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Amphibious
Sylvan, sacrosanct
starless mill pond
Peasant girl sits alone
'neath an Aquarius Moon
an illusion of emptiness
The vision bespeaks
a Handsome Frog
manifesting a Kiss
Transforms Her into
His Amphibian Princess
~
starless mill pond
Peasant girl sits alone
'neath an Aquarius Moon
an illusion of emptiness
The vision bespeaks
a Handsome Frog
manifesting a Kiss
Transforms Her into
His Amphibian Princess
~
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Re. Amphibious
Anonymous
14th Jun 2017 1:52am
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Re. Amphibious
14th Jun 2017 2:27am
This piece makes me feel like there's more changing here than ur creature... I see yet another level in your ink, n it's truly captivating...
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15th Jun 2017 11:09pm
Re. Amphibious
14th Jun 2017 8:22am
" His Amphibian Princess"...
here I'm thinking..instead of him changing into a prince to be with her she somewhat altered herself for him...just my thoughts..
as always...serving food for thought Ahavati
here I'm thinking..instead of him changing into a prince to be with her she somewhat altered herself for him...just my thoughts..
as always...serving food for thought Ahavati
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Re: Re. Amphibious
15th Jun 2017 11:12pm
She's smart in that nature is where it's at, naturally existing from materialism with Love and Poetry vs all that castle responsibility stuff. I think she's very happy! 🐸 Thank you, Naajir. It's nice to see you back.
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14th Jun 2017 10:54am
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15th Jun 2017 11:13pm
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14th Jun 2017 12:09pm
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15th Jun 2017 11:14pm
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14th Jun 2017 2:47pm
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15th Jun 2017 11:15pm
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This is a good example of a good poem. Written well. There, my cold, honest critique. Quality, not quantity.
Love the capitalization. The amphibious nature of the story, the poem.
Love the capitalization. The amphibious nature of the story, the poem.
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15th Jun 2017 11:15pm
Re. Amphibious
14th Jun 2017 6:44pm
as Andy Devine (1909-1977) used to say on his
Andy's Gang tv show, (NBC, 1955-1960) :
"Pluck your magic twanger, Froggy !" (to Froggy, The Gremlin)
PS: well done "classic" type poem, dear.
Andy's Gang tv show, (NBC, 1955-1960) :
"Pluck your magic twanger, Froggy !" (to Froggy, The Gremlin)
PS: well done "classic" type poem, dear.
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Re: Re. Amphibious
15th Jun 2017 11:17pm
I'd forgotten all about that show! I remember seeing reruns of it in the 70's I believe. P.S. Thank you!
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Anonymous
14th Jun 2017 10:26pm
Oh, those pesky frogs ...
such a tale woven
in the boundaries
of victorian`esq
you have the gift ...
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15th Jun 2017 11:18pm
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15th Jun 2017 9:38pm
...your manipulation of words, the way you bend them to your will, has always been remarkable to me.💞
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15th Jun 2017 11:19pm
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19th Jun 2017 1:12pm
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Anonymous
24th Jan 2019 8:25pm
Mmmmmm ..... plenty of delicious S and Z consonance to savor.
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Kiss me you fool.
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Kiss me you fool.
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