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What would you do
What is more powerful then love?
The simplicity of 1 emotion is worth more then any amount of money man could have.
What would you do for it?
Could you live without it
Could you dedicate yourself to a never ending eternity of it?
That very first glance, touch, sound, & smell that leads to the taste of it.
Would you fight for it and always vow to protect it.
Could you commit to the act of celibacy with hopes of finding your soulmate?
The one who helps you grow even though it’s unintentional.
Could you live everyday dedicated to that 1 as you watch them evolve through different stages in life?
Could you wipe away the tears that fall from the deep rooted scars that has torn them apart thus far?
What would you do..
The simplicity of 1 emotion is worth more then any amount of money man could have.
What would you do for it?
Could you live without it
Could you dedicate yourself to a never ending eternity of it?
That very first glance, touch, sound, & smell that leads to the taste of it.
Would you fight for it and always vow to protect it.
Could you commit to the act of celibacy with hopes of finding your soulmate?
The one who helps you grow even though it’s unintentional.
Could you live everyday dedicated to that 1 as you watch them evolve through different stages in life?
Could you wipe away the tears that fall from the deep rooted scars that has torn them apart thus far?
What would you do..
Published 21st Apr 2018
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21st Apr 2018 8:51am
21st Apr 2018 11:41am
21st Apr 2018 10:34am
yes, indeed...lust has built cities, but love builds homes.
i am tangentially intellectually intrigued by the celibacy question...the piece describes a set of questions for a noble knight...which i hope the author finds!
i hope it is ok and helpful to offer a couple of knit picky edits you may have overlooked (which we all do when writing from passion!):
'worth more then any' > 'worth more thAn any'
'deep rooted scars that has torn' > 'deep rooted scars that HAVE torn' [or even 'deepLY rooted scars that HAVE torn']
best of luck!
i am tangentially intellectually intrigued by the celibacy question...the piece describes a set of questions for a noble knight...which i hope the author finds!
i hope it is ok and helpful to offer a couple of knit picky edits you may have overlooked (which we all do when writing from passion!):
'worth more then any' > 'worth more thAn any'
'deep rooted scars that has torn' > 'deep rooted scars that HAVE torn' [or even 'deepLY rooted scars that HAVE torn']
best of luck!
21st Apr 2018 11:41am
21st Apr 2018 1:53pm
I have called love a many splendored and splintered "thing"...
I have also called it a two by four against the universe ( ok , love , come get me ...lol )
What would I do for it ?
Hmmm...
Well this is one way I put it...
"And I shall give you all my all , for just
one of your tongue kisses , and I shall crawl
across the stars to be in your embrace ,
And I shall remove all my masks , just
To gaze upon your face"
There are , of course many other answers to that...lol
The next set of questions , are ones I might answer differently ,
yet my good friend for years has said not "Love Is All You Need"
but "Love Is All There Is"...we have had some deep philosophical
discussions about that saying...:)
The next , I would answer ; "In the beginning it is always beautiful" ;
It is what comes after that is the true test , the trials , and travails of love...
The next question...celibacy , until you find the right one ?
After my last relationship...( ye gods ! ) ...thirteen years now of celibacy...so , yeah...lol !
Next question...ah , if it were only so !
At this point though...probably better chance next lifetime...;)
Last question , I answer with this link :
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/304520-for-the-sake-of-love/
Very nicely executed , very deep , very beautiful , very well penned Lady Nikk11...
May The Muse Be With You Always...;)
I have also called it a two by four against the universe ( ok , love , come get me ...lol )
What would I do for it ?
Hmmm...
Well this is one way I put it...
"And I shall give you all my all , for just
one of your tongue kisses , and I shall crawl
across the stars to be in your embrace ,
And I shall remove all my masks , just
To gaze upon your face"
There are , of course many other answers to that...lol
The next set of questions , are ones I might answer differently ,
yet my good friend for years has said not "Love Is All You Need"
but "Love Is All There Is"...we have had some deep philosophical
discussions about that saying...:)
The next , I would answer ; "In the beginning it is always beautiful" ;
It is what comes after that is the true test , the trials , and travails of love...
The next question...celibacy , until you find the right one ?
After my last relationship...( ye gods ! ) ...thirteen years now of celibacy...so , yeah...lol !
Next question...ah , if it were only so !
At this point though...probably better chance next lifetime...;)
Last question , I answer with this link :
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/304520-for-the-sake-of-love/
Very nicely executed , very deep , very beautiful , very well penned Lady Nikk11...
May The Muse Be With You Always...;)
21st Apr 2018 2:34pm
Anonymous
21st Apr 2018 3:06pm
Very inspirational I love this topic
Great job on this write!!!
I see love as an illusion.....
Only in the mind...but one must ask themselves as long as you believe... As long as you feel it...then it has to be real...well to a certain extent... Maybe...kinda like fear...its not there to grab....its not something you see but u do believe In it..you feel it...
There are only two types if Love and one of them is not real at all....
The love from your dear friends and family who support you mi matter what....that's unquestionably real.....
The.other is like a scrappy deal you get only for a limited time then its over....u kinda want.more or you kinda just don't...like temporary temptation...Lol isn't worth it....doesn't mean one shouldn't fight for it....everyone has a choice but thus only my take
Always Autumn
Great job on this write!!!
I see love as an illusion.....
Only in the mind...but one must ask themselves as long as you believe... As long as you feel it...then it has to be real...well to a certain extent... Maybe...kinda like fear...its not there to grab....its not something you see but u do believe In it..you feel it...
There are only two types if Love and one of them is not real at all....
The love from your dear friends and family who support you mi matter what....that's unquestionably real.....
The.other is like a scrappy deal you get only for a limited time then its over....u kinda want.more or you kinda just don't...like temporary temptation...Lol isn't worth it....doesn't mean one shouldn't fight for it....everyone has a choice but thus only my take
Always Autumn
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