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Cramped Space...
The trek
within
thoughts
leave
jagged
edges
adorned
in blood
soaked
desires
of a once
full
well
...fed
now, the
spiral-
ring,
ever
turnin'
into the
void of
complete
nothiness...
within
thoughts
leave
jagged
edges
adorned
in blood
soaked
desires
of a once
full
well
...fed
now, the
spiral-
ring,
ever
turnin'
into the
void of
complete
nothiness...
Published 1st Dec 2017
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1st Dec 2017 11:59am
expression.
dark.
of darkness.
delivery, effective, for the pressing
was felt.
job dear poet.
dark.
of darkness.
delivery, effective, for the pressing
was felt.
job dear poet.
1st Dec 2017 12:13pm
1st Dec 2017 12:00pm
1st Dec 2017 12:06pm
Aaaawwww I'm sorry, here... U can have it back... Lol sorry, juss bring silly... Thank u so much...appreciate it. :)
1st Dec 2017 1:06pm
I particularly enjoyed the form on this, PoeticOne. It spirals straight down with the descent.
1st Dec 2017 1:12pm
Ahavati, I truly love how deeply perceptive u are...Yup, down down down it goes...lol still, I'm happy for ur astute eye... grateful for all u are :)
dearest Poe this one had me spiraling
down to nothing with the words
I felt my emotions stir & twist with this one..
like riding a roller coaster ride straight down..
wonderful..
love Crim
down to nothing with the words
I felt my emotions stir & twist with this one..
like riding a roller coaster ride straight down..
wonderful..
love Crim
2nd Dec 2017 00:08am
1st Dec 2017 8:08pm
Not sure of your intent here, but it got me up from sitting on my pen in the emptiness.
Thanks Poe.
Liked the structure as well.
Thanks Poe.
Liked the structure as well.
2nd Dec 2017 00:12am
Most times there is no intent, only spillage... but I do thank you my dear, always... :)
2nd Dec 2017 00:13am
Very interesting write. This particular structure,as the others mentioned, has a certain effect I really enjoy.. you sure are a experienced poet
Love
H
Love
H
2nd Dec 2017 12:06pm
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3rd Dec 2017 12:06pm
The visuality of this poem reinforces its title and message ... I can feel the constriction ... despair. Well done my dear poet.
3rd Dec 2017 1:17pm
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3rd Dec 2017 10:31pm
Comprehended amd felt sir..
3rd Dec 2017 10:45pm
You my dear are wonderful...I'm grateful, n forever appreciate ur support...
4th Dec 2017 11:05am
I can feel the trek, very cramped.....from your designed idea to the expressed words.....worked very well.......
Big hug, RoseJasmine
Big hug, RoseJasmine
4th Dec 2017 1:48pm
Ah...you wanna somethin' ironic?
At first, Trek, was my title but I thought describing it rather than saying it was better :)...truly grateful for your support! :)
At first, Trek, was my title but I thought describing it rather than saying it was better :)...truly grateful for your support! :)
8th Dec 2017 12:08pm
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23rd Dec 2017 1:53am
Delightful and insightful, dare I say, incite in such a short space? A journey to the end of our collective mind bend.
Nice....David
Nice....David
23rd Dec 2017 10:23am
