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love's fire
my blood is 100 proof
I swill my vodka
& spit fire
burn flesh from bone
tear into you
with ferocious
razor sharp teeth
you are the meat
I hunger after
I thirst for your sweet wine
left with the dregs
you've left me to wither
ugly & alone
their is no beauty in me
none that can be seen
I keep it hidden
lest you know
who I really am
cruelty let us taste
of each other's fire
just to set our feet
on separate paths
our beings know
with primal recognition
that once we tasted
of each other's souls
you are the art
the beauty
the love
I would cross
oceans for
Copyright © 2017 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
Published 25th Apr 2017
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25th Apr 2017 1:52pm
26th Apr 2017 8:17pm
25th Apr 2017 1:56pm
Crim, this part, "our souls know with primal recognition that once we tasted of each other's souls " took my mind to a BDSM book called "Master of the Mountain". This one is a keeper. Hugs and my love.
26th Apr 2017 8:17pm
25th Apr 2017 2:18pm
Whoa! Fantastic poetical writing, Brenda.
When you get down and dirty, you are so
unbeatable. Love the hell out of this one,
my friend!
When you get down and dirty, you are so
unbeatable. Love the hell out of this one,
my friend!
26th Apr 2017 8:18pm
thank you graciously Jerry there is a big smile on my face from your comment :) love Brenda
Anonymous
25th Apr 2017 2:38pm
There's a whole lot of fierce in this one, lovely dark angel. There is beauty in all...and you are no exception. You are the fire that lights up the darkness.
26th Apr 2017 8:19pm
Anonymous
25th Apr 2017 3:43pm
This is excellent. Really powerful and intensely emotional. So many layers to it . Well done and thanks for the read 😙
26th Apr 2017 8:20pm
thank you beautiful Miki for such a wonderful comment.. so happy to see you about :) love Brenda
25th Apr 2017 5:17pm
26th Apr 2017 8:21pm
25th Apr 2017 7:38pm
You devour love then serve us your fine poetry. It's always a thrill, Lady Crim.
tear into you
with ferocious
razor sharp teeth
you are the meat
I hunger after
But this isn't all appetite, not by a long shot.
our beings know
with primal recognition
that once we tasted
of each other's souls
you are the art
the beauty
the love
I would cross
oceans for
The fire may be carnal but there's a spiritual component and deeply romantic conclusion. Passionate and truly fine work!
tear into you
with ferocious
razor sharp teeth
you are the meat
I hunger after
But this isn't all appetite, not by a long shot.
our beings know
with primal recognition
that once we tasted
of each other's souls
you are the art
the beauty
the love
I would cross
oceans for
The fire may be carnal but there's a spiritual component and deeply romantic conclusion. Passionate and truly fine work!
26th Apr 2017 8:22pm
thank you Sir Crow for recognizing both the primal lust & love of this write.. love Crim
25th Apr 2017 7:46pm
I loved this, the ending was such a moment of true romance, a powerful yearning :-)
you really know how to write them :-)
you really know how to write them :-)
26th Apr 2017 8:23pm
25th Apr 2017 9:11pm
What if is probably the best and worst question we can ask ourselves. Best because you dream of what you could have and worst because you can't have it. Very nice write, Lady Crim.
26th Apr 2017 8:23pm
25th Apr 2017 11:41pm
Sounds like Greek Fire: a terrifying fire as if by magic that can only be marvelled at in awe and wonder. Your words of love as always spit flames and roar wildly in passion, yet have such a tender sentiment at the heart, that makes us males ejaculate our words in sudden praise.
26th Apr 2017 8:25pm
thank you Lord Viddax I absolutely love your comment.. ejaculating praise just love it :) xo Brenda
26th Apr 2017 12:38pm
26th Apr 2017 8:26pm
26th Apr 2017 9:11pm
my blood is 100 proof best line and the line you had me at. Mine runs the same. <3
26th Apr 2017 9:29pm
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Anonymous
27th Apr 2017 00:47am
Brenda.. simply brilliant.. love you..
Dave
Dave
28th Apr 2017 2:06am
Anonymous
12th May 2017 6:19am
My Beautiful Brenda, these lines....
"our beings know
with primal recognition
that once we tasted
of each other's souls
you are the art
the beauty
the love
I would cross
oceans for"
I understand and couldn't agree more...your passion with and for words will continue to singe my edges and burn into the depths of my soul. There is only beautify within you to see...always...I love you...
Love Taryn xoxo
"our beings know
with primal recognition
that once we tasted
of each other's souls
you are the art
the beauty
the love
I would cross
oceans for"
I understand and couldn't agree more...your passion with and for words will continue to singe my edges and burn into the depths of my soul. There is only beautify within you to see...always...I love you...
Love Taryn xoxo
12th May 2017 11:31am
thank you beautiful one for feeling my soul and this write.. I cherish your thoughts and the knowledge you embrace me.. I love you with a passion.. xo Brenda
