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Slipping Sideways
my will to live is slipping
once I thought this essence
inside us a fairy tale
I feel it fading now
grains in a hour glass
draining out quickly
my energy seeping into the sidewalk
the sun on my back barely casting a shadow
I'm a ghost of myself
grasping the air
searching for a place to hold on
something to put me back on solid ground
feeling the world shake beneath me
seeking to cast me off
like a bucking bull
weary of this wild ride
tired and bored with this life
my soul letting go before my body is cold
tomorrow is another day to die
today I choose life
harden up I tell myself
stare down that black hole
that seeks to suck you in
fuck it do what it takes
I'm going to live!
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 28th Jun 2016
| Edited 28th Jul 2016
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Re. Slipping Sideways
Anonymous
28th Jun 2016 5:30pm
had me by the heart the whole time, so glad it ended as it did.
You know I suffer from mental illness and I go through these same battles because of that.
I found this piece hitting some very personal notes.
Expertly expressed, dear Brenda
much love to you beautiful soul xoxo
You know I suffer from mental illness and I go through these same battles because of that.
I found this piece hitting some very personal notes.
Expertly expressed, dear Brenda
much love to you beautiful soul xoxo
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28th Jun 2016 5:45pm
thank you lovely Miki yes it's depression I'm sure..
feeling for you that you know what this feels like..
big hugs lovely one..
love Brenda
feeling for you that you know what this feels like..
big hugs lovely one..
love Brenda
Re. Slipping Sideways
28th Jun 2016 5:54pm
Determination and resolve instinctively take control
and hold up a weary spirit under the weight of the world.
You love is stronger than depression wants you to think.
Excellent beacon for others, Crim. Isn't that the meaning
of poetry? A light unto the world such as this?
and hold up a weary spirit under the weight of the world.
You love is stronger than depression wants you to think.
Excellent beacon for others, Crim. Isn't that the meaning
of poetry? A light unto the world such as this?
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28th Jun 2016 6:05pm
thank you sage one you're right I feel much better today..
I hope this write if nothing else let's others know that they aren't alone in feeling this..
it's scary feeling and one you don't understand until you've felt it..
love Crim
I hope this write if nothing else let's others know that they aren't alone in feeling this..
it's scary feeling and one you don't understand until you've felt it..
love Crim
Re. Slipping Sideways
28th Jun 2016 5:59pm
Loved this one very, VERY much Brenda . . .
The internal search is something I have been doing for years . . .
You had me feeling bad about the outcome of this, until . . .
the very last line. YES! "I'm going to live!" was music to my old ears.
The internal search is something I have been doing for years . . .
You had me feeling bad about the outcome of this, until . . .
the very last line. YES! "I'm going to live!" was music to my old ears.
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28th Jun 2016 6:07pm
thank you Jerry was just experiencing some scary feelings yesterday..
fought through it and am feeling much better today..
thought I would write it out and let people who feel this that they aren't alone..
love Brenda
fought through it and am feeling much better today..
thought I would write it out and let people who feel this that they aren't alone..
love Brenda
Re: Re. Slipping Sideways
28th Jun 2016 7:28pm
Good to hear, and you did good airing it out.
There are some who need, and maybe will, read it.
There are some who need, and maybe will, read it.
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28th Jun 2016 10:33pm
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28th Jun 2016 6:43pm
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Re. Slipping Sideways
Anonymous
28th Jun 2016 8:33pm
I love a happy ending, but have nothing to offer but prayer for the rest.
I do not understand such feelings but still feel so much for those that do!
This spirit is always hear to lend an ear, and would do anything to bring a smile if I had the power.
Very powerful write!
I do not understand such feelings but still feel so much for those that do!
This spirit is always hear to lend an ear, and would do anything to bring a smile if I had the power.
Very powerful write!
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28th Jun 2016 10:28pm
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Re. Slipping Sideways
28th Jun 2016 11:33pm
I was feeling this way last week and your poem brought it all back but not in a bad way. I'm happy I got through it and you should be too. We're definitely not alone on these feelings, but we are blessed that we can write about them. Others, unfortunately don't have a healthy outlet.
I hope you always write your way out of pain.
I hope you always write your way out of pain.
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Re: Re. Slipping Sideways
29th Jun 2016 2:35pm
thank you only sorry you were feeling this way..
I too am grateful for being able to write out these feelings..
love Crim
I too am grateful for being able to write out these feelings..
love Crim
Re. Slipping Sideways
Anonymous
29th Jun 2016 00:46am
Now that's the spirit, live for today, enjoy every minute and tomorrow will take care of itself.
I feel depression is something that will never go away, sometimes it takes one little thing to trigger and unfortunately that black hole seems bottomless and the light no where in sight, but you've done it before Brenda, you can do it, you're a survivor xo
I feel depression is something that will never go away, sometimes it takes one little thing to trigger and unfortunately that black hole seems bottomless and the light no where in sight, but you've done it before Brenda, you can do it, you're a survivor xo
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29th Jun 2016 2:36pm
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29th Jun 2016 1:23am
embrace the ghost, & dance her across a shining terrace.
vigilant poetry, Crim...
vigilant poetry, Crim...
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29th Jun 2016 2:37pm
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Anonymous
29th Jun 2016 9:53pm
Sideways slipped...
better than the fall
resident crypt
depressions squall
existence choice
the struggles of light
dementia's voice
hither come in spite
<3 dkruie
better than the fall
resident crypt
depressions squall
existence choice
the struggles of light
dementia's voice
hither come in spite
<3 dkruie
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Anonymous
29th Jun 2016 11:06pm
Precious Crim......you've made me speechless......thank you for the sexy smile......mmmmmm.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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30th Jun 2016 4:56am
Re. Slipping Sideways
Anonymous
30th Jun 2016 6:47pm
Woman this is some powerfulness
adored.
..I'm breathless, actually cannot
capture the words for the feeling
youve transferred within this
elasticity for the soul.
Love it a lot. oh wow.
heart hitting and tugging
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adored.
..I'm breathless, actually cannot
capture the words for the feeling
youve transferred within this
elasticity for the soul.
Love it a lot. oh wow.
heart hitting and tugging
-
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1st Jul 2016 00:37am
Re. Slipping Sideways
30th Jun 2016 10:36pm
It's a struggle but you survive.
"feeling the world shake beneath me
seeking to cast me off
like a bucking bull"
You're more of a Valkyrie than a victim Crim. Sounds like a wild ride, possibly a thrill if you don't lose your grip. And you're the one on top, bucking bull or no. "I'm going to live!" is a cry of triumph and fitting end. Well done!
"feeling the world shake beneath me
seeking to cast me off
like a bucking bull"
You're more of a Valkyrie than a victim Crim. Sounds like a wild ride, possibly a thrill if you don't lose your grip. And you're the one on top, bucking bull or no. "I'm going to live!" is a cry of triumph and fitting end. Well done!
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Re. Slipping Sideways
2nd Jul 2016 8:43pm
WOW! - just exactly where I was some 5 weeks ago - so accurate it could have been written about me - you are forever the consumate wordsmith - this really touched me deeply - I am so glad we are both choosing to live - my turning point was that there were a few people out there that genuinely cared for me and would have been hurt by my passing. I owe a debt of gratitude to certain family members and several DU members - I hope you realise that you are much loved and respected here - I feel both :-)
sending the warmest of ehugs :-)
sending the warmest of ehugs :-)
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6th Jul 2016 5:54pm
I feel for you that this is where you've been David big hugs to you my friend..
hang in there will get through it..
love Brenda
hang in there will get through it..
love Brenda
Re. Slipping Sideways
Anonymous
2nd Jul 2016 11:30pm
Brenda.. once again i love it when you let loose.. you're the toughest lady i've ever known.. and you will conquer.. because that's what you do.. into my list it goes.. i love you..
Dave
Dave
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Re. Slipping Sideways
4th Jul 2016 9:10am
always profound & powerful, beautiful one
you had me by the heartstrings
xoxox
you had me by the heartstrings
xoxox
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Re. Slipping Sideways
5th Jul 2016 8:53pm
I know this feeling, this state of being and yep that's when depression is trying to take hold and sometimes we can fight back and other times we just lay down defeated and let the darkness run its course.... I find my self sinking, but I'm fighting... Nice write.
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6th Jul 2016 5:56pm
my heart goes out to you sending love your way..
thank you for the love you've shown me..
xoxo Crim
thank you for the love you've shown me..
xoxo Crim