Purging

Very intense, vivid imagery..!
When ya got something that needs gettin' out, release it in a poem!
Well bled!
JJ

Thank you sir! :)

oh wow beautiful Nightbird
this is so very powerful
striking imagery throughout
that really blows the mind
with it's raw & utter truth..

mind bending lines like this..

"perceiving
hollowed out
purity
although
in brevity
thin
as bones
can show"

they really knock one on their ass
left dazed in the light of your honesty..

excellent write lovely poetess..

love Crim

Generous one, you bring great warmth to my heart with your eloquent remarks... always <3

another one of yours that creates its own beat and would be such a good performance poem - I've read it out loud 5 or 6 times altering the beat and speed - I think it is stronger out loud than on the page and some poems are just that way

Excellent write my friend :-) Hugs :-)

I do forget that noone else is in my head to enjoy these words being performed, as I am permitted to experience (lol)... It does feel epic to read this aloud in all of its intonation! :) Thank you so much for engaging my friend! :)))

intonation and speed of flow can totally change the understanding of a poem from an audience perspective - that is also why some poems work as performances and some don't :-)

Ya know I never -sought- to write poetry for the means of performance... traditionally, I would rather not ever speak publicly. But I have seen clearly since you started observing this, how some of my poetry is naturally spoken out of me, rather than written for only a page. I appreciate your wise eye on this ;) The speed would also influence the perception of the piece, the subtle pauses. It is animated and becomes full of life! Much fun :)

we are the same I only initially wrote for myself, then for reading at writers groups and finally performance in front of audience, so I think I am good judge as to what should work. If you can act emotions or indeed release real ones, again that adds another layer - maybe at some point you might want to perform??? :-))

The emotional release is always that most real, it feels so good to speak  :) Truth is I would love to perform, think it'd be pretty wicked and I would probably gain a lot of confidence from it :) Just gotta figure out how to take that first step...

Practice, practice, practice - to do a 20 minute set you would need to rehearse that for about 2 weeks, unless you have a natural talent

I do tend to blow people away when I do things of the like :P Not to say I've never performed... it is both terrifying and exhilarating! Just wouldn't want to do something quite so personal as some of this poetry... Suppose it would be as simple as to compose messages of broader insight. My teen nephew has been in drama for years, I bet he would love to be a host audience! He and I are very like-minded :)

why not write for performance and then if you enjoy doing it and people don't run for the hills then you can share as much of you as you decide - the nephew idea is a good one if he is likely to be honest :-)

Haha but what if they do run?! :) He is as brutally honest as I am. I may have to pursue this endeavor... thank you for your encouraging words my friend :)

Do please check out our spoken word group “Loud-Speaker Poetry” - we will gladly help you out with that first step into performance. We are here to help :)

This poem is so dark it left its ink prints all over my face. That last stanza is the main artery of the poem, shows this really vulnerable side that the rest of the poem almost covers up.

Thank you so much for sharing. Always a joy to read your offerings.

Thank you for your praise Missy! You’ve put a wide smile on my face :)

I foresee myself mustering up some courage for the Loud-Speaker Poetry group in due time :) Thank you for your encouragement my friend!

I agree about the performance art! You should hook up with Big Virge and the new group Webmiss just created!

This piece would be perfect pounded out vocally.

Thank you I’ll have to check that out :)

Absolutely adore this! The imagery is so intense. Brilliant work :)

Thank you for your kind remarks! :)

I think you did very well with this poem, it has a nice flow to it and it makes me wanna read it over and over again

Thank you for the feedback!

truly puts a perspective on eating disorders. suffering from a few on my own i know exactly what this looks and feels like. being such a dark matter you have actually brought a sort of beauty to this. love it

I suffered in the grips of anorexia and bulimia for many years throughout my teens. It became a compulsive behavior that unfortunately is still very difficult to combat, a decade later. Such monsters can come crawling out of the dark even when you think you've outgrown them.

I'm glad you could appreciate this poem, and hope you know you can reach out to me if you ever feel the need =)

thank you. i loved this poem because it truly speaks out of the feeling i too stills struggle with anorexia and bulimia.

i have to echo those above, in respect of reading this aloud. some pieces just demand a voice & this is, without a doubt, one of them.
its about 10pm here & i've just read
"bite off
some sorrow
chew up
your ventricles
let the teeth
of your thoughts
digest"
aloud..  several times. probably terrified my old man half to death but darn if this isn't just darkly beautiful & compelling.
it's a bloody great write.
so pleased to read you.
~ katja

LOL! Glad to have provided some late-night fright for the household as you read this aloud haha =) I enjoy the darkness in art quite a bit, and I'm glad that others appreciate it too!

Thank you for your support of this becoming a spoken-word - I've just begun practicing vocal delivery and hope to come back to a handful of my poems in time, with some added audio ;)

Thank you also for the RL add! I am honored =)

First off... thank you for sharing this bold and brilliant piece! It left me speechless...

Having an eating disorder myself since my teens (currently fighting a relapse) this resonates deeply with me. I've written a few pieces on the subject  though I always thought it was a bit of a taboo, even here. Because of the "themes" (which I really disliked at first) I found this gem.

Brava for speaking out!

I’m honored that this poem has made it into your RL, thank you Duende 🙏

As a teen I never wanted anyone to have to go through the things that I did, and still do from time to time. I feel it’s so important to speak up about such struggles and support others who feel the same. My heart goes out to you during this relapse poetess, may you find strength that you are not alone 💖

And ironic you may not know, my nick-name is Gem 💎 as I am a Gemini.

I fully agree with you about speaking up! After I "came out of the closet" I have always been open about it, even if it's only to raise awareness or help someone who struggles with the same disease.

Gem is a beautiful nick-name, dear poetess! Thank you from the bottom of my heart for the well wishes. Same goes for you!

Love & Light, Duende

This is excellent.
Love the word choice, themes, and construction of your stanzas.
Very well written!

Thank you for your feedback.