your kind words, hunny.
Be patient my friend. Recording in process, especially for you.
Much love for you, special lady
Blue Skies @You
Al
Thank you for your kind words, hunny.
Be patient my friend. Recording in process, especially for you.
Much love for you, special lady
Blue Skies @You
Al
Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
19th Jun 2018 3:14pm
dearest AL you are an artist
seeing the scene as only an artist can
I want to hear your reading to get the depth
of the brilliance here..
I need help lol :)
love Brenda
seeing the scene as only an artist can
I want to hear your reading to get the depth
of the brilliance here..
I need help lol :)
love Brenda
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Re: Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
20th Jun 2018 9:26am
Hello Crim,
Darlin' you're far to kind. You'll have to talk to Raven about that reading thingy majig
Now, how can I help you?
Lol
Blue skies at you hunny
Al
=)
Darlin' you're far to kind. You'll have to talk to Raven about that reading thingy majig
Now, how can I help you?
Lol
Blue skies at you hunny
Al
=)
Re: Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
29th Jun 2018 3:30pm
dearest AL bravo on the reading really all of your poems would be greatly enhanced by your reading such a performance artist you are..
this is bloody fantastic..
love Brenda
this is bloody fantastic..
love Brenda
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Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
19th Jun 2018 3:47pm
if it was played on a stage
i bet my last dollar
it'd have reduced the audience to tears
such is the narration
the delivery dear Poet
it is..in this reader's humble opinion
as clear and powerful as it gets
hence the impact as stated.
subject too cold
even for this cold soul...so won't even go there.
i bet my last dollar
it'd have reduced the audience to tears
such is the narration
the delivery dear Poet
it is..in this reader's humble opinion
as clear and powerful as it gets
hence the impact as stated.
subject too cold
even for this cold soul...so won't even go there.
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Re: Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
20th Jun 2018 9:29am
Aah Mr Fusion
"subject too cold
even for this cold soul...so won't even go there. "
...and when a man cries!
Thank you so much for your very kind words. I truly appreciate your tallented eyes on the page.
Blue Skies at you
Al
=)
"subject too cold
even for this cold soul...so won't even go there. "
...and when a man cries!
Thank you so much for your very kind words. I truly appreciate your tallented eyes on the page.
Blue Skies at you
Al
=)
Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
Anonymous
19th Jun 2018 3:59pm
There is nothing I can add that those commenting before me haven't already said. The emotional level in this poem was astounding and if it was me I wouldn't have been able to voice it aloud without trembling. That being said, I have to agree with lovely Raven. It would be amazing to hear it read in your own voice. Much respect for your strength and courage
...Willow
...Willow
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Re: Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
20th Jun 2018 9:32am
My dearest Willow
Thank you for the kind words and special comments.
The reading will happen. Raven nagged me to death. Haha!
Thank you for your eyes on the page.
Much love &
Blue Skies at you
Al
=)
Thank you for the kind words and special comments.
The reading will happen. Raven nagged me to death. Haha!
Thank you for your eyes on the page.
Much love &
Blue Skies at you
Al
=)
Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
20th Jun 2018 3:00pm
This was absolutely fantastic!
You should really consider writing a novella of stories from 3 perspectives. His side, her side and the middle.
You have brilliant talent mister AL.
You should really consider writing a novella of stories from 3 perspectives. His side, her side and the middle.
You have brilliant talent mister AL.
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Re: Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
Oh Layla
Thank you so much.
Soo... I was submitting instalment 2 while you were commenting. :)
Great minds
Blue Skies at you m'lady
Al
=)
Thank you so much.
Soo... I was submitting instalment 2 while you were commenting. :)
Great minds
Blue Skies at you m'lady
Al
=)
Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
22nd Jun 2018 6:53pm
There you go, that audio as requested peeps.
Special thanks to Missy for her help.
Blue Skies at all of you!
Special thanks to Missy for her help.
Blue Skies at all of you!
Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
23rd Jun 2018 2:46am
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Re. I Rest My Case, Your Worship.
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2nd Jul 2018 9:16pm
Anonymous
- Edited 25th Oct 2022 6:45pm
8th Oct 2018 2:01am
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