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TEMPEST
Tempest wears itself the ir'ny
Upon my arm for all to know,
And in my hair full fast asleep.
Devil may care but I can't be
Bothered, nor will it ever show.
Tempest wears itself the ir'ny
Twisting itself cruel around me,
Pulling me under in its tow
And in my hair full fast asleep.
The eye of the storm rev'rently
I'm blinded to my ev'ry foe,
Tempest wears itself the ir'ny.
A lover's trust within my creed
When hence the pain I give is slow,
And in my hair full fast asleep
Sustains us through the tyranny
Where all is lost in spite the blow.
Tempest wears itself the ir'ny
And in my hair full fast asleep.
Published 20th Feb 2018
Author's Note
A poem in the Villanelle formulaic.
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20th Feb 2018 9:00am
Great piece, Jade, well written. Those last two stanza's I found particularly great.
~anonshadow
~anonshadow
20th Feb 2018 9:11am
Dearest Anon, you certainly have me feeling most humble & grateful with the generous comments you've left for me on this night. I'll be leaving soon to rest, but a gentle smile has alighted my countenance that the sandman won't understand, at least not until he retires at sunrise...
Anonymous
20th Feb 2018 11:21am
Wow! I been trying to write a villanelle for years, but for some reason, been beyond me. My fave poem of all time, 'If I could tell you' by Auden, holds to the villanelle structure. Mightily impressed!
20th Feb 2018 11:47am
I thank you with gladness, T, for your read & embrace of my humble attempt. I find the more time I’ve spent as a wordsmith, the more I’ve come to enjoy as well as get deeper into the many formulaics of poetry.
20th Feb 2018 5:52pm
21st Feb 2018 3:20pm
*bows low and rises*
Many thanks for your wonderful support of many of the eclectic & various traditional directions my writing takes, dear friend!
Many thanks for your wonderful support of many of the eclectic & various traditional directions my writing takes, dear friend!
21st Feb 2018 3:15pm
First instinct was to think of Shakespeare. (the lack of the definite article does make a difference) Took me awhile to get into the "hair" but then I have never professed to be in Einstein's league. This write will stand the test of time!
I'm honored by your take on my Villanelle formulaic treatment, sir Jazz. Btw, I used to post spontaneous little Bard-like verse (off the cuff & on the fly) when I hung out in MSN chat rooms when there used to be an MSN online. This was great practice & a wonderful way of building up stamina doing on-the-spot & quick-witted recitals ...all by knowing Shakespeare so well.
What can I say... I am floored... I love the villanelle form and am particularly enamored of this one... I bow to the tiger queen 👑.
tommy
tommy
23rd Feb 2018 1:21am
Gosh tommy, I’m always left humbled whenever I attempt poetic forms such as sonnets, the Pantoum, and especially the Villanelle. And your response to my TEMPEST is a particular honor considering your well-documented work here on DU over the years, showing that you are the King of these formulaic styles.
My sincerest thanks for your words, support & cherished recommendation (aka The Trilogy!).
I now crown you = 🐯🐾👑😺
My sincerest thanks for your words, support & cherished recommendation (aka The Trilogy!).
I now crown you = 🐯🐾👑😺
