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Whiskey No Chaser
the tiny bones
of my pride crush
under the weight
of your arrogance
you squeeze me
& I am lost
in the depths of you
I'm desolate
in the knowledge
you glance my way
& look right through me
you don't see my beauty
when all I see is you
who sparkles like a diamond
cut from what I desire
Your ridin em rough style
Laying it down hard masculinity
Whiskey with no chaser
I'm seen as tea with the ladies
In a room full of king shadows at 5:00
my mind wanders to you
& your poetry
I imagine your switchblade in hand
as you free me from a bra that strangles
let loose the wild woman in me
I want you to fuck me hard
then walk away
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Re. Whiskey No Chaser
22nd May 2017 10:58pm
That's a tough and hard-edged fantasy but "tea with the ladies"? Anyone seeing you that way would be pushing their luck, seems to me. Loved this one Crim, but I'll still stick with vodka.
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Re: Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 11:28am
thank you Sir Crow though I really do lunch and tea with the ladies in real life.. could be hard to imagine because I have a lot of duality in my personality.. love Crim
Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 00:22am
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23rd May 2017 11:29am
Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 00:42am
Some raw and cutting emotions there sistah crimsin. am with crowfly bout the tea wid da ladies thingy!
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Re: Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 11:30am
thank you dearest Walker might be hard to imagine but it is part of my life ;) love Crimsin
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Anonymous
23rd May 2017 00:49am
Lovely dark angel, that opening stanza sets a painful tone. And the last is defiant. You walk the spectrum with this one, lovely. Hold on to the defiance, it looks gorgeous on you!
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Re: Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 11:31am
thank you lovely one great eye I did have some trouble getting this to come together.. though the beautiful Taryn helped me tweak it.. love Crim
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Anonymous
23rd May 2017 2:18am
My Beautiful Brenda...reading this I just grinned so wide...something about it but these lines here...
"when all I see is you
who sparkles like a diamond
cut from what I desire"
~ Fabulous!!
I love you!!
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
"when all I see is you
who sparkles like a diamond
cut from what I desire"
~ Fabulous!!
I love you!!
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
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Re: Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 11:33am
thank you my love for helping me with this write & for showing love on those lines.. I love you passionately! xo Brenda
Re. Whiskey No Chaser
I skipped right over training wheels, Crim. Delish here. And of course I would like it, due to whiskeys kinda my thing. <3
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23rd May 2017 11:33am
Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 9:00am
I enjoyed the strength and openness of this. I relate to the feeling of it and the characters in it. I have to agree with crowfly, just from reading this, the narrator doesn't seem like the "tea with ladies" type, but we all wear different faces when we need to.
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Re: Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 11:35am
thank you graciously and welcome to my pages.. yes in life we do indeed wear different faces given the situation.. the truth is i'm wild at heart just live a somewhat repressed lifestyle.. love Crimsin
Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 10:42am
Perhaps we should let the ladies have their tea;
life is too short to tame our wild side. What a shame that would be.
Your words are always such a pleasure to read, talented one...
life is too short to tame our wild side. What a shame that would be.
Your words are always such a pleasure to read, talented one...
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23rd May 2017 11:36am
Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 12:04pm
that's heat, just heat rising up like a skillet on a hotplate;
real industrial, Crim...
real industrial, Crim...
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23rd May 2017 12:45pm
Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 12:52pm
I told you not to share my picture : ) ... kidding...sizzling piece...love the strength this conveys...I have an extra ticket to the rodeo. Care to join me? ➰
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Re: Re. Whiskey No Chaser
23rd May 2017 3:00pm
thank you for the offer but today I'm having tea with the ladies :) love Brenda
Re. Whiskey No Chaser
25th May 2017 00:35am
how did you manage to get that photograph of me????
a real sexy write :-)
a real sexy write :-)
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25th May 2017 11:08am
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Anonymous
26th May 2017 1:03am
Brenda.. simply powerful.. love you so much...
Dave
Dave
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28th May 2017 00:30am