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Consecrate
Lovers in their bed as fog rolls in
He kisses her just there and whispers
'We are blessed' not knowing how or why
'Tis plain as the sacred draw of blood
The tempo of her breath assails him
Ever pushing back his own regrets
A shedding tear following her last
Let forgetfulness assuage her ghost
To keep them evermore together
For what they never had from living
In afterlife there'll be no sorrow
Nor will there be joy in forgiving
April 18 ( NaPoWriMo 2017 )
He kisses her just there and whispers
'We are blessed' not knowing how or why
'Tis plain as the sacred draw of blood
The tempo of her breath assails him
Ever pushing back his own regrets
A shedding tear following her last
Let forgetfulness assuage her ghost
To keep them evermore together
For what they never had from living
In afterlife there'll be no sorrow
Nor will there be joy in forgiving
April 18 ( NaPoWriMo 2017 )
Published 18th Apr 2017
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18th Apr 2017 4:11pm
The amazing character of this poem is the deepness of the pathos that extends far beyond the words affecting something in the core of my being...
How wonderfully sad and yet up lifting...
tom
How wonderfully sad and yet up lifting...
tom
18th Apr 2017 7:44pm
Thank you so very much, dear tom. How you honor me with the way you've explained your feelings of this piece, and for adding it to your RL.
18th Apr 2017 9:08pm
A kind of ghost tale seems to me, but it's a thoughtful one, not chilling. Their Paradise might be in each others' arms without the forces that drew them apart. No more angst, no more regrets.
In afterlife there'll be no sorrow
Nor will there be joy in forgiving
Perhaps there will be no lies, infidelities, nothing to forgive. My take, anyway. Fine poem Jade, a beauty of a read and much to think about.
In afterlife there'll be no sorrow
Nor will there be joy in forgiving
Perhaps there will be no lies, infidelities, nothing to forgive. My take, anyway. Fine poem Jade, a beauty of a read and much to think about.
18th Apr 2017 11:45pm
I'm so very touched by your take on what this piece has you feeling & thinking. Thank you, my dear crowfly friend, for the share.
19th Apr 2017 6:31am
So many things can be taken from this, Jade, I love that about your poetry.
Always a deeper meaning when read more than once and sometimes, another
meaning altogether.
Wonderful poetry...
Always a deeper meaning when read more than once and sometimes, another
meaning altogether.
Wonderful poetry...
My grateful thanks, Kasai, for your definition of how my poetry is received by you... an expression that means so much to me. I always appreciate what the reader tells me is their interpretation because I learn new facets of my own expressions. Many times facets I have consciously not realized till then.
