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'Precipice'
UnObstructed
N
prEpares,
For the fall
E
L
So verY
O
U...
relentlesslY
E
I
L
D
I
N
aGainst
the possibility
of a
'bright
stain...'
upon
imminent
contact...
*Note: The format I tried
didn't work too smoothly
so I hope it's not horribly
distracting...
Published 6th Sep 2017
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6th Sep 2017 6:46pm
Wow, this is so e.e. cummings. I really enjoyed the visual dimension of this poem, it fit with the theme and message. Bravo!
6th Sep 2017 6:55pm
Thank you sweetness...I'm grateful, n deeply appreciate your thoughts n support on my ink.
7th Sep 2017 11:14am
I like that I can read it in one breath all the way down the intellectual water slide....reminded me of flashing pacman..I dig...-J
7th Sep 2017 11:26am
Thank you bro...I appreciate you reading n taking the time to leave your thoughts. I've a feeling most had no clue what I was doin here...
I probably missed your intent on this, but I read into it this:
She welcomes your entry, unabated into her, unconcerned with receiving your semen from the pleasurable uniting.
But, then I do have a somewhat one track mind.
Either way, a nice read.
She welcomes your entry, unabated into her, unconcerned with receiving your semen from the pleasurable uniting.
But, then I do have a somewhat one track mind.
Either way, a nice read.
7th Sep 2017 3:04pm
Lmao...wow that's pretty hot but not very far off in a way...still it wasn't sexual, but in the area of connection...thanks sweetheart, kinda made me a Lil hungry with ur thoughts though lol
7th Sep 2017 3:09pm
Poe I felt like I was falling as I read this
just to be caught in the beauty of you words..
love Crim
just to be caught in the beauty of you words..
love Crim
8th Sep 2017 11:15am
I'll be damned if that didn't sound like a Playa move lady! Lol...I loved it of course, but go on Playa Playa! Lol...deeply appreciate your support always my sweet Crim...
9th Sep 2017 1:57pm
this defines intimacy Poe... not sex... but the elusive connection that only a true sense of intimacy and emotional nakedness brings
love it
xo
love it
xo
9th Sep 2017 2:07pm
Aaawww... I knew my Lil smartie panties
would get the heart of this.. truly, grateful I am for you my dearest always :)
would get the heart of this.. truly, grateful I am for you my dearest always :)
11th Sep 2017 3:40pm
This is a great write, PoeticOne! The Spiritual connection was palpable, and I enjoyed the crossword effect of the format.
14th Sep 2017 4:18pm
