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he never had the time she never had the opportunity
still they knew
what they meant
for each
the other
for they were
deserted by the two
the time and the opportunity
both these entities
thinking only they
are the ones
that made
love
possible
and only they
are the ones
that sustain it
little did the time
and the opportunity know
they both
were wrong
for him
and her
both had something
better on their side-
destiny
and even if she
the destiny
betrayed them
they knew
where
they will be
together
and at that time
they will be
beyond the realm
of both
time and the opportunity
and
that time
they will be
together
'forever'!
©2018 cold_fusion. All rights reserved.
Published 21st Feb 2018
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21st Feb 2018 7:23pm
Absolutely beautiful sentiment, C_f
If not the then and now,
of now,
then the
then and now
of then.
For love does
await forever.
An RL without question.
If not the then and now,
of now,
then the
then and now
of then.
For love does
await forever.
An RL without question.
Welcome!!
is the Poet Admired!
Welcome
is the review fantastic!!
Dear Friend,
You've surmised the poem in 3 lines, better than i could ever!
Yes, the now of then then than if not the now of now!
Rumi's works say the same.
The together forever
in the hereafter! Great solace in that truth!
For what I believe in
It's God's words
You will be raised, grouped with the ones you hold dear to your heart!
And that's what this poem's all about!
Hence the inclusion in Love Poem category not the story poem one.
Welcomed and appreciated
immensely
are the friend and her wise and in depth review!
Much Obliged
C_F
is the Poet Admired!
Welcome
is the review fantastic!!
Dear Friend,
You've surmised the poem in 3 lines, better than i could ever!
Yes, the now of then then than if not the now of now!
Rumi's works say the same.
The together forever
in the hereafter! Great solace in that truth!
For what I believe in
It's God's words
You will be raised, grouped with the ones you hold dear to your heart!
And that's what this poem's all about!
Hence the inclusion in Love Poem category not the story poem one.
Welcomed and appreciated
immensely
are the friend and her wise and in depth review!
Much Obliged
C_F
Anonymous
22nd Feb 2018 1:22am
i dont know if im just highly sensitive tonight but this
really touched my emotional feminine rawness.
every single strophe made me feel anxious and restless,
..a hurtful place, i suppose
really touched my emotional feminine rawness.
every single strophe made me feel anxious and restless,
..a hurtful place, i suppose
23rd Feb 2018 12:53pm
Unfortunately...true, a hurtful place it is that many... have to go through
till they get there!
and then...no hurt, no more hurt!
Honoring and at the same time
humbling
are the visit
the review of the poet admired.
Appreciation
deep
immense.
till they get there!
and then...no hurt, no more hurt!
Honoring and at the same time
humbling
are the visit
the review of the poet admired.
Appreciation
deep
immense.
22nd Feb 2018 7:56am
Such a raw and beautifully emotional piece. Wonderfully expressed.
~anonshadow
~anonshadow
23rd Feb 2018 12:55pm
Welcome
dear poet admired.
Indeed an honor, such review
from a poet held in deep respect.
Utterly humbled dear brother.
Appreciate
always
the visits
the reviews
immensely.
dear poet admired.
Indeed an honor, such review
from a poet held in deep respect.
Utterly humbled dear brother.
Appreciate
always
the visits
the reviews
immensely.
22nd Feb 2018 9:14am
I'm shedding tears as I type. So eloquent and pure, raw truth. I believe every word with all my heaRt.
23rd Feb 2018 12:59pm
Welcome
dear poet both, to the page as well as to the community that is DU!
No wonder
for sensitive souls, feel the most.
welcome is the peer's visit, the heartfelt review. Humbled.
Appreciate
immensely the visit
the review
dear poet both, to the page as well as to the community that is DU!
No wonder
for sensitive souls, feel the most.
welcome is the peer's visit, the heartfelt review. Humbled.
Appreciate
immensely the visit
the review
22nd Feb 2018 9:27am
22nd Feb 2018 2:53pm
22nd Feb 2018 9:37pm
Such a gentle and poignant poem CF...it got inside this old guy my friend lol.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
23rd Feb 2018 1:01pm
Age is but a number
and old is but a word i say Harry!
Welcome dear reapected poet.
Humbled again I am, by your visit, you review.
Appreciate both
immensely.
and old is but a word i say Harry!
Welcome dear reapected poet.
Humbled again I am, by your visit, you review.
Appreciate both
immensely.
25th Feb 2018 9:22pm
Haha...at 61 I have just been told I have glaucoma and my hips are beginning to crack on cold mornings CF...but I can still drink, eat and wipe my own ass my friend.
28th Feb 2018 12:55pm
had a 98 yr Old neighbour a few years ago, she was also the starta manager for the site, and guess what she hired no gardeners, no cleaners, lived on first floor by herself!
If that ain't proof enough, that age is but a number? :-)
Wish you well dear Friend!!
Cheers!
C_F
If that ain't proof enough, that age is but a number? :-)
Wish you well dear Friend!!
Cheers!
C_F
23rd Feb 2018 12:47pm
this wrenches at my little black heart.
how eloquent & deeply emotive, cold one.
a little warmth goes a long way
how eloquent & deeply emotive, cold one.
a little warmth goes a long way
23rd Feb 2018 1:06pm
My oh my!
Welcome dear Poetess, the admired one!
Well,
they say black bodies are the
perfect absorbers and
emitters
of radiation.
I concur.
Yet beg to differ re the color of the radiant source there.
Yes.
A little warmth, indeed goes a long way dear Friend!
True.
Appreciate immensely
the honoring visit, review!!
Welcome dear Poetess, the admired one!
Well,
they say black bodies are the
perfect absorbers and
emitters
of radiation.
I concur.
Yet beg to differ re the color of the radiant source there.
Yes.
A little warmth, indeed goes a long way dear Friend!
True.
Appreciate immensely
the honoring visit, review!!
23rd Feb 2018 1:08pm
Dear cold friend, this one has had no sleep all night, so I’m not able to be as eloquent as others’ comments left. I’ll simply place this piece on my RL for others to see, to come here and read...if they are fortunate.
23rd Feb 2018 1:15pm
Welcome Dear Poetess admired!
Honored and humbled at once
by your visit and review.
The peers above and you have left me utterly humbled for none of ypu have any idea, what an honor it is to not only have such admired poets visit and leave such kind and generous reviews.
Wish you a respiteful, refreshing rest and sleep dear gracious friend.
Appreciation, deep & immense
for everything!
Honored and humbled at once
by your visit and review.
The peers above and you have left me utterly humbled for none of ypu have any idea, what an honor it is to not only have such admired poets visit and leave such kind and generous reviews.
Wish you a respiteful, refreshing rest and sleep dear gracious friend.
Appreciation, deep & immense
for everything!
Anonymous
24th Feb 2018 3:35pm
i really like this a lot, it makes me think of the role that fate plays in ours lives and how sometimes we can change what is fated if we believe enough
28th Feb 2018 12:23pm
welcome
dear poet!
honor is all mine
for the scribble conveyed what
was intended.
well, belief
is not
and should not
be based except
on evidence and facts
and till now
i am yet to find evidence
to the contrary
hence fate,
it can do what it likes
whilst time is of relevance
and then there starts a time
when fate can't do nothing
the realm of faith- for it begins there
and there i believe
nothing can seperate the ones that are dear
to me!
appreciation
immense
for the visit
and the review insightful!!
dear poet!
honor is all mine
for the scribble conveyed what
was intended.
well, belief
is not
and should not
be based except
on evidence and facts
and till now
i am yet to find evidence
to the contrary
hence fate,
it can do what it likes
whilst time is of relevance
and then there starts a time
when fate can't do nothing
the realm of faith- for it begins there
and there i believe
nothing can seperate the ones that are dear
to me!
appreciation
immense
for the visit
and the review insightful!!
Anonymous
28th Feb 2018 3:15pm
you are welcome :)
28th Feb 2018 4:30pm
