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B I T T E R
(Inspired from "The Horror of Our Love" by Ludo)
So as the rain falls muting soft our screams
The terror of our thunder's haunting dreams
You give to me the life of seizing brain
That quivers tight from clutch of strangled vein
Aaarrrggghhhh...
I cannot live without your death in me
From night sweats colder than the murdered sea
It never is enough to satisfy
And never will for all eternity
Your flesh, your heaving organs in the rain
That I will soon devour with my pain
Aaarrrggghhhh...
But do not take away from what I feel
It isn't there for you to know or steal
This is a stormy night that will surround
Of what we've lost of love, this bitter sound
AAARRRGGGHHHH...!
This was written for & entered in the DUP competition "LUDO LOVE".
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9kQ-0bBkMIY
So as the rain falls muting soft our screams
The terror of our thunder's haunting dreams
You give to me the life of seizing brain
That quivers tight from clutch of strangled vein
Aaarrrggghhhh...
I cannot live without your death in me
From night sweats colder than the murdered sea
It never is enough to satisfy
And never will for all eternity
Your flesh, your heaving organs in the rain
That I will soon devour with my pain
Aaarrrggghhhh...
But do not take away from what I feel
It isn't there for you to know or steal
This is a stormy night that will surround
Of what we've lost of love, this bitter sound
AAARRRGGGHHHH...!
This was written for & entered in the DUP competition "LUDO LOVE".
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9kQ-0bBkMIY
Published 18th Apr 2017
| Edited 24th Feb 2018
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18th Apr 2017 5:44pm
I really enjoy Gothic poetry and this feels so truly to its soul, Gothic!
There by... I love it!
tommy
There by... I love it!
tommy
18th Apr 2017 7:50pm
Ah my thomas, once again the honor of your feel & another place in your RL. I'm so glad you love whenever I try my hand at Goth.
18th Apr 2017 7:28pm
My grateful thanks to you, dearest Grace, and for letting me know whenever my work has touched you thus. x
18th Apr 2017 8:35pm
This reminds me a bit of Poe with it's wording and rhyme. Maybe a little more demonstrative on a midnight dreary:
Your flesh, your heaving organs in the rain
That I will soon devour with my pain
This is both chilling and a hoot, Jade. Fine work as always. Arghhhh!
Your flesh, your heaving organs in the rain
That I will soon devour with my pain
This is both chilling and a hoot, Jade. Fine work as always. Arghhhh!
Oh my, dear friend, you screamed!
You always gift me with such support in so much that I do. I thank you for the comparison & your thoughts, always.
You always gift me with such support in so much that I do. I thank you for the comparison & your thoughts, always.
19th Apr 2017 3:56am
Hmm...I wonder, how you might spell out that sound one makes when they find something so very fascinating.
Trying your hand and succeeding, Jade, such a multi-talented poetess you are. Always enlightened by my visits to your pages and I thoroughly enjoyed...
Trying your hand and succeeding, Jade, such a multi-talented poetess you are. Always enlightened by my visits to your pages and I thoroughly enjoyed...
Dear Kasai, thank you so very much. How humbled is my reception, and yet so honored, whenever you express where my ode of words takes you with each visit.
