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Barnacle
distant wings out to sea
the loneliest sound ever heard
the call of a gull drifts
full sail
on the grey of early morn’
I walk the dunes between
foam-kissed shoreline
misty hillocks of sea grass
that lean
when incoming waves exhale
dark hair in my eyes
that scan the wandering coast
and the figure of a girl
who walks
alone and barefoot
straw hair & wind-swept brow
pale eyes peering
drawing near
her mouth
soften’d in acceptance
passing each other
turning every few steps
watching the other walking
further
with breakers sighing
beach sand draws and pulls
at my toes and sinking feet
that make their way
toward the
shallows hiding secrets
I bend at tide pool’s edge
crabs startle and freeze as I
peer into her barnacle grave
finding
my own deep slumber
Copyright©️Jade Pandora 2018. All Rights Reserved.
NaPo/GloPoWriMo 2018
Published 20th Apr 2018
Author's Note
This is my Day 20 in this year’s April NaPoWriMo.
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20th Apr 2018 11:15am
'...foam-kissed shoreline
misty hillocks of sea grass
that lean
when incoming waves exhale'
nice line. you can feel the moment and pace here. nice walk...i mean job!
misty hillocks of sea grass
that lean
when incoming waves exhale'
nice line. you can feel the moment and pace here. nice walk...i mean job!
20th Apr 2018 12:21pm
I thank you, poet, for your input & reply to the images of my words. I used to write much more free verse. The solitude & flow that always puts me at ease. I was overdue for this and I'm glad you like it.
20th Apr 2018 11:25am
Oh this so getting me ready for Costa Rica starting tomorrow ... great vivid detail, perfect flow ... I hear the ocean calling
20th Apr 2018 12:19pm
Ohh I hope your trip will be as serene. Thank you, Lil'D, for stopping by for a walk and a read. :)
20th Apr 2018 12:21pm
20th Apr 2018 12:53pm
Why thank you, Billy, I appreciate you letting me know your thoughts, and for your enjoyment.
20th Apr 2018 2:57pm
nice warmly evocative piece...I live by the sea and know its transformative power...could actually hear gulls when reading...well done...a
20th Apr 2018 3:01pm
Thank you, BC, and yes... when you hear a single gull, it's as I versed: the loneliest sound.
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24th Apr 2018 8:49am
Thank you, Andy. Apologies for missing your comment. I hope it was a pleasant time you had there.
24th Apr 2018 5:27pm
21st Apr 2018 3:12pm
oooooooooo!
it reminds me of the video of that song you recommended a while back - Goldfrapp's "Stranger" - chills
like lightning up my back...
tommy
it reminds me of the video of that song you recommended a while back - Goldfrapp's "Stranger" - chills
like lightning up my back...
tommy
Ohh thank you, tommy!, and I love that song, that’s why I had you check it out back then. I hope my hash tag picks help with the layers of what my free verse means ( especially ‘ghosts’ ). And you know how much returning to minimalist / free verse means to me. That, and my affinity for story-telling verse ( like my #21 ).
RL graditude 🙏
~Tiger ( the ‘other’ T ) 🐅
RL graditude 🙏
~Tiger ( the ‘other’ T ) 🐅
