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A Day Among the Kites
I can't tell what will happen,
being the eye of my own storm
where everything appears calm
in the glare of sunlight above,
the silence of whitecaps below,
thoughts like gulls seeking harbor.
Even the deceptive view
of the kites that beckon me
into the thermals while the tails
chatter in the breeze that echoes
from one cerebral hemisphere
to the other and back again.
Then once more through the eye,
the inviting sea far below
so close to the edge of a
conscience that sleeps in thunder,
Turning in my water wings
when my hands let go.
Published 17th Mar 2016
| Edited 6th Feb 2017
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17th Mar 2016 10:00am
I can't tell what will happen,
being the eye of my own storm, ...
I love this line ... It sets up everything in your piece perfectly, and reminds me - I'm often at the center of my own undoing even when I try to push it off on others ...
Cool piece
being the eye of my own storm, ...
I love this line ... It sets up everything in your piece perfectly, and reminds me - I'm often at the center of my own undoing even when I try to push it off on others ...
Cool piece
*crooked smile*😏
Ah dear Lobo, why does that not surprise me?
And I'm glad to hear from you, to share your insight about the writ, thank you. Honor.
Warmest always,
Jadey🌾
Ah dear Lobo, why does that not surprise me?
And I'm glad to hear from you, to share your insight about the writ, thank you. Honor.
Warmest always,
Jadey🌾
17th Mar 2016 11:17am
I loved that poem when I read in the comp. So glad you shared it here...
Geoff
Geoff
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21st Mar 2016 1:38am
I'm terribly honored, dear Teen, and thank you for the list add.🌻
Jadey ❎
Jadey ❎
21st Mar 2016 8:40pm
Jade, "Being the eye of my own storm." Now that's true ownership. This piece is serene as I imagine you are as well. I saw images of kites but also of ther sacred, colorful flags that blow in the winds of the Himalayas. Brava Jade!
Thank you so much for the imagery you've shared because it's the kind that runs through my mind when I write a poem of this sort. Most honored, dear.
--Jade
--Jade
22nd Mar 2016 11:45am
"from one cerebral hemisphere
to the other, and back again"
This is really beautiful, you should be so proud :)
So far, one of my favorite poems on this site
to the other, and back again"
This is really beautiful, you should be so proud :)
So far, one of my favorite poems on this site
22nd Mar 2016 12:20pm
Thank you very much, dear miss, that's so kind of you to share with me.
And a warm welcome to DUP!
Jade x
And a warm welcome to DUP!
Jade x
