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Sweet Sin
A thumming pulse of need begins from the moment he sees her message and those big blue eyes glaring back. His body becomes flushed and fueled by the lust of sweet sin. He knows he shouldn't dare think this way, but his thoughts are now irrational. An indescribable and unrelenting ache mounts. Euphoria sets in and he's lost beyond all reasoning.
He remembers reeling her in, the rules he made her break and the price he's dearly payed, worth every ounce he thinks. The game of seduction initially started from her words alone and now she is embedded in his every waking thought. He's taken back by such obsession he never expected. He insists she keep weaving the hooks within his soul. Often is it unimaginable, the control of his mind and body. He's mystified, but she now owns him.
He feels her mouth as it trails methodically over his body and feeds from between his legs. He feels her encapsulate him, his very release as he's deeply immersed in her smooth shaven velvet.
He tastes her on his tongue, the sweetest thing he's ever craved. Her heavy wetness covers his face and her cream upon his tongue. His nostrils flare as she intoxicates him with the fragrance he provokes.
She sits on the other side of the screen with a mind full of madness and an ache of her own. She tastes him, she smells him, she feels him. Her soul and his simply dance to the lust of their sweet sin.
He remembers reeling her in, the rules he made her break and the price he's dearly payed, worth every ounce he thinks. The game of seduction initially started from her words alone and now she is embedded in his every waking thought. He's taken back by such obsession he never expected. He insists she keep weaving the hooks within his soul. Often is it unimaginable, the control of his mind and body. He's mystified, but she now owns him.
He feels her mouth as it trails methodically over his body and feeds from between his legs. He feels her encapsulate him, his very release as he's deeply immersed in her smooth shaven velvet.
He tastes her on his tongue, the sweetest thing he's ever craved. Her heavy wetness covers his face and her cream upon his tongue. His nostrils flare as she intoxicates him with the fragrance he provokes.
She sits on the other side of the screen with a mind full of madness and an ache of her own. She tastes him, she smells him, she feels him. Her soul and his simply dance to the lust of their sweet sin.
Published 13th Apr 2018
| Edited 9th Mar 2019
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13th Apr 2018 10:09pm
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14th Apr 2018 8:06am
Even with no picture accompanying, the words themselves have just provoked "an indescribable and (for the moment) unrelenting ache".
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Anonymous
16th Apr 2018 2:32pm
You awaken all the senses with your incredible imagery. From the thrumming beginning to the longing felt through the screen at the end. Nicely done!
...Willow
...Willow
16th Apr 2018 6:46pm
I just love compliments such as this to make me know I am doing something right! So glad you enjoyed it as well..
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16th Apr 2018 6:48pm
Thank you for letting me know that I am giving something to be visualized!!
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16th Apr 2018 6:54pm
No, it isn't bad but wonderful! I look forward to your inspired piece
22nd Apr 2018 4:56am
a web woven of sensation and desire...stirring,,,penetrating bodies and psyches...loved it
22nd Apr 2018 5:16am
I'm so very glad it was well received!! Thanks for stopping by, nice to see new people too..
Your scented words here are a rare perfume which gave me a taste of what must have felt like Eden for an interlude for these people. This is the most palpable and sensual of your masterpieces. Amazing how you took the web encounters and made them feel incredibly physical. XoXo John
28th Mar 2024 7:29pm
This poem paints a vivid and intense picture of desire, temptation, and surrender. The imagery is potent and evocative, drawing the reader into the consuming passion between the two characters. The use of sensory details—sight, touch, taste, and scent—adds depth to the experience, making it feel almost tangible.
The theme of forbidden desire and the irresistible pull of lust is palpable throughout the poem, creating a sense of urgency and longing. The repetition of phrases like "sweet sin" and "obsession" emphasizes the overwhelming nature of their connection and the allure of giving in to temptation.
Overall, this poem captures the complexity of desire and the intoxicating power of surrendering to it, while also hinting at the consequences that come with indulging in forbidden pleasures.
The theme of forbidden desire and the irresistible pull of lust is palpable throughout the poem, creating a sense of urgency and longing. The repetition of phrases like "sweet sin" and "obsession" emphasizes the overwhelming nature of their connection and the allure of giving in to temptation.
Overall, this poem captures the complexity of desire and the intoxicating power of surrendering to it, while also hinting at the consequences that come with indulging in forbidden pleasures.
