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T H R I C E
I:
our flotilla;
your cupped hands
the grace of my rib cage
as we drift toward
the shelter of a quiet cove
II:
my hair tangles
the valves of your heart
holding you at bay
for a moment
till I return your breath
III:
the children we were
play together
share ev'ry secret
rolling in the grass, always
laughing in our dreams
our flotilla;
your cupped hands
the grace of my rib cage
as we drift toward
the shelter of a quiet cove
II:
my hair tangles
the valves of your heart
holding you at bay
for a moment
till I return your breath
III:
the children we were
play together
share ev'ry secret
rolling in the grass, always
laughing in our dreams
Published 7th Jun 2017
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7th Jun 2017 6:59am
7th Jun 2017 7:18am
Why thank you, Rose, you don't know how much your stopping by to share means to me.
7th Jun 2017 3:04pm
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7th Jun 2017 3:02pm
7th Jun 2017 3:32pm
*smiles* Thank you, walker, that's very kind of you to say, and I'm glad you're enjoying the set. I've written Japanese poetry short forms for years which I studied. Nice to see you here.
7th Jun 2017 3:40pm
for me tanka's da way to go. may be coz senryu and haikuse are too tight a place to squeeze ma thoughts under- like a victorian corset ;-). ya a can see, you been writin over a looong time sistah, it shows in the color and maturity of ya pomes. *smiles* back -THRICE ;-)
Anonymous
7th Jun 2017 3:37pm
feels both wistful & whimsical
simply love it jadey
simply love it jadey
Thank you darling Katja, that's so wonderful to know. And thank you for the honor of a place on your Reading List.
7th Jun 2017 9:27pm
Fine work X 3! I love this Jade. That last stanza is a scene I still dream about from my own childhood. Must be losing my marbles...........
8th Jun 2017 5:30am
Awww, my crowfly friend, many thanks! I never learned how to play marble games so perhaps you will teach me sometime?
10th Jun 2017 2:09am
the title felt a bit redundant with the theme of three. I really like the beginning exposition; and the ending of this poem is very deep with a sense of eternity.
10th Jun 2017 2:01pm
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