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Late Night Lunatic
the smell
of shit
follows
wherever
you go
putrid puke
spilling
from your
lips
in gross
statements
that demean
dissolve me
to my bones
in burning
bodily acids
crisply cutting
to my core
singeing
my heart
suffocating
no retort
not allowed
in your house
let’s play
a game...
OBEY
sit be quiet
stay
don’t leave me
you’ll say
next
so scripted
think you’re
cryptic
then backflip
break
your arm
oops you
just meant to
tenderly
twist it
severed limbs
are mine
as you rip
me down
to dismal
dimensions
disrespectful
battleground
corpsing around
as we wish
death come
less yielding
our crimes
against wisdom
accuse
or blame
just the same
for your crown
I will
roll over
or I’ll run
so far
away
will you...
write songs
when
I’m gone...
gone...
wish I
could say
“fuck you”
sometimes
when
I’m fried
and unbound
blur you out
just look down
must protect
my chest
from your
sounds
guttural waves
of insanity
blasting caves
empty space
futility...
empty space
futility...
...just look down
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Re. Late Night Lunatic
5th Oct 2017 7:33pm
Your poetry is a pleasure to read aloud, you have a firm grasp on rhythm!
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8th Oct 2017 4:22am
As I read your comment here the other day, I chuckled to myself. I realized that, because I've never really shared my poetry before, I've never gotten feedback to realize even the littlest things about my own forms of expression, such as innate rhythm! Thank you so much for your honest critique AtoMikbomb!
Re. Late Night Lunatic
5th Oct 2017 7:46pm
another wow moment - this is so good - it was one of those poems that would not let me stop reading to the end - it captivated me despite is rawness and some of the imagery - don't get me wrong - this was an excellent piece of poetry that you should be proud of :-))))
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I am humbled by your gracious remarks!! Raw indeed, was up until 3, couldn't sleep, words flowing from me! Minimal editing on this one, I felt the piece spoke for itself from the moment it was birthed.
Re: Re. Late Night Lunatic
8th Oct 2017 6:35pm
poetic flow - when it happens tends to create the best poetry certainly does for me - I wish it happened all the time (lol) you are good - I say what I see and feel :-)
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8th Oct 2017 7:14pm
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8th Oct 2017 7:53pm
to use a vulgar phrase - I don't blow smoke up peoples asses - When I say, for instance, I think a poem is beautiful, I actually mean it :-)
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Re: Re. Late Night Lunatic
8th Oct 2017 8:09pm
:) I do not take your praise lightly, kind one. I have thus far cherished your acclamation, and I look forward to further critique from such a seasoned versifier as yourself! <3
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8th Oct 2017 8:13pm
Re. Late Night Lunatic
5th Oct 2017 7:49pm
this is utterly bad ass
I was chilled to the bone by your commanding
& wicked verse..
love Crimsin
I was chilled to the bone by your commanding
& wicked verse..
love Crimsin
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Re: Re. Late Night Lunatic
8th Oct 2017 4:41am
Chilling, indeed; it felt like ice.
I enjoyed your enthused response! <3
I enjoyed your enthused response! <3
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6th Oct 2017 3:48am
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8th Oct 2017 4:44am
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8th Oct 2017 4:46am
Re. Late Night Lunatic
As anger poems go, this imparts the emotion like an armor piercing bullet through Kevlar! I've read it a few times and each time I want to do horrible things to him. I'm a nice guy, but my nature is overwhelmed sometimes, like right now...
JJ
JJ
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I appreciate you taking the time to connect emotionally with this poem...
Few occasion it has been that I've been in a place to express my rawest feelings, and in-so doing receive response as sympathizing as yours, and others here. Thank you!
Few occasion it has been that I've been in a place to express my rawest feelings, and in-so doing receive response as sympathizing as yours, and others here. Thank you!
Re. Late Night Lunatic
14th Oct 2017 3:11am
People like this fill me with a rage. That you are left feeling as you do just intensifies the wrath. You have left me laid bare. I know not the proper words to express my discontent. Righteous vindication should be yours.
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Re: Re. Late Night Lunatic
14th Oct 2017 3:34am
I'm am empowered and lifted by your support, Sunwolfe. Thank you~ But perhaps it is not so simple. Culpable as one may be in any given situation.
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12th Mar 2024 6:55pm
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22nd Mar 2024 6:20pm
Thank you so much for connecting on this piece, it’s one of my favorites as it was birthed under great pressure.