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Tuesday Evening
Her thighs are pressed tightly against my face as She trembles
i taste Her lovely flavor more
and i salivate more
the thought of Her pleasure arouses my blood cells—and they rush to the gathering place
She breathes deeply and eases Her scissor grip
Her thighs just the right amount of chafed by my evening stubble
She whispers affirmation
i take a breath
Her scent allures
my animal brain takes complete control now
as She wriggles i feel Her abdomen under my hand contract and relax
my tongue, flat, lingers…
i feel Her gently tug my hair
i feel the curve of Her soft foot resting delightfully on my bare back
Her toes curling lightly into my skin
Her fingers curl into my arms and She beckons me to come up to Her.
i oblige.
i taste Her lovely flavor more
and i salivate more
the thought of Her pleasure arouses my blood cells—and they rush to the gathering place
She breathes deeply and eases Her scissor grip
Her thighs just the right amount of chafed by my evening stubble
She whispers affirmation
i take a breath
Her scent allures
my animal brain takes complete control now
as She wriggles i feel Her abdomen under my hand contract and relax
my tongue, flat, lingers…
i feel Her gently tug my hair
i feel the curve of Her soft foot resting delightfully on my bare back
Her toes curling lightly into my skin
Her fingers curl into my arms and She beckons me to come up to Her.
i oblige.
Published 5th Nov 2016
| Edited 9th Sep 2017
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Anonymous
5th Nov 2016 7:01pm
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5th Nov 2016 7:26pm
Thanks for the critique. Perhaps it is only the center...I may have to revisit some day and look for the rest.
Anonymous
18th Jul 2017 5:11pm
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27th Sep 2017 3:49am
It's Tuesday dawn here in England as I read - a good fantasy for tonight! "The gathering place" is already getting warmed up by the read alone!
Perhaps there is a bigger picture to be spun, as your first critique implies, of which you imply this scene is the centre piece, but I won't press you for it - let the prequel/sequel come if/when it forms.
Perhaps there is a bigger picture to be spun, as your first critique implies, of which you imply this scene is the centre piece, but I won't press you for it - let the prequel/sequel come if/when it forms.
