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Mind, 'Cloaked n' Stagger...'
Quite often, I gaze
in the ways, life plays...
Profound...I'm amazed
by the haze, how it stays
static-like cumulus clouds...
Unfazed by glazed over
beings affixed to their daze
repetitious the maze,
ever winding...binding
them unto unadulterated 'jays'
that sing those blues for days...
Yet, in many ways, it could be
just how things appear in this
cracked-view-eye purvey, as
I survey the "substance of life"
and how death's kiss 'feigned innocuously' intimately preys...
in the ways, life plays...
Profound...I'm amazed
by the haze, how it stays
static-like cumulus clouds...
Unfazed by glazed over
beings affixed to their daze
repetitious the maze,
ever winding...binding
them unto unadulterated 'jays'
that sing those blues for days...
Yet, in many ways, it could be
just how things appear in this
cracked-view-eye purvey, as
I survey the "substance of life"
and how death's kiss 'feigned innocuously' intimately preys...
Published 15th Mar 2018
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15th Mar 2018 6:41pm
This is a wonderfully written piece. Thank you so much for writing this because somehow I think these are some of the words I needed to hear in these moments. 🙏🙏
15th Mar 2018 10:17pm
Aaawww sweetie, I thank you...for the sweet praise n the RL add...I'm honored! :)
This is an excellent verse, Poetikone. I feel it could flow so much better with a bit of editing on the punctuation. The title is very clever!
Nature indeed hypnotizes those who pay attention with her grandeur. It's easy to become lost in her arms.
Nature indeed hypnotizes those who pay attention with her grandeur. It's easy to become lost in her arms.
15th Mar 2018 11:41pm
Thank you my sweet friend n I've never been one to worry so much about 'proper
etiquette' when writing, becuz thinking about it would stymie my flow of thought
so maybe at some point I will edit...I do appreciate you greatly dear wise one :)
etiquette' when writing, becuz thinking about it would stymie my flow of thought
so maybe at some point I will edit...I do appreciate you greatly dear wise one :)
16th Mar 2018 00:52am
17th Mar 2018 2:38pm
A thoughtful poem
'tis smoothly flowin'
jammin' with verses'
a write which twirls sweetly in mind,
& when spoken aloud
so much fun...
Love
H
'tis smoothly flowin'
jammin' with verses'
a write which twirls sweetly in mind,
& when spoken aloud
so much fun...
Love
H
18th Mar 2018 12:53pm
As usual your sweet words charm me...thank you so much precious one, deeply appreciate you... :)
18th Mar 2018 5:32pm
19th Mar 2018 9:53am
Yes of course carry on then! lol...
big thanks to you kind sir for both your time n thoughts n adding this to ur RL...I'm
humbled...
big thanks to you kind sir for both your time n thoughts n adding this to ur RL...I'm
humbled...
