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'Rottin' of the Soul...'
As I rise...
mornin' sun no longer
holds a happy surprise
to the days' eyes...
Still I lie...
in a state of decay
hopes n' dreams
snailin' away...
Holdin' fast to beguiled
desires, as fruitlessly
futile as 'dousin' oil on a fire...
Like the eponym for need
wallowin' within the depths
to feed, though the carcass
of excess only leads to distress...
For now, all that's left are fragmented morsels of 'afflatus
dust' that regurgitates n' replays
this 'ache-my-spirit' thrusts...
mornin' sun no longer
holds a happy surprise
to the days' eyes...
Still I lie...
in a state of decay
hopes n' dreams
snailin' away...
Holdin' fast to beguiled
desires, as fruitlessly
futile as 'dousin' oil on a fire...
Like the eponym for need
wallowin' within the depths
to feed, though the carcass
of excess only leads to distress...
For now, all that's left are fragmented morsels of 'afflatus
dust' that regurgitates n' replays
this 'ache-my-spirit' thrusts...
Published 21st Sep 2016
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21st Sep 2016 1:32pm
21st Sep 2016 9:00pm
Thank you K...was startin to think I lost your interest...appreciate you still supporting me :)
21st Sep 2016 9:52pm
Anonymous
21st Sep 2016 3:46pm
oh pikm, i did notice that you're not much on(line) and if on, you're not that much on ;)
hope its just a stage, a cycle and things will not seem so dim, xoxo sending your way.
hope its just a stage, a cycle and things will not seem so dim, xoxo sending your way.
21st Sep 2016 9:01pm
I'll take every hug you got... Of course in person would be more comforting lol. Grateful for all your support though my sweetness :)
21st Sep 2016 6:35pm
This is painfully brilliant... or brilliantly painful...
The first and the second stanza have such a good sound going on, the last one is just smashing!
I feel you on this one, Poetik! Sending hugs your way...
The first and the second stanza have such a good sound going on, the last one is just smashing!
I feel you on this one, Poetik! Sending hugs your way...
21st Sep 2016 9:03pm
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23rd Sep 2016 1:16am
21st Sep 2016 11:04pm
This is a deep ponder, seems to me about the dark night of the soul. I find that light is ever the more brilliant after a deep plunge into darkness. The final stanza is quite impressive. I love where you say afflatus dust especially. Lends the whole a visceral quality. Drawing ragged breaths, choked with dust. Namaste.
22nd Sep 2016 11:29am
You my brother are far too kind, I truly
am grateful for your wonderful commentary n your continued support. :)
am grateful for your wonderful commentary n your continued support. :)
23rd Sep 2016 6:33am
23rd Sep 2016 8:01am
Lol uhm maybe! lol thanks bro. Good to hear from u again n appreciated as always :)
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26th Sep 2016 6:08am
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26th Sep 2016 12:10pm
Well u know how it is sweetheart...sometimes one just had to gut it out... Thank you for all your support always :)
10th Nov 2016 7:17pm
11th Nov 2016 1:29am
Aaaawww... N ur comment touched my heart! Thank you sweetheart deeply grateful... :)
