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romeo alpha male and juliet
these words void of passion
a sudden shift and shortfall
into the abyss mediocrity
i
juliet lay naked on the altar
she pretended to be asleep
or dead
i couldn't tell the difference
i laughed nervously to myself
too old to play this game
called murder in the dark
lain down by her side
respectfully dressed
my body bent
and dull like a silver spoon
i placed my lips against her neck
cupped her breast in my palm
her nipples embossed
my fingertips read
she was cold
or horny
i couldn't tell the difference anymore
confused by the flutter of hearts
airborne
with wings of worship
she wasn't my breed
iii
there was a catch
number twenty-two
juliet never asked
i never told
she found out eventually
that the potion she mistook for love
was the same poison that put her to sleep
either way
in time
romance would meet with tragedy
iii
i am a fighter not a poet
[romeo echo papa echo alpha tango]
i am a fighter
not a poet
breathe these words over and over
running my course
along the beach toward a stone wall
i step back into the ring
to exchange my iron heart for heavy fists
gloves to cheek
the crack of leather against skin
cartilage and bone
timed perfectly
to the hook and beat one-two
i will beat down every man whose done her wrong
watch glorious red poems
spray over sweaty torsos
smugness smeared from the cocky face
of a boxer dancing with his shadow
iv
it's too simple to condemn desire
to feast or be eaten
to be fucked or to make love
i am engrained with the urge to breed
part man and part animal
which half was real and true
she couldn't tell the difference anymore
v
no one knows the mess of me
the mess of love
strewn along trails of clothes
left abandoned on the floor
no one knows
the holes punched in my heart bleed for juliet
a sudden shift and shortfall
into the abyss mediocrity
i
juliet lay naked on the altar
she pretended to be asleep
or dead
i couldn't tell the difference
i laughed nervously to myself
too old to play this game
called murder in the dark
lain down by her side
respectfully dressed
my body bent
and dull like a silver spoon
i placed my lips against her neck
cupped her breast in my palm
her nipples embossed
my fingertips read
she was cold
or horny
i couldn't tell the difference anymore
confused by the flutter of hearts
airborne
with wings of worship
she wasn't my breed
iii
there was a catch
number twenty-two
juliet never asked
i never told
she found out eventually
that the potion she mistook for love
was the same poison that put her to sleep
either way
in time
romance would meet with tragedy
iii
i am a fighter not a poet
[romeo echo papa echo alpha tango]
i am a fighter
not a poet
breathe these words over and over
running my course
along the beach toward a stone wall
i step back into the ring
to exchange my iron heart for heavy fists
gloves to cheek
the crack of leather against skin
cartilage and bone
timed perfectly
to the hook and beat one-two
i will beat down every man whose done her wrong
watch glorious red poems
spray over sweaty torsos
smugness smeared from the cocky face
of a boxer dancing with his shadow
iv
it's too simple to condemn desire
to feast or be eaten
to be fucked or to make love
i am engrained with the urge to breed
part man and part animal
which half was real and true
she couldn't tell the difference anymore
v
no one knows the mess of me
the mess of love
strewn along trails of clothes
left abandoned on the floor
no one knows
the holes punched in my heart bleed for juliet
Written by
case28
(Alexander Case)
Published 15th Apr 2017
| Edited 16th Apr 2017
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Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
Anonymous
15th Apr 2017 10:49pm
I'm reading listing this for the spoken word which aside from your Clockwork Orange piece, is definitely the most sincere reading you've ever done. There was a roundness and a sincerity (and even a slight sadness) to your tone that really made this worth listening too. Whole hearted hat tip for that.
Lyrically, this is dark as fuck. There's this interesting repetition of the phrase "I couldn't tell the difference anymore" throughout the piece. Placed in the beginning, the middle and the ending gave this balance of indifference that filtered through into the tone of your voice.
The boxing thing is an interesting thing to weave into a piece such as this. The onomatopoeic crack of the one-two made this part a joy to read. At first I wondered about its inclusion, then I listened to it a few times and realised this was actually essential as part of you. Metaphoric and visual.
Not a single capital letter in this, and good choice entirely.
I'm pretty sure I had to remind myself to breathe at one point during this, so I'm taking that as a review of how it made me feel as a reader.
Fabulous work. Well done indeed.
Lyrically, this is dark as fuck. There's this interesting repetition of the phrase "I couldn't tell the difference anymore" throughout the piece. Placed in the beginning, the middle and the ending gave this balance of indifference that filtered through into the tone of your voice.
The boxing thing is an interesting thing to weave into a piece such as this. The onomatopoeic crack of the one-two made this part a joy to read. At first I wondered about its inclusion, then I listened to it a few times and realised this was actually essential as part of you. Metaphoric and visual.
Not a single capital letter in this, and good choice entirely.
I'm pretty sure I had to remind myself to breathe at one point during this, so I'm taking that as a review of how it made me feel as a reader.
Fabulous work. Well done indeed.
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It's interesting how one's mindsets can have an impact their creativity. I wrote the poem when I was feeling a bit overwhelmed with stuff, then I spent a week editing, and recorded the reading and produced the video when I was high.
I have to agree with you on the reading, I've never been so pleased with the sound of my vote or in the quality of the recording... which I'll confess, the reading was recorded on my computer under a quilt for acoustic purposes.
Thanks heaps for your great comment and RL, Missy. Super stoked you liked the reading so much, that means a lot coming from one of most favourite spoken word poets.
I have to agree with you on the reading, I've never been so pleased with the sound of my vote or in the quality of the recording... which I'll confess, the reading was recorded on my computer under a quilt for acoustic purposes.
Thanks heaps for your great comment and RL, Missy. Super stoked you liked the reading so much, that means a lot coming from one of most favourite spoken word poets.
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This is both a fantastic read and listen, Case.
While I understand the production preferences of music, and yours was perfectly done with the voice dominating the resonance, it distracted from your voice somewhat. Again, this is just a personal preference.
As far as the read, your clarity and infused emotion seemed to center on syllabic emphasis, particularly the more tender aspects of the relationship with Juliet. The more masculine tone centered around the protective nature of a male over a female, as well as the combat references.
The varying degrees of range in the read were indicative of changing moments and fleeting thoughts infusing into the other, before separating to traverse the dimensions if the next. Reflection, experience, and anticipation all weaved together define the essence of both the poem and read.
Well done, good sir.
While I understand the production preferences of music, and yours was perfectly done with the voice dominating the resonance, it distracted from your voice somewhat. Again, this is just a personal preference.
As far as the read, your clarity and infused emotion seemed to center on syllabic emphasis, particularly the more tender aspects of the relationship with Juliet. The more masculine tone centered around the protective nature of a male over a female, as well as the combat references.
The varying degrees of range in the read were indicative of changing moments and fleeting thoughts infusing into the other, before separating to traverse the dimensions if the next. Reflection, experience, and anticipation all weaved together define the essence of both the poem and read.
Well done, good sir.
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Well, Ahavati... I was thinking the same thing before I put music to the reading. Music can contribute to the mood of a poem reading, but music can also hide a lot of sins in a poor recording or reading. I think this was the first time I felt confident in my reading to stand alone. So I've made an unplugged version for all you diehard bareback spoken word poets. :)
https://youtu.be/le0ZO2izd0Y
Thanks heaps for your honest feedback.
https://youtu.be/le0ZO2izd0Y
Thanks heaps for your honest feedback.
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16th Apr 2017 5:38pm
While I'm a music lover, I'm also a poetry lover. And while they sometimes dance gracefully together (like when I'm writing but never when reading a book), this version is a solid gold A Capella that needs nothing but itself. Thanks for the listen.
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Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
16th Apr 2017 1:54am
The video could serve as one of those ASMR videos on YouTube! Deep, husky, half-whispering manly voice talking about love and sex... Daaaamn... *knees turn to jelly* Lyrically, of course, the text of the poem is rich and powerful.
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Thank you for introducing me to the world of ASMR. I watched a 40 minute video of a woman whispering into a mic trying to get me to sleep, somehow I was drooling on my pillow but I was still awake.
Thanks heaps for the great comment, Jack. I'm stoked your knees turned to jelly.
Thanks heaps for the great comment, Jack. I'm stoked your knees turned to jelly.
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I'm sitting here on my verandah on Easter Sunday where the weather doesn't know what the bloody hell it's doing applauding you case...this is genius and i have to mention a bit of a turn on as well. I'll leave it to Ahavati and Missy to critique, they'd do a better job then me. All I can I say is i know when something creative, whatever it is, resonates deep within me and this does. I bloody hope you share it on other platforms. Great work case. Thoroughly enjoyed listening to it, now I've just got to get your voice out of my head or nothing will get done today... 😉
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I've never liked the sound of my voice and never thought it was like a switch, so I'll have to take your word for it regarding the resultant effects... but "other platforms" what kind of poetic whore do you think I am? DU is my whorehouse.
Thanks heaps, Kate, for the great feedback and RL. I'm just stoked that you potentially got nothing done last weekend.
Thanks heaps, Kate, for the great feedback and RL. I'm just stoked that you potentially got nothing done last weekend.
Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
16th Apr 2017 2:08am
I don't think I've ever been more impressed by spoken word than by this one... ah, your voice! It gives so much depth to this poem, which is truly outstanding! I can see you put a lot of thought into it...
It has a vulnerable and dark feel to it, that is almost haunting (it made me listen to it several times)
As said above, the repetition of "I couldn't tell the difference anymore" makes this piece really strong...
"no one knows the mess of me
the mess of love" > love these lines, isn't that the essence?
I'm really not that good at commenting, but to me this is a masterpiece!
Can't believe I didn't encounter you before, but will definitely read more of you...
It has a vulnerable and dark feel to it, that is almost haunting (it made me listen to it several times)
As said above, the repetition of "I couldn't tell the difference anymore" makes this piece really strong...
"no one knows the mess of me
the mess of love" > love these lines, isn't that the essence?
I'm really not that good at commenting, but to me this is a masterpiece!
Can't believe I didn't encounter you before, but will definitely read more of you...
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Im blown away by your comment, so you can't say you're not that good at commenting.
Thank you, Duende, for your kind words, the RL and for following me.
Thank you, Duende, for your kind words, the RL and for following me.
Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
16th Apr 2017 3:31am
all of words are spoken in a lover's gaze
& leave us no more words for praise
(& in a poem too)...
& leave us no more words for praise
(& in a poem too)...
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21st Apr 2017 3:40pm
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16th Apr 2017 6:35am
I love the meaningful lines and theme in this, I like, ' watch glorious red poems spray over sweaty torsos ' , so primal and I like how it sounds, the video is amazing...
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21st Apr 2017 3:45pm
Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
16th Apr 2017 5:15pm
Applause.....APPPLAUSE........A P P L A U S E......!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Alexander, to echo...and re-echo all the well-deserved praise above....what more can i say, except.....
Rise and a take a bow, my Friend!!!
( I am in the front row....and the first to begin the standing ovation!!)
Alexander, to echo...and re-echo all the well-deserved praise above....what more can i say, except.....
Rise and a take a bow, my Friend!!!
( I am in the front row....and the first to begin the standing ovation!!)
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21st Apr 2017 3:48pm
Echantress, you honour me with such high praise... and I'm stoked you're standing in the front row.
Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
16th Apr 2017 6:47pm
I have always believed that most poetry is much enhanced by being read out loud - this is a perfect example of this - excellent poetry, well read - I would love to be able to do the same - my voice is not great, it lacks depth and conviction unlike yours, full of power and gravitas :-)
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Thank you for your kind words, Mr Macleod... the funny is, most often I don't like hearing the sound of my voice.
Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
Anonymous
17th Apr 2017 1:23am
You made passion and wants flow through me.
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21st Apr 2017 4:01pm
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Anonymous
23rd Apr 2017 10:47am
See how my emotions an thought runs away with me? That was a horrifying scattered comment, was it not? lol
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Re: Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
24th Apr 2017 2:07pm
If my poem can make you feel only a thousandth of the moods you feel per minute, and if you make me laugh in response to your comment... it's because I am merely humbled that I was responsible for a fraction of you are capable of feeling.
Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
20th Apr 2017 5:05pm
I like both recordings. I love love love music as much as poetry, so to have both invading my ears and mind at the same time is a massage for all of my senses when done so well (I do insist on quality and you always give 100% on both)
Fabulous Alexander, your voice has always been intoxicating in your audios and your video creations always top rate. I never feel disappointed, and like Missy, Clockwork Orange was one of your best and this one is up there with it.
I'm lounging on my sofa wrapped in faux fur, indulging my ear drums. :)
Fabulous Alexander, your voice has always been intoxicating in your audios and your video creations always top rate. I never feel disappointed, and like Missy, Clockwork Orange was one of your best and this one is up there with it.
I'm lounging on my sofa wrapped in faux fur, indulging my ear drums. :)
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There's nothing like being one with the faux, whilst indulging in the sound of poetry.
Thanks heaps for your awesome feedback and RL add, Magdalena.
Thanks heaps for your awesome feedback and RL add, Magdalena.
Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
25th Apr 2017 5:27am
the branch-off from the classic "Romeo & Juliet" is quite entertaining. though your poem felt long.
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7th May 2017 3:04am
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1st May 2017 00:08am
I am left speechless except for this: Im not a fan of spoken word, but this was by far thee best one for my virgin ears. Consider this cherry pooped. I would add it to my list however my list wont let me! <3
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7th May 2017 3:12am
Sounds like my spoken word was like a wet willy, eww! Thanks heaps for your [amusing] cherry comment, mysteriouslady.
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10th May 2017 1:03am
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15th Aug 2017 2:48pm
I know... I was just amusing myself, I guess, because your comment made me chuckle. Peace be with you too.
Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
10th May 2017 1:45am
I love seeing a time honored theme re-imagined. These were my favorite bits. "dull like a silver spoon"
"her nipples embossed
my fingertips read
she was cold"
"i step back into the ring
to exchange my iron heart for heavy fists"
"smugness smeared from the cocky face
of a boxer dancing with his shadow"
Good work here. Great reading to boot.
"her nipples embossed
my fingertips read
she was cold"
"i step back into the ring
to exchange my iron heart for heavy fists"
"smugness smeared from the cocky face
of a boxer dancing with his shadow"
Good work here. Great reading to boot.
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Re. romeo alpha male and juliet
27th May 2017 3:08am
Absolutely beautiful Case
I too am not a fan of spoken word but you made this really entertaining and i felt every word you spoke...
Excellent story and great music to go with it..
I too am not a fan of spoken word but you made this really entertaining and i felt every word you spoke...
Excellent story and great music to go with it..
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