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Metaphors
Skin like a silken dream...
Soft as freshly spun cotton
Smooth as alabaster
White like fresh milk
Unkissed by the sun
Pale, nearly translucent
Perfectly flawless, the finest China
Lightly freckled
as if dusted with cinnamon
Flame red hair,
lending its color to her skin as she flushes with desire
Eyes of the brightest emerald
Sparkling in her face
Set above the deepest ruby red lips
as they frame teeth
pearly and straight
Exhaling breath that's cool
And refreshingly sweet
Carrying the intoxicating scent of peach nectar
like a gentle wind through a Southern orchard just as the fruits reach their peak, juice filled ripest
Soft as freshly spun cotton
Smooth as alabaster
White like fresh milk
Unkissed by the sun
Pale, nearly translucent
Perfectly flawless, the finest China
Lightly freckled
as if dusted with cinnamon
Flame red hair,
lending its color to her skin as she flushes with desire
Eyes of the brightest emerald
Sparkling in her face
Set above the deepest ruby red lips
as they frame teeth
pearly and straight
Exhaling breath that's cool
And refreshingly sweet
Carrying the intoxicating scent of peach nectar
like a gentle wind through a Southern orchard just as the fruits reach their peak, juice filled ripest
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Re. Metaphors
16th May 2016 5:26pm
Oh my a very lucid dream indeed, it has an ethereal quality to it, as if whispered. Very, very nice. A keeper :)
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17th May 2016 1:09pm
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16th May 2016 5:32pm
enjoyed this very much so divine a picture you weave with words..
love Crimsin
love Crimsin
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17th May 2016 1:22pm
Oh to be allowed a chance upon your loom.
I truly appreciate the way you spin your tales of submission and satisfaction.
I truly appreciate the way you spin your tales of submission and satisfaction.
Re. Metaphors
16th May 2016 6:53pm
Strong imagery thru a very lightly worded piece, very nicely done :)
Maybe me own OCD playing up but the long last line, tho perfectly worded, doesn't quite sit right with me, but then I wouldn't want to change it either 🤔
Maybe me own OCD playing up but the long last line, tho perfectly worded, doesn't quite sit right with me, but then I wouldn't want to change it either 🤔
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17th May 2016 1:20pm
FreyaJ, welcome back. Nothing OCD about loving order. Besides, no true obsessive would admit that the line is perfect as is, even if a bit off.
Glad to hear from you again.
Folks like you keep me from running off on tangents
Glad to hear from you again.
Folks like you keep me from running off on tangents
Re. Metaphors
16th May 2016 6:59pm
like a gentle wind through a Southern orchard just as the fruits reach their peak, juice filled ripest
You captured that perfectly. And the South Carolina Peach Festival is right around the corner!
You captured that perfectly. And the South Carolina Peach Festival is right around the corner!
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17th May 2016 1:15pm
Ahavati, you keep this up and I'm gonna believe you are "Southern by the Grace of God". You're talented, friendly, and smart enough to know where to get your peaches.
Always good to hear from you
Always good to hear from you
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Anonymous
17th May 2016 10:40am
love this one bro...great description of the redheaded feminine divine and great title as master metaphor displayed throughout and ending with the delightful peach..lol..enjoyed it
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