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PERFUME
Chanel on my shirt
Letters in the grate
Great words perfume and fade
Even two eyes can not see the whole sea
Does it matter that ours was a whole sea
Even seas turn to deserts
May be we were only a bath or a bottle
What does it matter
Empty is empty
Oh it's too hard
And too lonely
I sleep on my grave
And I turn because there's no one there
There never was amongst the worms
And the living
Nothing but a shirt reading letters
On a park bench
In the perfume of you
The perfume of the ocean
And of the channels to the sea
And the play of sailors and sea creatures
And the sounds that become words
As if words were worlds
In the key of D
Letters in the grate
Great words perfume and fade
Even two eyes can not see the whole sea
Does it matter that ours was a whole sea
Even seas turn to deserts
May be we were only a bath or a bottle
What does it matter
Empty is empty
Oh it's too hard
And too lonely
I sleep on my grave
And I turn because there's no one there
There never was amongst the worms
And the living
Nothing but a shirt reading letters
On a park bench
In the perfume of you
The perfume of the ocean
And of the channels to the sea
And the play of sailors and sea creatures
And the sounds that become words
As if words were worlds
In the key of D
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Re. PERFUME
26th Apr 2017 11:39pm
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27th Apr 2017 3:56am
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26th Apr 2017 11:46pm
The lilting cadence strikes such a harmonious accord with the depth of your haunting words here Whale.
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27th Apr 2017 3:58am
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27th Apr 2017 4:01am
The context and flow really balance together to give it more meaning. I like that, makes your work unique
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27th Apr 2017 5:14am
Ur unique way of presenting your mental assault on the senses are very
Wel
Wel
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Re. PERFUME
27th Apr 2017 10:31am
Whale all the small details you laced throughout tells me you are a beautiful love to have in your life.. this is a heartbreak of a poem.. so lovingly penned..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Re. PERFUME
27th Apr 2017 11:49am
Beautiful Sadness Whale!!!
I do not claim to know the significance of D for You...but I will say, for myself it IS my favourite key to play in and also the easiest for me.
This was one of the first keys I learned to play in.
Second would be A which can be very bright, but I find D and A both can carry a melancholy wave depending 'pon delivery style.
Very smooth delivery of a tumultuous wave!!!
I do not claim to know the significance of D for You...but I will say, for myself it IS my favourite key to play in and also the easiest for me.
This was one of the first keys I learned to play in.
Second would be A which can be very bright, but I find D and A both can carry a melancholy wave depending 'pon delivery style.
Very smooth delivery of a tumultuous wave!!!
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Re. PERFUME
27th Apr 2017 4:21pm
Ebb and flow...ebb and flow........as waves of bitter-sweet memories fill thoughts--yet leave the very soul, so empty....
Whale.....your innovative imagery creates a piece for the senses--the emotional effects powerful.....the sadness palpable. ( After reading--and re-reading--this one, i want to give you a gentle hug..or two...but sending you cyber ones
instead--(((Hhuuuuggggsss)))
Sioch`ain leat, mo Chara
Whale.....your innovative imagery creates a piece for the senses--the emotional effects powerful.....the sadness palpable. ( After reading--and re-reading--this one, i want to give you a gentle hug..or two...but sending you cyber ones
instead--(((Hhuuuuggggsss)))
Sioch`ain leat, mo Chara
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3rd May 2017 9:37pm
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27th Apr 2017 9:35pm
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28th Apr 2017 4:29pm
The second to last stanza is one of the most beautiful things I've ever read. So powerful.
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Anonymous
30th Apr 2017 9:51pm
d is such a sombre key full of melancholy and so apt for this maudlin write.
this read like the perfect heartbreak, whale, enough tears to fill a bottle and then some.
xo
this read like the perfect heartbreak, whale, enough tears to fill a bottle and then some.
xo

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3rd May 2017 9:41pm
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1st May 2017 1:00pm
the fragrance that comes from the sea to a park bench;
but for the loneliness...
but for the loneliness...
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"And the sounds that become words, as if words were world's"... with poetry like this, I'm convinced love must be deaf or close to death if a poet these days can't escape the loneliness of a broken heart... but, if you can still smell her perfume on your shirts, then you need to buy new shirts, because you smell like a married man... seriously, whale, your poetry is profound and moody. The imagery in forth stanza is stellar. Great stuff, brother.
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3rd May 2017 9:43pm
brother case - you're the tonic for any sickness of the heart : "smell like a married man"😂