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Perigee's Black Hole
A rash of stars
embosses the dark
with sputtering wicks.
One trips, plummets
toward the black carpet:
God striking a match,
lighting the white candle,
sage the heavens clean.
I calculate a wish under
a constellation's northern arc.
A slumbering dream cocooned
in limbic archive briefly stirs,
but is quickly magnetized
back into its REM state
by an imperceptive pull
into Perigee’s black hole.
~
NaPoWriMo #8 - thought I'd post a few here periodically.
Published 8th Apr 2016
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8th Apr 2016 5:20pm
Thank you for your support. You're very kind. NaPoWriMo is an intense exercise to say the least, and I'm just leaving it up to the universe to inspire me daily. Other than that...
Again, thank you.
Again, thank you.
8th Apr 2016 6:11pm
8th Apr 2016 6:18pm
8th Apr 2016 6:13pm
I like the pulse of ' a constellations northern arc' . . which .neatly follows ' I calculate a wish under ' . . . . . . . . .' in limbic archive briefly stirs' another line with a pulse I am not a clinician but I believe this is a centre of our emotional system. A thoughtful poem.Ahavati
8th Apr 2016 6:19pm
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8th Apr 2016 7:06pm
Ahavati,
its seems everyday the
UNI=verse sings a different song
to you and each song
you convey shifts me to yet
another mode...
you're a different sort of muse-ician
who uses a pen as her instrument..
its seems everyday the
UNI=verse sings a different song
to you and each song
you convey shifts me to yet
another mode...
you're a different sort of muse-ician
who uses a pen as her instrument..
8th Apr 2016 7:34pm
Its beautiful, and you write it timeless.
And this "black carpet:" as the description
of the fabric of space? is awesome.
And this "black carpet:" as the description
of the fabric of space? is awesome.
9th Apr 2016 3:28am
I had to google what perigee meant.
I thought I knew,
but I wasn't that close..:)
I thought I knew,
but I wasn't that close..:)
9th Apr 2016 6:47am
9th Apr 2016 6:46pm
"A slumbering dream cocooned
in limbic archive briefly stirs, " how beautiful, as is the sum of this, caught up once again in the inescapable force of your poetry...
in limbic archive briefly stirs, " how beautiful, as is the sum of this, caught up once again in the inescapable force of your poetry...
9th Apr 2016 8:10pm
Those intricate spaces of (infinities)which reside in
outre and inner potentiality ,
and I do look forward to its sharing with us as well.
Such attractive aesthetics too. Loving this beaucoup.
The search is inspirational.
-Howlings
outre and inner potentiality ,
and I do look forward to its sharing with us as well.
Such attractive aesthetics too. Loving this beaucoup.
The search is inspirational.
-Howlings
27th Dec 2018 4:17am
there's a bunch of colorful word selection in this. i like when negative words are used to describe something beautiful such as: rash / star.
nice surprise twisting the "one trips, plummets/ toward the black carpet" into a mind/dream journey.
also, excellent use to changing noun/adj into verb- "sage the heavens clean."
fun to re-re-read and see the turns the poem takes. plain enjoyable. thank you.
nice surprise twisting the "one trips, plummets/ toward the black carpet" into a mind/dream journey.
also, excellent use to changing noun/adj into verb- "sage the heavens clean."
fun to re-re-read and see the turns the poem takes. plain enjoyable. thank you.
27th Dec 2018 11:21am
