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the last cigarette
I. Prologue
spiral the grief
injected inside torment
as Jupiter's screws turn
my light bulb moon
casts a pallor on my thoughts
they get darker & darker
feeding off one another
a cannibal corpse
eats my necrotic pain
II. utterances
my demons scream
let me hunt the cunt
that bled from her lips
crimson rain
awakened the agony
& dimmed the light
the last cigarette in the pack
is a woman half crocked
relieve our craving
for if not we will leave you
smoked from the inside out
your soul choking on its ashes
heed our warning lady dark
the hour is approaching
speak for us & free us
or we will seal your lips
killing your inspiration
III. my curse
inside a neon curse
I witness your collective
glowing within the darkness
your lips curled & feral
as I close the curtains
to the gas chamber of futility
& breathe in their deadly toxins
my pain is yours to expose
leave me on the floor gasping
Copyright © 2018 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
Published 15th Jan 2018
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15th Jan 2018 10:58am
Intense ink, your power of perception slices these demons in vivid imagery..
“spiral the grief
injected inside torment
as Jupiter's screws turn
my light bulb moon
casts a pallor on my thoughts”
“the last cigarette in the pack
is a woman half crocked
relieve our craving
if not we will leave you
smoked from the inside out
your soul choking on its ashes”
Every word churns its wickedness with your poetic tongue!
Many hugs lovely Brenda <3
“spiral the grief
injected inside torment
as Jupiter's screws turn
my light bulb moon
casts a pallor on my thoughts”
“the last cigarette in the pack
is a woman half crocked
relieve our craving
if not we will leave you
smoked from the inside out
your soul choking on its ashes”
Every word churns its wickedness with your poetic tongue!
Many hugs lovely Brenda <3
15th Jan 2018 3:34pm
thank you graciously beautiful Nightbird for showing love on this darkened scribe..
love Brenda
love Brenda
15th Jan 2018 3:25pm
this reminded me of sex machines cock gun from in"from dusk til dawn"
your work is always captivating
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Jupiter is the screw
the universe is the champagne bottle
or the girl guiding it in after a late night of play
flip the switch and the opaque glass watt bulb blows
shattering as lighthouse signals
falling faded stars
broken dreams delicious
reanimate this unworthy Tonka toy puppet
Beheaded with ones own Katana
blood on the toilet seat again
lap up the salt and brine
throwing dark used tampons in trash cans
they reached for lunatics laughing
in white wrapping hug coats
but tore happiness from the world instead
fresh chewed food
from the mouth that bore us demons
drinking past capacity
she shot looks as nail drivers
they coughed up cancer sticks so fast
barcodes were left gyrating
Elvis's hips
crawling in the cremation oven
this warmth
identifying
the ash by fire clay
the lady of the lake
spirits us away
as gas lit lamps in the 1800's
spouting secrets like water sprites do
quiet down
quick quills
or we'll throw you in the kiln
luscious lips
ink and all
fighting the frozen fetal position
morticians broke us in half
left us in broad basements
tomorrows workload
for the placement of the human body
can set the center stage
spinning like a top
puncture trachea's in a strip tease
tell me you Love me as your savior
bask in my presence pretender
accompany this fine China life to the floor
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you yourself are the first cigarette after sex Crim
well penned
you put the punctuation in our sentences
your work is always captivating
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Jupiter is the screw
the universe is the champagne bottle
or the girl guiding it in after a late night of play
flip the switch and the opaque glass watt bulb blows
shattering as lighthouse signals
falling faded stars
broken dreams delicious
reanimate this unworthy Tonka toy puppet
Beheaded with ones own Katana
blood on the toilet seat again
lap up the salt and brine
throwing dark used tampons in trash cans
they reached for lunatics laughing
in white wrapping hug coats
but tore happiness from the world instead
fresh chewed food
from the mouth that bore us demons
drinking past capacity
she shot looks as nail drivers
they coughed up cancer sticks so fast
barcodes were left gyrating
Elvis's hips
crawling in the cremation oven
this warmth
identifying
the ash by fire clay
the lady of the lake
spirits us away
as gas lit lamps in the 1800's
spouting secrets like water sprites do
quiet down
quick quills
or we'll throw you in the kiln
luscious lips
ink and all
fighting the frozen fetal position
morticians broke us in half
left us in broad basements
tomorrows workload
for the placement of the human body
can set the center stage
spinning like a top
puncture trachea's in a strip tease
tell me you Love me as your savior
bask in my presence pretender
accompany this fine China life to the floor
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you yourself are the first cigarette after sex Crim
well penned
you put the punctuation in our sentences
15th Jan 2018 3:32pm
aw dearest Samael thank you graciously
I was hoping you would enjoy this one
& do one of your fucking fantastic critiques
I get giddy & a little light headed reading everytime
you should totally post this by the way I think it's that awesome..
you are a gift to us poets at this site
just wanted you to know how much I cherish you..
no one does inspired critiques like you do
you are a true poetic visionary..
love Crim
I was hoping you would enjoy this one
& do one of your fucking fantastic critiques
I get giddy & a little light headed reading everytime
you should totally post this by the way I think it's that awesome..
you are a gift to us poets at this site
just wanted you to know how much I cherish you..
no one does inspired critiques like you do
you are a true poetic visionary..
love Crim
15th Jan 2018 3:47pm
You're too kind.
i just try to take a different approach to how i interpret things
i really like the idea of being inspired by others
and bridging on visions
trying to take it to the next level
leaps and bounds
poetry is a pinprick in a sea of slaughter
i'm the defenseless baby seal
and life is the clubbing bastards trying to knock me over the head
i think some people get it and others don't
i may be before my time with this
i just try to take a different approach to how i interpret things
i really like the idea of being inspired by others
and bridging on visions
trying to take it to the next level
leaps and bounds
poetry is a pinprick in a sea of slaughter
i'm the defenseless baby seal
and life is the clubbing bastards trying to knock me over the head
i think some people get it and others don't
i may be before my time with this
15th Jan 2018 3:51pm
well dearest poet I absolutely love how you see things
it is a thrill to read your thoughts truly..
love Crim
it is a thrill to read your thoughts truly..
love Crim
Anonymous
15th Jan 2018 7:52pm
my love, you may feel it a curse when exposing the inner pain and deadly toxins but it is what fuels incredible ink such as this...the fire you have continues to burn brightly when utterances urge and push you in a forward motion...
"relieve our craving
for if not we will leave you
smoked from the inside out
your soul choking on its ashes
heed our warning lady dark
the hour is approaching
speak for us & free us"
*
"my pain is yours to expose
leave me on the floor gasping"
- you wouldn't want it any other way
I love you fiercely
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Love Taryn
"relieve our craving
for if not we will leave you
smoked from the inside out
your soul choking on its ashes
heed our warning lady dark
the hour is approaching
speak for us & free us"
*
"my pain is yours to expose
leave me on the floor gasping"
- you wouldn't want it any other way
I love you fiercely
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Love Taryn
18th Jan 2018 1:40am
thank you my love for such an insightful comment you're right looking on this I wouldn't want it otherwise to be able to express ourselves is a gift..
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
15th Jan 2018 8:29pm
"spiral the grief
injected inside torment
as Jupiter's screws turn
my light bulb moon
casts a pallor on my thoughts
they get darker & darker
feeding off one another
a cannibal corpse
eats my necrotic pain"
beautiful metaphor my dark queen...spinning mind grasping at connections...the crimson moon lights in my head...you walk me through the corridors of your life in clever manifesting word play...
love the black and white movie
and you
Jeff
injected inside torment
as Jupiter's screws turn
my light bulb moon
casts a pallor on my thoughts
they get darker & darker
feeding off one another
a cannibal corpse
eats my necrotic pain"
beautiful metaphor my dark queen...spinning mind grasping at connections...the crimson moon lights in my head...you walk me through the corridors of your life in clever manifesting word play...
love the black and white movie
and you
Jeff
18th Jan 2018 1:42am
thank you most graciously dearest Jeff you gifted me smiles with your comment :)
love Crim
love Crim
Anonymous
15th Jan 2018 10:35pm
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18th Jan 2018 1:44am
thank you graciously dearest Ghost
love your insight & comment
I didn't think of the sacredness of the trilogy
I deeply appreciate your thoughts..
love Brenda
love your insight & comment
I didn't think of the sacredness of the trilogy
I deeply appreciate your thoughts..
love Brenda
Anonymous
18th Jan 2018 3:35am
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18th Jan 2018 3:42am
I agree wholly with the channeling idea I know when i'm in the zone I do & when they don't come through I don't write.. I deeply appreciate the knowledge on this subject..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Anonymous
18th Jan 2018 3:46am
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15th Jan 2018 11:40pm
Always, always love this feeling of wickedness and brutality of your royal composure in your write..
I always read this in a specific tone of voice, that I imagine it to be your voice...
a poem, so strong of presence, and presence of your own in all your works
You write a specific type of poem, and you're DMANNN good at it..
you're good at what you do, and it can seem kind of repetitive at times, but if I come to your works, I come to expect
the taste of your own flavor
your fragrance leaks into mine as well..
<3
H
I always read this in a specific tone of voice, that I imagine it to be your voice...
a poem, so strong of presence, and presence of your own in all your works
You write a specific type of poem, and you're DMANNN good at it..
you're good at what you do, and it can seem kind of repetitive at times, but if I come to your works, I come to expect
the taste of your own flavor
your fragrance leaks into mine as well..
<3
H
18th Jan 2018 1:47am
thank you beautiful Hanuel
for such a lovely comment you gifted me smiles with your graciousness :)
we do blend with each other us poets
i'm happy to be an influence..
love Crim
for such a lovely comment you gifted me smiles with your graciousness :)
we do blend with each other us poets
i'm happy to be an influence..
love Crim
16th Jan 2018 11:50pm
"my demons scream
let me hunt the cunt
that bled from her lips
crimson rain"
Oh. My. God.
let me hunt the cunt
that bled from her lips
crimson rain"
Oh. My. God.
18th Jan 2018 1:48am
thank you beautiful Atomik One I love your response.. you brought me smiles :)
love Crim
love Crim
17th Jan 2018 3:38am
This is an earthquake of penmanship. Profoundly beautiful.
Smoked from the inside out.
Love your shit Brenda.
Smoked from the inside out.
Love your shit Brenda.
18th Jan 2018 1:49am
thank you graciously dearest David you're beautiful my friend I love your's too..
love Brenda
love Brenda
17th Jan 2018 3:57pm
a beautifully dark scribe - you are the queen of this - Huge Like :-)))))))
Love and huge hugs :-))))))
Love and huge hugs :-))))))
18th Jan 2018 1:51am
thank you dearest David for such a gracious comment you gifted me smiles :)
love & hugs..
Brenda
love & hugs..
Brenda
Anonymous
17th Jan 2018 7:44pm
the gallery of shadows have sentenced you
their voices become your convictions
'as I close the curtains
to the gas chamber of futility
& breathe in their deadly toxins
my pain is yours to expose
leave me on the floor gasping '
your poems always hit way beneath he surface Crim..
where the darkness is omnipresent..
their voices become your convictions
'as I close the curtains
to the gas chamber of futility
& breathe in their deadly toxins
my pain is yours to expose
leave me on the floor gasping '
your poems always hit way beneath he surface Crim..
where the darkness is omnipresent..
18th Jan 2018 2:00am
thank you dearest Naajir
for feeling this write as well as my others.. you gifted me smiles :)
sometimes the dark stirs
& I give it voice..
love Crim
for feeling this write as well as my others.. you gifted me smiles :)
sometimes the dark stirs
& I give it voice..
love Crim
18th Jan 2018 11:11am
that's major tobacco intolerance, Crim;
the cigarette police will use your poem in their campaign...
the cigarette police will use your poem in their campaign...
18th Jan 2018 11:24am
giggles yeah they might :)
thank you John love seeing you on my pages..
love Crim
thank you John love seeing you on my pages..
love Crim
Anonymous
18th Jan 2018 7:35pm
Breathless - but then I have come to expect nothing less from you.
Love your dark voice, it’s pretty magical :)
Love your dark voice, it’s pretty magical :)
18th Jan 2018 7:55pm
thank you graciously beautiful Sophie for such a lovely comment.. you gifted me smiles :)
love Crim
love Crim
18th Jan 2018 9:20pm
Enthralling write Crim, The pain is there but so's the eloquence. I still won't give up smoking anytime soon.
