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Poetic Dreamer
you're in my dreams
I've started countless messages
but I remain in wombed silence
my heart pounds out its desire
I have nothing to offer you
my beauty has long since faded
still my passion burns bright
on a cobblestone road
my soul came across you once
we met & enjoyed what each had to offer
that was in another life
now I gaze from afar
at your star that blazes in my skies
I dance on your periphery
sing my melancholy song
poetic artist who enchants
you paint me a new life
with your poetry
I tremble in your presence
so intense is my need
a tidal wave of feeling
impossible to keep
from rushing to your shores
I've started countless messages
should this reach you
glimpse deep inside
see the vision I was
& know I was beautiful once
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Re. Poetic Dreamer
4th May 2017 12:18pm
Wow, I think any man would notice your dance and beauty. Love your poem and your passion shines bright.
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4th May 2017 12:29pm
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4th May 2017 12:28pm
my beauty has long since faded ~ Theres not a snowballs chance in hell that your beauty "has long since faded" my dear Poetess. You possess beauty beyond words. <3
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4th May 2017 12:31pm
thank you beautiful Mysterious One it's just tough getting older desiring a younger poet.. I deeply appreciate your loving comment :) love Crim
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4th May 2017 12:40pm
Were not getting older honey, just better...more experienced. hugs and love. ( Ive felt this way some days too ) xoxoxox
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4th May 2017 12:42pm
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I think you're more beautiful now than you ever were.❤
Pound it out, Poetess.
Pound it out, Poetess.
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4th May 2017 1:45pm
thank you lovely one for bringing me joy each day and for such a loving comment :) love Brenda
Re. Poetic Dreamer
4th May 2017 1:34pm
Still beautiful my lovely Crim as is your poetry! Keep going...
This quote reminds me of you..."You are unrepeatable, there is a magic about you that is all your own." ~D.M. Dellinger
This quote reminds me of you..."You are unrepeatable, there is a magic about you that is all your own." ~D.M. Dellinger
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Re: Re. Poetic Dreamer
4th May 2017 1:46pm
thank you dearest Mel for seeing the beauty in me.. I deeply appreciate your quote it brought me inner peace.. love Crim
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Anonymous
4th May 2017 1:38pm
My dear lady, you are beautiful still. I understand these words, I've felt them as well - perhaps we all have. Such beautiful life you've given them.
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4th May 2017 1:48pm
thank you lovely one for feeling and understanding this write.. I cherish your thoughts this will be my mantra today "you are beautiful still" love Crim
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4th May 2017 2:52pm
Brenda! this poem conveys and evokes such tides of emotions- to me this poem is just like the Galaxy tied up inside a globe to the cat called Orion in the movie Men In Black- so much depth and vastness and power you've contained inside the beautiful heart of yours.
I used to joke and have mentioned alot as well- that beauty [tells]'lies' in the eyes of the beholder. To see true beauty, and test one's love, the person should look eyes closed , imagine a scenario where and decide whether they'd have rejected the same person if one happened to be blind and can't see how they appeared physically.
a gem indeed is your work Brenda, reflection of your beauty- no doubt.
I used to joke and have mentioned alot as well- that beauty [tells]'lies' in the eyes of the beholder. To see true beauty, and test one's love, the person should look eyes closed , imagine a scenario where and decide whether they'd have rejected the same person if one happened to be blind and can't see how they appeared physically.
a gem indeed is your work Brenda, reflection of your beauty- no doubt.
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4th May 2017 3:24pm
thank you dearest KDAmB what an absolutely beautiful comparison I am deeply honored and humbled.. I cherish your thoughts you have such deep insight.. thank you again :) love Brenda
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Anonymous
4th May 2017 5:04pm
It brings me joy when I see
light in all of your darkness ...
Love in poetry does
become you, my Queen ...
~ love you, Devlin
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4th May 2017 5:09pm
thank you my beautiful Queen I'm trying to let my heart shine through the dark.. I cherish your thoughts so happy to know you embrace the change in me.. love you lady :) xo Brenda
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4th May 2017 5:08pm
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4th May 2017 5:12pm
aw thank you dearest Jerry if you could see my smile right now you would know how much your comment touched my heart :) love you my friend.. xo Brenda
Re. Poetic Dreamer
4th May 2017 5:35pm
I imagine you're still beautiful, Lady Crim. This is filled with such longing and eloquence that he may well return if he chances upon it. Your passion burns bright and will light the way. Fine work as always!
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4th May 2017 5:42pm
thank you dearest Sir Crow for seeing the beauty in me and showing me love on this longing write.. love Crim
Re. Poetic Dreamer
5th May 2017 5:01am
Again you leave me in awe, dear Crim
Beauty comes from the inside... you shine!
Love, Duende
Beauty comes from the inside... you shine!
Love, Duende
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5th May 2017 5:27am
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5th May 2017 11:32am
you can walk the cobblestone streets as far as the shore, Crim,
the poetry remains beautiful...
the poetry remains beautiful...
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5th May 2017 12:59pm
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oh darling
that second verse
wow! like with sprinkles
hunny
beauty comes from within
and with in becomes more beautiful with time
and well
by default it just never fades, love!
you just keep being our beautiful
Brenda
we love you like that
xoxox
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that second verse
wow! like with sprinkles
hunny
beauty comes from within
and with in becomes more beautiful with time
and well
by default it just never fades, love!
you just keep being our beautiful
Brenda
we love you like that
xoxox
(P)
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5th May 2017 2:05pm
thank you dearest one you gave me big smiles today I will remember that :) love Brenda
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Oh how wonderful, a smiling Brenda what a blessing!
I was telling one of the ladies in book club earlier (Mascara! Mascara! Mascara!) but you know Mascara without a smile makes you look like Jacob Zuma!
But a smile without Mascara is just Marilyn without Mascara. You keep that smile, now hunny thanks for the chat dahling,
you're a blessing
xoxox
(P)
I was telling one of the ladies in book club earlier (Mascara! Mascara! Mascara!) but you know Mascara without a smile makes you look like Jacob Zuma!
But a smile without Mascara is just Marilyn without Mascara. You keep that smile, now hunny thanks for the chat dahling,
you're a blessing
xoxox
(P)
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9th May 2017 11:07am
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5th May 2017 8:13pm
sad and beautiful merged - I felt the sadness more, but that-s me being an old cynic. I think your beauty is always obvious :-)
1000 ehugs winging their way to you :-)
1000 ehugs winging their way to you :-)
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9th May 2017 11:08am
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7th May 2017 7:24am
After the song is over and the poetry has ended,
your beauty is left imprinted on the page and mind.
So lovely, talented one...
your beauty is left imprinted on the page and mind.
So lovely, talented one...
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9th May 2017 11:09am
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Anonymous
12th May 2017 12:26pm
ugh brenda, you're breaking my little black heart with this one... the melancholy just seeps from the spaces between your words... this is a dolorous ode, lovely lady
xo
xo
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12th May 2017 12:35pm
thank you beautiful one yes I was feeling melancholy when I wrote this I deeply appreciate you feeling me on this one.. love you lady.. xo Brenda
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Anonymous
15th May 2017 2:12am
My Beautiful Brenda, I have no words suitable for this incredible write...it has stolen breath and as many times as you have done this me, I should be dead right now...stunning poetry....
I love you!
Love Taryn xoxo
I love you!
Love Taryn xoxo
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15th May 2017 6:17am
thank you my love I started endless messages to this person but just couldn't get out how I was feeling but you understand that better than anyone.. you always listen to me and for that I am eternally grateful.. I love you.. xo Brenda
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Anonymous
17th May 2017 4:52am
Dear Brenda, you're beautiful always.. never doubt it.. love you..
Dave
Dave
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