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He says it's sexy
He says it's sexy: spankings after lunch;
My bottom will be red and stinging soon;
Some slaps are hard and some are soft; a bunch
Are delivered: behold the reddest moon;
It's left to burn, while he enjoys a pause
Between each set of strikes, delivered quick,
Then quick again and then it's slow, of course:
A waltz of wallops means the colours stick;
Despite an interval, when oil is rubbed,
Some of the olive dusting simply soothes;
But further oil could be deeply dubbed,
A preparation - fingers in my grooves;
He says it sexy - my dry derriére:
But(t) moist enough to fit his big affair.
My bottom will be red and stinging soon;
Some slaps are hard and some are soft; a bunch
Are delivered: behold the reddest moon;
It's left to burn, while he enjoys a pause
Between each set of strikes, delivered quick,
Then quick again and then it's slow, of course:
A waltz of wallops means the colours stick;
Despite an interval, when oil is rubbed,
Some of the olive dusting simply soothes;
But further oil could be deeply dubbed,
A preparation - fingers in my grooves;
He says it sexy - my dry derriére:
But(t) moist enough to fit his big affair.
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Re. He says it's sexy
20th May 2018 4:50pm
Sometimes it's a necessity to feel the pain so one doesn't forget the love
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Re: Re. He says it's sexy
21st May 2018 1:05am
Re. He says it's sexy
20th May 2018 4:58pm
hmmmmm...nice picture...love the raw nature of your erotica...looking forward to more...
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Re: Re. He says it's sexy
21st May 2018 1:11am
Re. He says it's sexy
20th May 2018 5:20pm
Re: Re. He says it's sexy
20th May 2018 6:46pm
Re. He says it's sexy
20th May 2018 7:15pm
The redder the better! I loved this, and your sense of humor. And you go into so much juicy detail with the oil and such. Wonderful write!
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Re: Re. He says it's sexy
21st May 2018 1:03am
Re. He says it's sexy
20th May 2018 11:20pm
Dear SweetOblivion, I like your skill in writing. You use iambic pentametre in a very skillful way. Why don't you try to write something about other subjects?
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Re: Re. He says it's sexy
21st May 2018 1:02am
Re. He says it's sexy
21st May 2018 11:42am
Dear SweetOblivion: Don't you feel that sex concerns the private life that none should share with the person.
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Re: Re. He says it's sexy
21st May 2018 4:56pm
Re. He says it's sexy
23rd May 2018 2:10am
I believe that rhythm and rhyme amplifies, and this was loud and clear! Loved it all!
I humbly offer a suggestion: "bestowed at once. Behold! my Red Moon;" might, perhaps, please the meter more.
I humbly offer a suggestion: "bestowed at once. Behold! my Red Moon;" might, perhaps, please the meter more.
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Re: Re. He says it's sexy
23rd May 2018 6:49am
Yes - always please the meter - your helpful thoughts have been taken on board sir. Thank you for loving my all.
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7th Jun 2018 8:10pm