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< 9/11 >
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grief
cannot be compared
9/11 is a spectacle
created for sensation
for news
for votes
for money
for control...
the dead
may rest
the living
may mourn
but the profit
WILL
be made
- - -
older version just for comparison:
< 9/11 >
somewhere in the world
a mother watches her children starve to death
or
she gets a call:
dead
in a car
a hospital
the Trade Center
Afghanistan...
grief
cannot be compared
9/11 is a spectacle
created for sensation
for news
for votes
for money
for control...
the dead
may rest
the living
may mourn
but the profit
WILL
be made
- - -
grief
cannot be compared
9/11 is a spectacle
created for sensation
for news
for votes
for money
for control...
the dead
may rest
the living
may mourn
but the profit
WILL
be made
- - -
older version just for comparison:
< 9/11 >
somewhere in the world
a mother watches her children starve to death
or
she gets a call:
dead
in a car
a hospital
the Trade Center
Afghanistan...
grief
cannot be compared
9/11 is a spectacle
created for sensation
for news
for votes
for money
for control...
the dead
may rest
the living
may mourn
but the profit
WILL
be made
- - -
Published 11th Sep 2011
| Edited 5th Sep 2012
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Anonymous
11th Sep 2011 8:33am
but I think you could effectively begin this at 'grief'.
Spot on.
Spot on.
11th Sep 2011 8:40am
yes, you're right
have changed it but left the old version at the bottom for grins
have changed it but left the old version at the bottom for grins
Anonymous
11th Sep 2011 8:51am
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11th Sep 2011 11:04am
...here you are speaking clearly. This is beautiful Ray. I could stand either version. Great skill shown in this little number.
H.
H.
11th Sep 2011 11:17pm
having you like something of mine is like having
Lauren Tivey like something of mine. am thrilled.
Lauren Tivey like something of mine. am thrilled.
11th Sep 2011 4:03pm
Anonymous
13th Oct 2011 11:38pm
This is truth, people always profit off of some tragedy or something like it, that's why we never hear of the remarkable things in the media is because tragedy pays, but honorable doesn't for some odd reason or another. Well done.
3rd Feb 2012 5:16pm
5th Sep 2012 1:16am
Not sure if the association was intentional, but the picture of falling money brought to mind those who fell, jumped, from the towers - brought its own chill to this piece ... and chilling it is.
(Just a spelling thing, it's spelled mourn, rather than morn)
(Just a spelling thing, it's spelled mourn, rather than morn)
Damn! Yes. Just replaced 'morn' with 'mourn'
(after having my ignorance on display for almost a year).
Thank you.
And yes, the falling money echos the falling people as well
as the millions of sheets of 8.5 by 11 paper that rained down.
(after having my ignorance on display for almost a year).
Thank you.
And yes, the falling money echos the falling people as well
as the millions of sheets of 8.5 by 11 paper that rained down.
