Fuck o'clock

I love the line

my moons turn to rust
& fail to shine

such vivid imagery created for me in this write dearest Crim. The beauty of your words always has an impact on me. Thank you for sharing!

thank you beautiful Star
for feeling & visualizing this write..

love Crim

Another brutal write, dripping with pain & artistry of introspection. I follow your word streams as a narcissist seeks mirrors.

thank you dearest Rob I have some catching up to do give me time dear poet..  your comment made me smile :)

love Brenda

Aaaawwww, my dearest I'm saddened by your implication
that you may have slipped up...
I hope I'm wrong, n you're still maintaining the hard fight...I'm truly prayin' for ur victory over that madness.

thank you dearest Poe for the love & the prayers.. part of the fight is falling down but I keep getting back up..

love Crim

"asphyxia fucked her  
until the heaven's bled black"

Favorite lines, without a doubt.

But rather powerful, on the whole

thank you dearest Obsessed One for showing love on this write..I cherish your thoughts..

love Crim

Dark and powerful! Sobriety is hard to maintain!

thank you dearest Xmar for feeling this..

love Brenda

Sad but powerful emotions envoked
like catching a beating victim off guard.

heavens bleeding black

tunneling vortex  of self hate  

the screaming sparrows  
of tomorrow's sobriety

ghostly apparitions call my name- i really like this line;hauntingly good.

enriching lines here Crimsin
well penned.

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as we pause to reflect
i wish you all the best with battles long fought
for we take the fight uphill
stepping out of our own graves

shovels pointed up
the numbered calendar papers
dropping days as dames
though punchlines may not seem the same
we must tear away from sordid games

these pine trees pitch a scent so familiar
sitting there on the concrete bench
in the graveyard
it rained
and rained
and rained

melting steam rose off the ground
granting passage to those that passed
pulling from the aching bodies and hurt
they leave behind loved ones
or at least one smile in a passing stranger

mating birds beat their chests
matriarchs meet them with matches for the fire
lighting glass oil astral lamps

we say goodbyes to ourselves  
this arthritis of a life
leaks as week old caskets do


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inspiring as always Crimsin

thank you dearest Samael it touches my heart greatly that you took the time to do this awesome, killer critique when you are struggling with your mom being ill.. I don't know how to thank you enough you have such a freaking fantastic poetic eye..

I get so excited whenever you grace my pages
with inspiration wrought from what i've written..

love & hugs my friend..

Crimsin

thank you beautiful Kat for dipping in tasting my essence & despite the dark finding light there..

I deeply cherish you lady..

love Crim

thank you beautiful Daniella
for your deeply encouraging interpretation
of this write..

I feel empowered by your love
& belief in me..

I feel those hugs..
they warmed & moved me..

love & hugs returned..

Brenda

An intense and disturbing reflection whatever the time.  You reveal much about yourself in fearless fashion, and I'm in awe.  There's darkness here but it shines.

thank you dearest Sir Crow
for taking this internal journey with me
& for still seeing beauty..

love Crim

The beginning made me think of A Clockwork Orange, the intensity,
But then it progressed to sublime towards the end, the ending is well penned,
really excellent..

thank you beautiful PR i've never seen the film.. thank you for feeling the intensity & sharing your thoughts on this write it's deeply appreciated..

love Crim

dam,"until the heavens bled black ", that's a hellified visual there, no pun intended lol, u take the reader on a ride girl no matter the subject, devastating subject, brilliant art, Crim de la...

thank you graciously dearest Dean happy to take you on a ride pleased to have you as company..you always make my days & nights brighter i've got a big smile here :)

love Crim

A taunting poem that reaches deep inside and churns one's soul my dear Brenda...as Nietzsche said, What doesn't kill us makes us stronger...I love your strength my friend.
Shalom...Harry

thank you dearest Harry for feeling this write
& for the truth in the quote.. I will get stronger..

love Brenda

Oh my an intense sublime strong wording poem in creative awesome metaphor. The rusting moon wow, all so effectively expressed. Kudos.

Soo nice to read from your poets  ink again ,  Pleez do review comment my latest newest poem too.

thank you beautiful poetess most graciously I read & commented on your last poem it was fantastic..

love Crim

My love, you know this ink causes me scrunched face and icky feelings but only for the best reasons...your last line is the punch to this and allows me to also say the following...with each write you do recognizing the battles you face and the demons you ward off, you are anything but a fallen victim...but rather a fierce fighter...who rises each day with determination and these are the reasons I have come to love you as passionately as I do and always will...I have you in permanent hold, pressed close to my flesh...

I love you madly, deeply, fiercely

yours always & forever
xoxoxox Love Taryn

my love I know why this made your face scrunch with the writing of it, it made me do the same.. I pray with these revelations comes strength to battle.. I love you so fiercely & with a passion you always see the best in me..

love Brenda

Such a good poem and quite sad at the same time.  Very well penned

thank you graciously dearest poetess for feeling the depths of it & welcome to DU..

love Crim

not sure whether like the poem or to feel sad - such a beautifully crafted poem

Huge massive Hugs :-))))

thank you dearest David it's alright to enjoy the writing style without liking its content I understand..

love & hugs..

Brenda

IT'S A BEAUTIFUL POEM AND SO WELL WRITTEN AS ALWAYS
KINDA GOT TO ME MADE ME SAD FOR  YOU - KINDA LUMP IN THE THROAT TIME

HUGE HUGS -  SORRY ITS IN CAPS I JUST NOTICED  {LOL}

lol David you are too funny
thank you my friend :)

love & hugs..

Brenda