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12:42AM
What did God turn your drink into?
The question of the night,
Vodka, Rum, Tequila, Red wine
A really good coconut margarita
The music in the background,
She wants to remember
But she can't
She just wants to dance to it
To sway to it
Under the light
Of the full Moon,
In the arms of a man
A real man
But, sadly she can't find one,
She drifts through
The crowd of men and women
All of them looking for something
Searching in the dark
She gives up on the idea
Walks home,
Lights her candles,
Turns on her music,
And dances with herself ...
The question of the night,
Vodka, Rum, Tequila, Red wine
A really good coconut margarita
The music in the background,
She wants to remember
But she can't
She just wants to dance to it
To sway to it
Under the light
Of the full Moon,
In the arms of a man
A real man
But, sadly she can't find one,
She drifts through
The crowd of men and women
All of them looking for something
Searching in the dark
She gives up on the idea
Walks home,
Lights her candles,
Turns on her music,
And dances with herself ...
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22nd May 2016 6:07am
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22nd May 2016 10:39pm
Thank You JohnFeddeler for the read and thoughtful comments ...always appreciated ...
seems to be becoming a trend ... ? did that even make sense ... :)
seems to be becoming a trend ... ? did that even make sense ... :)
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22nd May 2016 7:41am
"You can't always get what you want, but if you try, sometimes you get what you need..."
But sometimes what you want is right under your nose where it is hardest to see...
JJ
But sometimes what you want is right under your nose where it is hardest to see...
JJ
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Re: Re. 12:42AM
22nd May 2016 10:41pm
Thank you JJ for the read and thoughtful comments ... much appreciated ...
under my nose ... yes, you may be right :)
under my nose ... yes, you may be right :)
Re. 12:42AM
22nd May 2016 8:39am
"But, sadly she can't find one,"<--- they usually find you. :) This ink was everything, Je! I was tipsy, feeling good, enjoying the music, watching the crowd in the club-ish light, etc.
I mean, .....you really took me there. Love how you went home and created the same ambience...
I mean, .....you really took me there. Love how you went home and created the same ambience...
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22nd May 2016 10:43pm
Thank You Rain for the read and thoughtful comments ... always appreciated ..
yeah, the ones that find me have been a little scary ... figured it was time to turn the tables :)
Sometimes it's safer just to call it :) ox
yeah, the ones that find me have been a little scary ... figured it was time to turn the tables :)
Sometimes it's safer just to call it :) ox
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22nd May 2016 10:43am
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22nd May 2016 10:45pm
Thank You SatansSperm for the read and thoughtful comments ...
I did sleep ... pretty well :)
I did sleep ... pretty well :)
Re. 12:42AM
22nd May 2016 2:38pm
Lovely expression that started out hopeful, slipped into sad and made me smile in the end ☺
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22nd May 2016 10:46pm
Thank You WillowWhimsies for the read and lovely comments ... much appreciated :)
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Anonymous
22nd May 2016 9:36pm
had many nights like that....
gotta try looking in better places ;)
well penned piece, Jemac
gotta try looking in better places ;)
well penned piece, Jemac
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22nd May 2016 10:37pm
Thank You for the read and thoughtful comments mikimoondancer ... so true, not even sure where I landed sometimes .. this is not where my tribe is ... :)
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Anonymous
23rd May 2016 5:14am
we must be part of the same tribe. LOUD and clear. ;)
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Anonymous
31st May 2016 1:43am
This poem is strange and beautiful and cinematic.[Almost saw it happening]
It pulls and tugs at the right places and announces itself beautifully. Love the balance on display here.
Thanks for the read.
Phoenix
It pulls and tugs at the right places and announces itself beautifully. Love the balance on display here.
Thanks for the read.
Phoenix
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1st Jun 2016 00:53am
Thank You Phoenix for the read and such thoughtful comments ... greatly appreciated ...