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just a thought
you ever thought you were angry
until you came upon someone consumed with anger?
were you amazed at the levels of shit,
look at your self and say nahhhh...
i don't wanna go down that road?..
until you came upon someone consumed with anger?
were you amazed at the levels of shit,
look at your self and say nahhhh...
i don't wanna go down that road?..
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Re. just a thought
19th Aug 2017 8:54pm
This is a great little poem with a good message, Naajir. Because you have requested HC, and I want to honor that request, I would suggest the following revisions for a clear line of sight.
you ever thought you were angry
until you came upon someone
consumed with anger?
were you amazed at the levels
of shit, look at your self
and sa[y], "nahhhh..."
i don't wanna go down that road?..
Love the gem of message in this.
you ever thought you were angry
until you came upon someone
consumed with anger?
were you amazed at the levels
of shit, look at your self
and sa[y], "nahhhh..."
i don't wanna go down that road?..
Love the gem of message in this.
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Re: Re. just a thought
you're right Ahavati. It felt a little disjointed when i wrote before i left the house. Always appreciate the honest and constructive feedback
Re. just a thought
19th Aug 2017 11:06pm
Anonymous
- Edited 30th Jan 2023 2:45pm
20th Aug 2017 1:33am
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Re. just a thought
Anonymous
20th Aug 2017 3:33am
It's definitely a personal check moment. I don't typically get that angry but when I do, an experience like this usually acts as ice water in the face. Good call
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Re. just a thought
Anonymous
20th Aug 2017 4:16am
Naaj...I live with this....yes....I have been here...I am here...I hope not to be soon....love this ink..
xoxo Taryn
xoxo Taryn
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Re. just a thought
20th Aug 2017 7:27am
Anger... is one letter short of danger, so 'they say' !
Personally, I've no time in my life for bitterness, and anger, and I don't have to think twice when severing ties for those reasons.
Its OK to be selfish, if someone else is projecting their anger and bitterness upon you ~ 👑🌷🌞🎈😎
Personally, I've no time in my life for bitterness, and anger, and I don't have to think twice when severing ties for those reasons.
Its OK to be selfish, if someone else is projecting their anger and bitterness upon you ~ 👑🌷🌞🎈😎
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Re. just a thought
Anonymous
20th Aug 2017 8:43am
Fuck yeah I have !!
Great thought and so glad I have never chosen that path!!
Great thought and so glad I have never chosen that path!!
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Re. just a thought
20th Aug 2017 8:02pm
Oh best believe I've felt this way before! Excellent thought bro. N execution...
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Anonymous
- Edited 9th Jun 2019 1:47pm
20th Aug 2017 10:37pm
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Re. just a thought
30th Aug 2017 8:34pm
It's what is called a reality check lol..... Having those moments of realization when you come across someone worse than you makes you introspect and consciously say nah man I have to be sure never to become like that and so you do what needs to be done to not become that.... Digging this hun.... Truthful reminder....
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