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Life Leaves Us Blessed

Life sometimes flickers and turns on
Like a light bulb. It brings a new dawn.
It is like what we have always been
Praying for and faith to believe in again.
It is like the smile that never stops
Glowing. When it sometimes drops
You down a peg or two and you
Become humbled. It teaches you to
Respect what you are given because
Nobody is that lucky. It gives you pause.

Written by eswaller

Published 9th Feb 2018

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Re. Life Leaves Us Blessed

Ghost223 (The Midnight Poet)

9th Feb 2018 4:08am

A lovely read. I do have suggestions for changes that could be made simple to increase the effect that I, the reader, assume you are trying to convey. Of course, you're entitled to your words and I would never want to ruin your beautiful piece. It would no longer be yours if you took my critique. However, as I stated, if you're interested, there were some parts I felt maybe could've been more effective with different words.

Keep it up---it's a fantastic piece.

~ Midnight