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Raven
you reach into my darkness
touch my tender spots
with the caress of your poetic voice
*
a gentle lilt
that eases over my soul
I'm at ease in your luscious breeze
*
you visit at midnight
with hints of seduction
take away all my pain
*
when the chill
of the raven colored night
washes over me
with melancholy
*
this is when
I see your sexy silhouette
in my mind's eye
*
I'm aroused by your carnality
you hunger to eat my hurt
cast it in the abyss
*
beautiful poetic lass
desired by many
loved by me
*
the seductress of my heart
you tame my beasts
with sensual ease
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Re. Raven
7th Jan 2017 11:11pm
The love with which this flowed is very soothing. It warms my heart to know you have someone who brings you such beauty. You are worthy of all things loving and good, beautiful Brenda ☺
Willow
Willow
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Re: Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 2:17am
thank you lovely Willow.. Taryn brings out the softer side of me with the love she shows me.. I get quite sad at times and she always reaches into the darkness and brings me out of it..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. Raven
7th Jan 2017 11:19pm
I feel like this is for Taryn. A worthy tribute to a poetic sisterhood that entwines loyalty with compassion and the desire to ease the suffering of each other.
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Re: Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 2:18am
thank you Sage one it is indeed for our lovely Taryn she is a beautiful soul as are you..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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8th Jan 2017 2:19am
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8th Jan 2017 00:41am
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8th Jan 2017 2:20am
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8th Jan 2017 3:55am
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Anonymous
8th Jan 2017 2:44am
Sweet Crim........what an honorable tribute to Taryn.......I see where both of you pull each other out of the darkness......that's what "Sisters" do for each other.......sacred bond between the two of you can't help be noticed.......very inspirational........awesome ink......purple luv & hugs your way xo :)
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Re: Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 3:20pm
thank you lovely Flower she is a very special lady as you are my friend..
love Crim
love Crim
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Anonymous
8th Jan 2017 3:02am
My Beautiful Brenda, you brought me tears while reading this...I am so blessed and honored to have you in my life and be able to call you my friend...we bring out the best in each other and we also support each other whenever needed and I am so grateful for that. I will cherish this and keep is very close to me...
I love you, always and forever...of that I promise you.
xoxo Taryn
I love you, always and forever...of that I promise you.
xoxo Taryn
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Re: Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 3:21pm
my beautiful one to bring you happy tears brings me so much joy.. you have seen me through the darkest days.. I am grateful you feel i've done the same for you.. you are precious to me.. I love you now and always dear one..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 4:35am
I can only hope to have a match like this one day. So beautiful in spirit, drinking eachothers essence through time. Daringly delicious. Perfect ink.
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Re: Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 3:23pm
thank you dearest Lyrical they say love has a way of finding a way I believe you will be blessed as I have in the matters of the heart..
love Crim
love Crim
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Anonymous
8th Jan 2017 5:08am
This is absolutely captivating. 💓
Every word, had me in linger for the next.
Truly love this, Crim.
Beautifully pieced together.
Every word, had me in linger for the next.
Truly love this, Crim.
Beautifully pieced together.
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Re: Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 3:24pm
thank you lovely Heart for such a beautiful comment it is Taryn that has captivated me :)
love Crim
love Crim
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8th Jan 2017 7:40am
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8th Jan 2017 3:25pm
thank you graciously dearest Mcjay for such a beautiful comment bringing me smiles :)
love Crim
love Crim
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Re: Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 3:26pm
thank you beautiful Amelia yes this began as poetic love and became an unbreakable bond..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 9:21am
Such a soulful and touching tribute, Crimsin;
your lovely words grace the page...
your lovely words grace the page...
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Re: Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 3:27pm
thank you lovely Kasai Taryn brings out the tenderness from a heart that is sometimes hard..
love Crim
love Crim
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8th Jan 2017 11:51am
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Re: Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 3:29pm
thank you dearest Adam she is a very special lady and you are a wonderfully gifted for real writer.. we are gifted with your presence as well..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 3:30pm
delicate seduction, Crim;
it's sparkling poetry in that particular color...
it's sparkling poetry in that particular color...
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Re: Re. Raven
8th Jan 2017 3:34pm
thank you John Taryn gently seduces my heart with her beautiful soul calling me out of my darkness with her tenderness..
love Crim
love Crim
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Anonymous
8th Jan 2017 10:22pm
Lovely words. I would, however, have been tempted to place stanazs 3 & 4 together simply because they read like one phrase, although I know it would look odd:
*
you visit at midnight
with hints of seduction
take away all my pain
when the chill
of the raven coloured night
washes over me
with melancholy
*
*
you visit at midnight
with hints of seduction
take away all my pain
when the chill
of the raven coloured night
washes over me
with melancholy
*
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10th Jan 2017 6:43pm
Re. Raven
9th Jan 2017 9:40pm
It's hard for me to imagine your beasts being fully tamed Crim. The more pernicious ones can go, though. A fine tribute to Lady Taryn. Quoth the raven: "Forevermore"!
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Re: Re. Raven
10th Jan 2017 6:44pm
thank you dearest Sir Crow no I don't suppose they will ever be fully tamed though she does keep them at bay :)
love Crim
love Crim
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10th Jan 2017 5:55am
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10th Jan 2017 6:45pm
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10th Jan 2017 7:01am
I don't have the words to describe how utterly beautiful this is!
That lasta stanza took my breath away, such a beautiful ode to a beautiful woman!
You two really bring out the best in each other!
Love, Duende
That lasta stanza took my breath away, such a beautiful ode to a beautiful woman!
You two really bring out the best in each other!
Love, Duende
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10th Jan 2017 6:46pm
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10th Jan 2017 12:18pm
To find someone to be able to take away your pain, now that is something.
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10th Jan 2017 6:46pm
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10th Jan 2017 6:12pm
Darkly beautiful - you really are a master of this - I read it wishing I had the skill and passion to write it :-)
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Re: Re. Raven
10th Jan 2017 6:47pm
aw thank you David you're too kind and I wish I as clever as you :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
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10th Jan 2017 11:47pm
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12th Jan 2017 10:02am
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11th Jan 2017 7:37am
This is a knock out Crim. I loved every line.
Wish I had more words for you, but truly wonderful 🤗
Wish I had more words for you, but truly wonderful 🤗
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Re: Re. Raven
12th Jan 2017 10:03am
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Anonymous
14th Jan 2017 2:29am
Brenda.. such beauty in darkness, seeking light.. loved this, and love you!!
Dave
Dave
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14th Jan 2017 4:51pm
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14th Jan 2017 7:30pm
Mutha M'effer, mmm!
I am so toast'd & liquidy
my ladyloves.. . you are
so good, my gawd this
was tangible.. .for me it
was..
I love et miss you!
-Howlings
I am so toast'd & liquidy
my ladyloves.. . you are
so good, my gawd this
was tangible.. .for me it
was..
I love et miss you!
-Howlings
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15th Jan 2017 2:37am
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24th Jan 2017 5:14pm
Can definitely feel the love in this piece. And the imagery and flow is suberb. Some damn fine ink you have there
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26th Jan 2017 5:38pm