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Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
Nօ օռɛ ɦas ʏɛt tօ tʀaʋɛʟ
Aċʀօss tɦat ʀɛɖ white sɛa
Oʀ քaʀt tɦɛ աaʋɛs օʄ tɦɛ օċɛaռ
Tօ ɢɛt tօ tɦat աaʀʍ ɮʀɛɛʐɛ
Yɛt sɦɛ's ɮɛɢs aռɖ pleads
Cօʟʊʍɮʊs քʟɛasɛ come discover ʍɛ
As sɦɛ ɮʀɛatɦs ʄօʀ tɦɛ ʀɨɢɦt
Tօ ɦɛaʋɛ աɨtɦ քʊʀɛ քassɨօռ
Jaċҡ sքaʀʀօա sɦɛ քʟɛaɖs
Cօʍɛ aռɖ քʟʊռɖɛʀ ʍɛ
Lɨʋɛ ʊք tօ ʏօʊʀ ʀɛքʊtatɨօռ
Oʄ tɦat ռօ ɢօօɖ ɖɛɛɖ
Caʊsɛ sɦɛ ռɛɛɖs tօ ʄɨռaʟʟʏ ʄɛɛʟ ʄʀɛɛ
Sօ ʍʊċɦ ɮօʊռɖ ɨռsɨɖɛ
Sɦɛ's sʊʀɛ tօ ʄaċɛ ɨռsaռɨtʏ
Yɛt sɦɛ աʀɨtɦs ɨռ ɦɛʀ ʍɨռɖ
Faռtasɨʐɨռɢ օʄ ɦօա ɨt sɦօʊʟɖ ʄɛɛʟ
Hɛʀ ɨʍaɢɨռatɨօռ ɨs sօ ʀɛaʟ
Sɦɛ ɮɛɢɨռs tօ ɖʀօառ ɨռ tɦɛ ʍɨʟҡʏ աaʏ
Lօօҡɨռɢ ʊք at tɦɛ staʀs
Bʊt tɦɛʏʀɛ only ɦɨs ɛʏɛs
Nօt ʀɛaʟʟʏ tɦօʊɢɦ
ɮɛċaʊsɛ ռօ օռɛ ɨs tɦɛʀɛ
Bʊt sɦɛ ɖօɛsռ't ċaʀɛ
Sɦɛ ɮɛċօʍɛs a ɦօʀʍօռaʟ ɮɛast
Rʊʍʍaɢɨռɢs tɦʀօʊɢɦ ʄɛʍaռɨռɛ ɛʀɛċtɨօռ
Lօռɢɨռɢ ʄօʀ sաɛɛt ʀɛʟɛasɛ
Hɛr ɦaռɖʏ ʄʀɨɛռɖ
Vɨɮʀatɛ աɨtɦ aռtɨċɨքatɨօռ
Lօռɢ aաaɨtɛɖ աatɛʀ քaʀҡ ʋaċatɨօռ
Eʋɛռ ɦɛʀ ɦaռɖs aʀɛ aʄʀaɨɖ tօ ɖɨʋɛ ɨռ
Fɨռɢɛʀs sօ ʊռʄaʍɨʟɨaʀ
Dօռt ҡռօա աɦɛʀɛ tօ ɮɛɢɨռ
Sɦɛ aʀċɦɛs ɦɛʀ ɮaċҡ
Dɛɛք ɮʀɛatɦɛs ɮaɮʏ
Sʊċҡ ɨt aʟʟ ɨռ
Bօɖʏ sɦattɛʀs
Tօɛs tʊʀռ tօ քɨɢ taɨʟs
Tɦɨs ɨs tɦɛ ɛʀʊքtɨօռ
Sɦɛ's sօ frustratingly ʏɛaʀռɛɖ
Dɛsքɛʀatɛ tօ ɛxքɛʀɨɛռċɛ
Sօʍɛ ɖaʏ աɨtɦ a charming
Sɦɛ's frazzled aռɖ ʄʀaռtɨċ
Fɛɛʟs ċaɢed ɨռ
Rɛքʊռʐɛʟ ʀɛքʊռʐɛʟ
Wɨʟʟ tɦɛʏ ɮɛɢ tօ ɢɛt ɨռ
Tɦɨs stօʀʏ ռɛɛɖs tօ ɛռɖ աɨtɦ a sɨn
Bʊt sօ ʀaʀɛʟʏ ɖօɛs tɦɛ քʀɨռċɛ
Aɨʍ tօ ʀɛsċʊɛ tɦɛ
Twenty something year old virgin
Aċʀօss tɦat ʀɛɖ white sɛa
Oʀ քaʀt tɦɛ աaʋɛs օʄ tɦɛ օċɛaռ
Tօ ɢɛt tօ tɦat աaʀʍ ɮʀɛɛʐɛ
Yɛt sɦɛ's ɮɛɢs aռɖ pleads
Cօʟʊʍɮʊs քʟɛasɛ come discover ʍɛ
As sɦɛ ɮʀɛatɦs ʄօʀ tɦɛ ʀɨɢɦt
Tօ ɦɛaʋɛ աɨtɦ քʊʀɛ քassɨօռ
Jaċҡ sքaʀʀօա sɦɛ քʟɛaɖs
Cօʍɛ aռɖ քʟʊռɖɛʀ ʍɛ
Lɨʋɛ ʊք tօ ʏօʊʀ ʀɛքʊtatɨօռ
Oʄ tɦat ռօ ɢօօɖ ɖɛɛɖ
Caʊsɛ sɦɛ ռɛɛɖs tօ ʄɨռaʟʟʏ ʄɛɛʟ ʄʀɛɛ
Sօ ʍʊċɦ ɮօʊռɖ ɨռsɨɖɛ
Sɦɛ's sʊʀɛ tօ ʄaċɛ ɨռsaռɨtʏ
Yɛt sɦɛ աʀɨtɦs ɨռ ɦɛʀ ʍɨռɖ
Faռtasɨʐɨռɢ օʄ ɦօա ɨt sɦօʊʟɖ ʄɛɛʟ
Hɛʀ ɨʍaɢɨռatɨօռ ɨs sօ ʀɛaʟ
Sɦɛ ɮɛɢɨռs tօ ɖʀօառ ɨռ tɦɛ ʍɨʟҡʏ աaʏ
Lօօҡɨռɢ ʊք at tɦɛ staʀs
Bʊt tɦɛʏʀɛ only ɦɨs ɛʏɛs
Nօt ʀɛaʟʟʏ tɦօʊɢɦ
ɮɛċaʊsɛ ռօ օռɛ ɨs tɦɛʀɛ
Bʊt sɦɛ ɖօɛsռ't ċaʀɛ
Sɦɛ ɮɛċօʍɛs a ɦօʀʍօռaʟ ɮɛast
Rʊʍʍaɢɨռɢs tɦʀօʊɢɦ ʄɛʍaռɨռɛ ɛʀɛċtɨօռ
Lօռɢɨռɢ ʄօʀ sաɛɛt ʀɛʟɛasɛ
Hɛr ɦaռɖʏ ʄʀɨɛռɖ
Vɨɮʀatɛ աɨtɦ aռtɨċɨքatɨօռ
Lօռɢ aաaɨtɛɖ աatɛʀ քaʀҡ ʋaċatɨօռ
Eʋɛռ ɦɛʀ ɦaռɖs aʀɛ aʄʀaɨɖ tօ ɖɨʋɛ ɨռ
Fɨռɢɛʀs sօ ʊռʄaʍɨʟɨaʀ
Dօռt ҡռօա աɦɛʀɛ tօ ɮɛɢɨռ
Sɦɛ aʀċɦɛs ɦɛʀ ɮaċҡ
Dɛɛք ɮʀɛatɦɛs ɮaɮʏ
Sʊċҡ ɨt aʟʟ ɨռ
Bօɖʏ sɦattɛʀs
Tօɛs tʊʀռ tօ քɨɢ taɨʟs
Tɦɨs ɨs tɦɛ ɛʀʊքtɨօռ
Sɦɛ's sօ frustratingly ʏɛaʀռɛɖ
Dɛsքɛʀatɛ tօ ɛxքɛʀɨɛռċɛ
Sօʍɛ ɖaʏ աɨtɦ a charming
Sɦɛ's frazzled aռɖ ʄʀaռtɨċ
Fɛɛʟs ċaɢed ɨռ
Rɛքʊռʐɛʟ ʀɛքʊռʐɛʟ
Wɨʟʟ tɦɛʏ ɮɛɢ tօ ɢɛt ɨռ
Tɦɨs stօʀʏ ռɛɛɖs tօ ɛռɖ աɨtɦ a sɨn
Bʊt sօ ʀaʀɛʟʏ ɖօɛs tɦɛ քʀɨռċɛ
Aɨʍ tօ ʀɛsċʊɛ tɦɛ
Twenty something year old virgin
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Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
9th Dec 2015 6:16pm
...don't worry dragons love virgins......just don't get burnt....nice writing....shows your want.
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10th Dec 2015 4:49pm
Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
I love this fairy tale. I'm interpreting this as a bohemian metaphor (or perhaps some other carribean isle). I liked how you fit in many different aspects of the history in there. The font was a nice added touch as well. I would love to hear your own thoughts on this one day.
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10th Dec 2015 4:49pm
Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
9th Dec 2015 7:50pm
Hhhmmmm... I'm not sure how you
pulled off inking this with those mixed fonts. I admit visually it's unique but it was a lil harder to read... Still for a first crack at erotica it's not bad. A lil 'cleaner'
than what I am used to but hey
at least you showed a willingness
to try n that is what I admire most...
NEVER censor your thoughts my dear...NEVER... :)
pulled off inking this with those mixed fonts. I admit visually it's unique but it was a lil harder to read... Still for a first crack at erotica it's not bad. A lil 'cleaner'
than what I am used to but hey
at least you showed a willingness
to try n that is what I admire most...
NEVER censor your thoughts my dear...NEVER... :)
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Re: Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
10th Dec 2015 4:50pm
Oh man I don't know how I even did that font thing so my apologies for the difficulties. But I'll try not to hold back lol. Thanks...appreciated as always
Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
9th Dec 2015 9:18pm
So glad you didnt fall into the cock and fucking trap that many do when attempting to right erotica - this really works for me it has gentle passion and sensual explosion and it's winningly combined with subtlety - I am really impressed and thoroughly enjoyed reading :-)
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Re: Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
10th Dec 2015 4:58pm
Thank you..I don't have much experience so I can only pull from my lack there of lol...so pg13 lusting for now!! Thank you for reading and comment. Glad you enjoyed it
Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
Anonymous
10th Dec 2015 3:59am
i enjoyed your approach here LM..erotica is not always about the physical act..it can be just a certain mood. .just an expression of desires...which you displayed here quite eloquently
. .so many different avenues to take in regards to this genre...feel free to explore.
. .so many different avenues to take in regards to this genre...feel free to explore.
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Re: Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
10th Dec 2015 4:59pm
Thank you for the encouragement for reading and commenting. Much appreciated !!
Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
Anonymous
11th Dec 2015 5:25pm
lyricalmiss,
don't let your hair down to just anyone who rides by your tower ;-) Enjoy the journey as I/we've enjoyed your wading into the erotica stream ;-) Favorite line was your "waterpark vacation"
tornado
don't let your hair down to just anyone who rides by your tower ;-) Enjoy the journey as I/we've enjoyed your wading into the erotica stream ;-) Favorite line was your "waterpark vacation"
tornado
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Re: Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
11th Dec 2015 5:57pm
Awesome...thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment...I'm glad you enjoyed my first attempt !!
Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
17th Dec 2015 10:04am
damned fine erotica, first attempt or otherwise, miss. it's subtle & classy with a gorgeous romantic theme throughout
much enjoyed
xo
much enjoyed
xo
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21st Dec 2015 4:40am
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Re: Re. Fairytale (first attempt at erotica)
17th Jan 2016 4:07pm
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and enjoy...I had fun writing this from my life prospective....not much experience but I have an idea what I want lol
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4th Mar 2016 7:38pm