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The Chase
I chased you like a love sick teenager;
on vacation
Prayed for you to burn my skin;
while I just lay there
You showed yourself to me;
too late
It's getting dark out now;
but there you are
You made me forget the day's chase;
giving me a beautiful neon night
Photography by Tommie Lynn
on vacation
Prayed for you to burn my skin;
while I just lay there
You showed yourself to me;
too late
It's getting dark out now;
but there you are
You made me forget the day's chase;
giving me a beautiful neon night
Photography by Tommie Lynn
Published 26th Feb 2016
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26th Feb 2016 8:31pm
Without the pic it would be easy to imagine the poem was about a desired heart throb of a man (the title led me down this track) rather than the sun.
27th Feb 2016 2:49am
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27th Feb 2016 00:34am
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27th Feb 2016 2:50am
27th Feb 2016 9:39am
that kind of beauty leads & you follow, Tommie.
enjoyed the dancing colors...
enjoyed the dancing colors...
12th May 2017 5:33am
I liked this. Without the image, the object being chased could be just about anything, and that's fun.
May I offer a few friendly suggestions? If you remove the semicolons, your poem would flow a little better. They're creating phrase separations in unnecessary places. "Love sick" could be written as "lovesick".
May I offer a few friendly suggestions? If you remove the semicolons, your poem would flow a little better. They're creating phrase separations in unnecessary places. "Love sick" could be written as "lovesick".
