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Diabolical
the night caught my scent
of humanity & sex
it burned with a rage
that i still walk
beneath its psychotic moon
so it peeled
the walls in my mind
of its sanity
& moaned in pleasure
then ate from my skull
the fruit of the hunted
as maggots wriggled
in the belly
of the devil i tempted
who strung me from
the hard-on moon
& fucked my ripe cherry
as i bled lies
from my brutalized cunt
with a forked cock
it confessed its diseased thoughts
& i lapped up its cum
like it was truth from the cross
wholly beguiled
by the one who despises
i swallowed it all
then spit blasphemies
born of the semen
it spew in me
& the dark was born
from hate
then released into the world
to rape the minds
of the innocent
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Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 9:57am
Now that's what I call some serious fucking metaphor! And that's why I love you so much Brenda!!! That was a real mind blower!
JJ
JJ
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Re: Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 10:09am
thank you graciously dearest JJ
blushing wildly from your beautiful comment :)
love you to my friend..
Brenda
blushing wildly from your beautiful comment :)
love you to my friend..
Brenda
Re: Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 10:15am
Well you deserve it! When I say it was a mind blower, it really was a blow job for he brain. You used metaphor in almost every line, except the one where you used like, which made it a mere simile... lol
My brain would have passed out half-way through writing this one!
And with so much feeling!
My brain would have passed out half-way through writing this one!
And with so much feeling!
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Re: Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 10:19am
thank you dearest JJ
i'm happy with the way it turned out
I had several hours to work on it..
so I just played with it until
I was able to post..
i'm over the moon with your comment :)
love Brenda
i'm happy with the way it turned out
I had several hours to work on it..
so I just played with it until
I was able to post..
i'm over the moon with your comment :)
love Brenda
Re: Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 10:23am
Be careful going over the moon Brenda, it may still be feeling psychotic after you just went beneath it...
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Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 12:05pm
Curtsy to you my lovely lady. This is a masterpiece. It has so much depth to it.
Messages about religion and depravity. My favorite part was:
the dark was born
from hate
then released into the world
to rape the minds
of the innocent
You have amazing talent lovely Crim.
Messages about religion and depravity. My favorite part was:
the dark was born
from hate
then released into the world
to rape the minds
of the innocent
You have amazing talent lovely Crim.
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Re: Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 6:52pm
thank you beautiful Jade most graciously
mixing religion
& darkness was interesting
i'm happy it came through
& you enjoyed..
I am highly honored by your comment
because I cherish your thoughts
you're such a gifted poet..
love Crim
mixing religion
& darkness was interesting
i'm happy it came through
& you enjoyed..
I am highly honored by your comment
because I cherish your thoughts
you're such a gifted poet..
love Crim
Re: Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 9:44pm
Re. Diabolical
Anonymous
15th Dec 2017 12:37pm
god, you such a brilliant writer. Moves and shakes me.
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Re: Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 6:53pm
thank you graciously Rob
i'm both blushing & beaming
from your beautiful comment :)
love Brenda
i'm both blushing & beaming
from your beautiful comment :)
love Brenda
Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 1:05pm
This write is strait up sexy,hands down and tethered to the bed.
well done Crim.
well done Crim.
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Re: Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 6:53pm
Re: Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 6:54pm
Re. Diabolical
Anonymous
15th Dec 2017 2:50pm
I am utterly dumbstruck after reading this powerful piece, my beautiful Dark Angel. Nobody spreads it like you do. The way you see things...and then how you articulate them. You reach so many with your voice, beautiful. I do so love you, soo so much
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 6:56pm
aw thank you graciously beautiful Willow
I cherish your thoughts & visits..
you always brighten my day
even the darkest of them..
l love you..
Brenda
I cherish your thoughts & visits..
you always brighten my day
even the darkest of them..
l love you..
Brenda
Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 7:46pm
what I like to call a boot to the balls kinda poem - fierce write :-)
Huge Hugs :-))))
Huge Hugs :-))))
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Re: Re. Diabolical
16th Dec 2017 2:29am
Re. Diabolical
Anonymous
15th Dec 2017 9:29pm
Brenda.. this is powerful.. as only you could pen.. the brutality of truth, pierces my mind.. kicking ass and taking names kinda like.. love this, and love you my sister..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. Diabolical
16th Dec 2017 2:30am
Re. Diabolical
15th Dec 2017 9:47pm
Magical. Mistical. Magnificent. Metaphors.
Unbelievable talent my dear poetess 🌹
Favorite stanza
with a forked cock
it confessed its diseased thoughts
& i lapped up its semen
like it was truth from the cross
With much admiration
~Wicked
Unbelievable talent my dear poetess 🌹
Favorite stanza
with a forked cock
it confessed its diseased thoughts
& i lapped up its semen
like it was truth from the cross
With much admiration
~Wicked
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Re: Re. Diabolical
16th Dec 2017 2:31am
thank you graciously Wicked One
I'm blushing from your wonderful comment :)
love Crim
I'm blushing from your wonderful comment :)
love Crim
Re. Diabolical
16th Dec 2017 2:52am
My goodness!
Your words are so amazingly fierce, with insanely dark yet elegance of essence emitting its presence straight through this screen to my heart!
My..... I admire you so greatly <3
Hanuel
Your words are so amazingly fierce, with insanely dark yet elegance of essence emitting its presence straight through this screen to my heart!
My..... I admire you so greatly <3
Hanuel
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Re: Re. Diabolical
16th Dec 2017 2:56am
thank you beautiful Hanuel
you honor me greatly
so wonderful your comment
causing me to both blush & smile :)
I deeply cherish you dearest poetess..
love Crim
you honor me greatly
so wonderful your comment
causing me to both blush & smile :)
I deeply cherish you dearest poetess..
love Crim
Re. Diabolical
Anonymous
16th Dec 2017 10:48pm
I’ll never get enough of how beautiful you make the darkness.
Left in awe as always <3
Left in awe as always <3
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Re: Re. Diabolical
16th Dec 2017 10:54pm
thank you beautiful Sophie
i'm blushing & beaming from your comment :)
love Crim
i'm blushing & beaming from your comment :)
love Crim
Re. Diabolical
Anonymous
17th Dec 2017 1:59am
My love you have outdone yourself with this one!! (Along with so many others of course...) I can’t say anything more those above me haven’t already said...the use of metaphor is stunning...your mind and your visions are made of magic and a spell I always wish to be cast upon me...I can’t even highlight a favorite line...no no no no no ...there are just too many and it would be torture to try and select one without insulting another...
I love you madly deeply passionately
yours always & forever
xoxo Love Taryn
I love you madly deeply passionately
yours always & forever
xoxo Love Taryn
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Re: Re. Diabolical
17th Dec 2017 10:12pm
thank you my love
i'm over the moon happy
you loved this one
it's one of my favorites
from the last couple days..
you weave your own brand of magic
that keeps us coming back for more..
I love madly..
Brenda
i'm over the moon happy
you loved this one
it's one of my favorites
from the last couple days..
you weave your own brand of magic
that keeps us coming back for more..
I love madly..
Brenda